Episode 8 – Part 3
Dhaani (present day) : (gets up all by sudden, screaming) Vidya!!!
She breathes loudly remembering her nightmare, brushing her hair, sweat all over her face, and looks on her left side. His small neck snuggling up on his strong shoulder-chest part, his tiny arm covering his neck staying on his other shoulder, his long arm caressing his soft and delicate hair. Admiring her baby’s cuteness, she couldn’t resist and drops her lips mark on his soft back shoulder. The lady then looks for water and falls on the carafe standing on the small table. She takes the quilt off her covered body to get down the bed but she feels something stopping her to move. Looking behind her, she falls on her dress behind held tightly by that tiny and adorable hand. Dhaani smiles and softly kisses on it before taking the sheet and his fingers off her. She reaches the table to drink a cup of water. But she was unaware it wouldn’t be discrete. Her head raised up while drinking, two strong arms delicately caressing her waist, Viplav comes close, half asleep. He lays his head on the woman’s shoulder, which jerks the latter in surprise and makes her look on her left.
Dhaani : (her hand on his crossed arms) Viplav, what are you doing ? (pats his arm) Go and sleep.
Viplav : (eyes closed and with a low and sleepy voice) That’s what I am doing.
Dhaani : On the bed.
Viplav : Then you come also.
Dhaani : I… you first go, I will join in a while.
Viplav breaks his hug and makes her face him.
Viplav : (tired and sleepy eyes) What happened? Why are you so upset?
Dhaani : I am fin…
Viplav : You again had that nightmare right?
Dhaani’s pain was obvious to his eyes that he doesn’t need brightness to see it. He feels her tears and wiping them, he hugs her and drops a kiss of consolation on her soft hair.
Viplav : Did something happen that you want to tell me ?
He feels her nodding her head in “yes” softly and breaks the grip.
Viplav : Don’t cry. Sit!
He makes her sit on the sofa and joins her.
Viplav : Tell me. What happened ?
And Dhaani tells him about the child incident during their comeback, the way she was devastated seeing the little girl, while Viplav was understanding her saddened mood in the car little by little.
Dhaani : When I was seeing that little girl, I couldn’t miss to imagine our own daughter at her place. She was around 7 too.
Viplav : Dhaani, are you mad ?
Dhaani : I didn’t even understand why. But there was certainly one difference that made that child luckier and safe. Because… at least her mother was by her side to guard the kid.
Viplav : Dhaani! Please.. stop blaming yourself.
Dhaani : How shouldn’t I ? I have lost our child. If I were more careful, she wouldn’t have left us but been playing on our laps. (looks down) I am not a good mother.
Viplav : (holds Dhaani’s hand) Stop it Dhaani. Don’t talk nonsense. You are the best wife, the best daugher-in-law, the best daughter and especially the best mother someone could have. (cups her face) And if you mean it so, then I am the culprit. If I hadn’t left you alone, nothing would have happened.
Dhaani : (tears rolling down her cheeks) No Viplav. If you weren’t there, then Dhanush also…
Viplav : (puts his finger on her lips) Shhhh… Don’t say like that.
He looks at their son who was peacefully sleeping alone on the bed.
Viplav : We don’t have our one child with us. But at least, we have our son, and we must care and give attention to him.
He turns his head to look at her.
Viplav : If you still want a proof that you are a good mother, then look at your son. He will tell you.
Dhanush : (sleepy voice) Mumma!
His interpellation made both his parents look at him.
Viplav : See! He cannot remain not reminding you even sleeping. (looks at Dhaani) He loves you a lot Dhaani. Mothers are God for children. And you are Dhanush’s everything. He cannot remain without you. (teasing laugh) Your “laadla”.
Dhaani laughs at his last words and looks at her son emotionally.
Viplav : (holds her hand close to him) And about our daughter, wherever she is, with our blessings, she will certainly be perfect. And we will find her soon. Don’t worry. (kisses on her soft fingers)
Dhanush : (sleepy and waking up, rubbing his eye) Mumma!
Dhaani : (looks at Viplav) Yeah (wipes her tear) coming!
She goes towards the bed and sitting besides her son, she cradles him.
“Aa Le Ke Chaloon Tujhko
Ek Aise Desh Mein”
(what is written as a narration is to imagine while reading the line below)
Dhanush again lays his body on the mattress and turns his face towards his mother’s side.
“Milti Hai Jahaan Khushiyaan
Pariyon Ki Bes Mein
Pariyon Ki Bes Mein”
Viplav wipes his hidden tears discretely and joins them.
