You know what guys….
Aaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnnn ????????
I am crying now sitting on footpath after seeing your comments… Seriously guys… I wanted suggestions not confusions…. Kya karu main aab…
Let me answer 1st…
1st of all nikki ji… In 3rd chappy i told you that it will be swasan story right?? I don’t wanna waste your time… If you are thinking that your time is wasting then i can tell don’t read… Thanks for comments…
Tejashwi… Thank you so much for supporting me… I am so happy you read this story… Thank you so much…
And now… To my swasan readers ???????some are saying make her normal some are saying not… And i wanted to finish it in 2 chappy… It’s a ss… But after seeing your suggestions i am feeling like it will take minimum 10 chappy more… ???… I thought to end it in my Christmas holiday but due to some reasons i can’t…
Ok shan di… How can she become pregnant… She is a kid… I mean at least her mind… So how can swasan consumate their marriage… And sanskar is not beast that he will force her… I can’t even imagine that type of things…
Mica i am not biology student but as much as i remember i read in class 10 that down syndrome is mainly happen cause chromosomal defect and the person who is suffering from this his eyes will be small and have some other defects too… But her problem is not that… Did you see koi mil gaya of rithwik roshan and pritizinta… The same Problem is her’s… She got hurt when she was 9 months in her mamma’s tummy… And she born like this…in that movie alien came and make him normal but here is no alien… So i really don’t know if there is any treatment of this kind of people or not… So if anyone knows then tell…
Next who are asking to make swara perfect and then make her give punishment to sanskar and all but is this not enough for sanskar that swara is hating him this much…
Guys i am again asking…
Look if you all