“Main Aasmaan Ko Khidkiyon Se
Ghar Mein Laa Doon
Main Aasmaan Ko Khidkiyon Se
Ghar Mein Laa Doon
Saare Ke Saare Taare
Yahan Chun Le La Doon
Sapno Mein Rang Maan Ke
Yoon Hi Bharti Aayi Hoon”
He comes close to the bed and staring at them, he slowly lays on the bed while Dhaani was concentrated on her lullaby cradling softly his arm with her patting hand.
“Har Dard Bhool Jaaoon
Yoon Hi Khel Khel Mein
Har Dard Bhool Jaaoon
Yoon Hi Khel Khel Mein
Milti Hai Jahaan Khushiyaan
Pariyon Ke Bes Mein
Pariyon Ke Bes Mein
Aa Leke Chaloon Tujhko”
She keeps singing cuddling the little one glueing his tiny body in her maternal warmness, while Viplav, his head taking support on his palm, stares at his beautiful wife.
(musical passage)
Dhaani looks at Viplav and questions him why he was looking at her, frowning her eyebrows. He shakes his head in no smiling, making her smile also. Both lay down the bed, fallen into an eyelock, and their hands put on Dhanush’s tummy, fingers struck into each other’s, they are slowly drowned into a deep sleep.
At that same moment, somewhere far from there…
It was very dark in the room and people in the house were peacefully sleeping. We enter a silent room, and furniture and decorations, that were kinda figured out through the dark shadows of the night, made it able to discover the small age of its owner. The little girl’s head only coming out of her sheet, she was trying to sleep with that same peace but her expressions and her gasping in sleep showed it well how tensed her inconscience made her be.
(Echo of a woman talking was heard in her inconscient world)
“Your papa and your brother are gone leaving mumma and Vidu betha in the room to sleep peacefully. So now mumma is fully Vidu baby’s. Now let’s sleep!”
(Echo of a man talking)
“Do you know something ? Papa always wanted a daughter first. And I got you. (sound of cheek being kissed)”
(Echos of people talking)
“Look at her hands. Awww! How adorable and small!”
“Come to naani come to naani!”
The voices hitting her mind, the little girl starts crying unconsciously, and wakes her house members up. Suddenly the door gets open forcefully and lets a tall and quite young woman enter in.
Woman : Gayatri, what is this noise ? Aren’t you sleeping ?
Getting no answer, she turns on the light, which makes the scared girl hides her face under the cover. The woman gets closer to the bed and stands next to the bed, arms crossed.
Woman : Gayatri !
Still no answer, she angrily removes the cover from her, to fall on the sweaty and crying baby face.
Woman : Again?
She forcefully holds her arm and makes the child sit on the bed.
Gayatri : Ouch! Mom!
The woman makes her stand on the ground and takes her somewhere, tightly holding her wrist, which hurts her soft skin.
Gayatri : Mom it hurts.
Shamli Rani : Shush! Enough of your naughtiness.
Both walking in the windy darkness, they reach a small house behind the mahal they came out from. They knock at the door and soon, it was getting opened from inside, letting a late-twenties lady coming out. Seeing her superior, she gets curious, and tensed when noticing the child with her.
Woman : Madam, what happened?
Shamli Rani : Shanta, just take care of this girl. She keeps crying in her sleep.
She handovers the little girl in a sudden and fast gesture and the young nanny takes her with her inside while the harsh mother goes from there.
Shanta : (lifts Gayatri in her arms) My sweet Gayu baby! What happened ? Why were you crying ?
Gayatri : (wiping her tears) Shanta di… I … I …
Shanta : Alright alright! (makes Gayatri lay on her shoulder) Now no more tears ok? (caresses her back) Gayu baby is going to sleep with Shanta di today. (smiles)
She swings left to right cradling the little thing. And slowly the latter gets drawn into a peaceful sleep while Shanta looks on sad.
Shanta : (thinks in her mind, lullabying the child) How can a mother be so harsh with such an adorable girl? Is it even humane to blame her ?
Gayatri : (sleeping) Mom!
Shanta pats softly on her back and makes her lay on her small bed, before turning off the lights and joining her Gayu baby besides her.
Precap – Shalini’s baby shower function.
Thanks for reading. Keep commenting and telling your views.
Hi guys! How have you been all?
I am so happy there have been many new posts lately but still many are missing. I don’t force them to post but just a small common message that I miss them all truly…
For all who were waiting for Baarish’s next update, let me tell you that I am gonna take some time to post it as I have to make some changes and I have more in stores for the other stories. So, sorry for the “Baarish”‘s followers.
Hopefully you liked this episode. Please tell what you think and what you feel it must be changed or addeed or completely erased from the story.
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With lots of love!
11 Comments
Shruthy D…. I loved every bit of the 1st part of the episode though it was heart wrenching….
Those words of viplav filled with consolation for his lovely wife….. ❤️❤️ To imagine,..and then I go to the dream land….Dreammode on….. Someone in my life who might or might not be like Mishal but has to be like Viplav????
Loved every layer of emotions…and had wide smile on my face…
And the lullaby…..AA LEKE CHALOON TUJHKO….. Heard it in Naamkaran Serial promo …. Loved the song …and here apt for the moment ??
And 2nd part… Gayatri…. Is she Dhaani’s lost daughter??
Or not….
By god’s grace she has loving nanny besides her…. Otherwise her mother seems so cruel… Heartless ….
Completely opposite of Dhaani…Ye koun hai???
Looking forward for next part dear….keep rocking like this
Awww thank you so much. Glad you liked though it was very sad.
He is so caring na. Any of his gestures are such comfort for her.
I wish you get such a husband who is as caring and fantastic as Viplav. <3 Thathaasthu!
I love that song. That's what caught me while going through the promo. Have you ever heard the version with Palak Mucchal? It's the entire lullaby and MY GAWWWD, it will make you cry. The way she interpreted the feelings through the lyrics. NO WORDS! And so, as I don't know other Hindi lullabies, I used it.
Gayatri is a child whose identity will be known dheere dheere :p
Haan crual mummy, and thank God she has Shanta with her 🙂
Oh-So-Amazing start MAYN!!! ??? You have crafted the first half So Breathtakingly Awe-inspiring !! ? I’m literally awestruck with that night scene specifies. Every movement occurring in that room was defined Like.. God! I don’t even have words to actually explain what I felt. ? Was beyond excellence! ?
And while controlling my butterflies, I should better land on the main track. Kay, So! I’m relieved to know that the couple is on the same page on the matter. I was wondering if they’d have been blaming each other for the mishap, most certainly was afraid from Dhaani’s side. Thank goodness she doesn’t hold Viplav responsible for the loss.
I would definitely second Viplav’s words, one should always stay happy with what they have, be thankful to God in every situation. And as it’s a fiction, then surely they’ll gonna trace their daughter, and that’ll gonna be interesting to read!
Next, achanak sey like all of a sudden you connected us to the missing personality itself, woah, again epic momentum created following the real heartfelt echoes! Poor baby! Though was little surprising that she gets flashes bits of her born day events in her sleep. But still, since it falls in the fictional zone, so ya, it did impact me.
Somewhere in the corner of my brain, I was already smelling a cruel guardian figure may enter the frame and that did happened!
That so called mother fills the vacancy of ‘ Ugly Character ‘ in the story.
Making it short, I’m simply back in the story with a new uber energetic spirit to catch up the coming story!
I was thinking about that only.. But chalo will wait more to get that innovated Baarish updates, also till you are giving us these masterpiece, we have no regrets. ?
Let me tell you that I was reading your comment in the train and people around me would have understood I was reading some boyfriend’s sweet messages. I was smiling all the way. xD
Your words truly make me blush me xD bas bhi kar!
Don’t worry, I wouldn’t bring misunderstandings between ViDha in that way. They already suffered a lot of stupid misunderstandings.
Haan same here. We must not ignore what we have for what we don’t. But well, it’s still a child, not an object so emotions are certainly there in both hearts. You mean that if this was real, they wouldn’t find or at least search for the girl.
Glad you appreciate that sudden change of location and introduction of that character.
She doesn’t see them, but hear. It’s like the hidden memories her small brain recorded and often come out in her inconscience as dreams. And they impact her way much that she starts crying, but child, she doesn’t really try to figure them out. I am bad at philosophy and psychology but still tried something in that subject.
LOL all characters must not be positive, mazaa nahin hoga story mein. Something sadist, villanous…
Awww that’s so cute. *bows down*
Yeah very sorry. I think I have to make some changes in what was already written. Will try my level best to come back soon with better “Baarish” updates.
HAHA! Okay. That’s funny. ? Till now I was supposedly a Girlfriend for many of My- Girlfriends but this comment got me to another space. ? I hope your travelmates didn’t disturb your readings with their gaze. ?
Dude? Are you ordering me to stop praising the worthy things? Well, you know, you can’t do that! ? *Voice of Readers community* ?
Like yet another time I made it confusing to you. ? I meant, if it would have been in real life then they would have had tried a lot to find their daughter but obviously if they didn’t have got her then in reality none can imagine to get that missing person back after so many years.. Like miracles ki bhi aik limit hoti hai. ? Han but obviously, their longing and Duaas won’t stop. ( And I want you to, silently achay buchon ke jesey, try and understand what I just right, cause I only don’t know how to explain in simple words.. So, I guess, everything is sort out now, on this matter. ?? )
Ah. Yeah, yeah. I definitely, know echoes mean echoes only, not the movie. ? That girl is indeed blessed woth sharp memory yet challenging destiny. Well, I’m way too weak in that term, I don’t even remember what I had in lunch today. ? Oh , but like always, you didn’t leave any flaw in describing that scene. ?
HAHA. Yes! Even Disney Princesses have faced same sort of aunties in disguise of Parent. ?
Oh, don’t be. We are Okay with these updates, till you get that done! 🙂
AYOOO!! You are still my girlfr… I mean my girl friend. But you know that …
Oh well leave it,useless talks of mine as always.
YES YOU GOT IT RIGHT! XD
Haan but sorry for making you understand. But yeah now I got it clearly.
And yeah it’s not always realistic…
LOL yeah she is a super child. And I have the same problem like you. But thanks and glad you liked the description.
Haha sauteli maah…
HAHA. I do. ?
Oh yes. Things in real world too get dramatic sometimes though. You never know what lies in future, so ya, imagining out of the box is a good sign of healthy brain, I say. ?
Dude, obviously! She has to be super-gal like her Parents! And after all she is getting the powers in heritage from her parents na? ? First they faced ‘ulti seedhi cheezen’ and ‘ajeeb ajeeb log’ now it’s her turn. ?
Hainaaa? YES! Sautelii Maa. ?
Btw, when I’m replying then I should not let the chance go in vain. So *me asking in curiosity* when you are going to post next..? ?
True. Let’s have some creativity and imagination afterall. 😀
LMAO I am writing a superhero story actually hai na? xD It’s genetical and she was born superbaby. <3
HMM. Well I can't tell you a correct date but of course I wll take on posting as I don't want to post everyday and be empty-handed one hand. Let me see when I will post … But I won't let you wait for long.
And I love superheroes. ? Yeah, with Parents having those super-captivating-persona one can just wish to have. ?
Well, neither I. Don’t want it to get end so early. ? Late updates are okay for me. But was just wondering about the other one, Destiny.. Something.. It’s been so long, you haven’t updated that one.
Fantabulous? the starting itself glued me so much with the story that I didn’t even realize my mom was calling me? daant par gae thori se?
Episode was too good? talking about the first scene, well that was too beautiful.. viplav’s caring behavior increased it’s charm, he was correct that one should be thankful to God for what he has and they should give full attention to Dhanush! Then that lullaby was too adorable, I have listened it after reading it in ur fiction and honestly it’s beautiful and so touching??
So Gayatri is ViDha’s daughter and she is living with that cruel lady who has no right to be a mother seriously how can she treat her like that and if she is too annoyed with that girl then why she is keeping her with herself, I think that lady hasn’t kidnapped her it’s someone else and their is a strong mystery behind all this, gals that her nanny is nice with the baby else don’t know how she would be able to survive! Eagerly waiting for the moment when Dhanush will find her sister and ViDha will find their daughter and maybe they are tracing her after all they can’t sit just-like-that, Precisely one this thing which was perfect, actually I like the way ViDha are supporting each other instead of blaming, which is the best part of their realtion❤ Viplav is so adoring yaar inshort he is best, for whom a girl will be dream to have!!
Well as u said I was waiting for ‘Baarish’ but now will wait for BDHBOL? wesey I would love to read whatever story u will like to give the thing which exactly matter us ur fiction so keep posting ur marvellous creations?
Take care!
LMAOOO poor baby. Aunty se dhaant toh padna tha, reading the part. xD Chalo, take these kisses as comfort and sorry for disturbing xoxoxo
The Charming Patidev! <3 True, they must never ignore that little one.
Oh you have listened to it. Glad you do, because it is a beautiful one, and the only one I know xD But I am disappointed of how that moment came out. :/
To get an answer to all these questions about Gayatri and her cruel mummy, keep reading the further episodes of IKRS – An Imaginary Fan Fiction. :* and I can understand all your questions so don't feel stupid this time (as you feel asking numeorus and irritating questions). I haven't revealed their track yet. But yeah, thank God Shanta is there. And well she is a nanny, she must be nice with children otherwise…
I am also excited to write more on that searching adventures but let's wait. And yeah, of course they are still searching for their daughter, it has been 7 years.
Haan. They cannot misunderstand each other in that way. HAHA I know he is way too cute. Kash such people exist in reality. But well if we would want someone like Viplav, then we must be like Dhaani too.
I know you were as you commented about it. And I am very sorry for that :/ LOL I need to check where I am with that one. Got more concentrated on IKRS-AIFF lately O_o Betha, stop flattering this much! I know the reality of my creations so PLEASE!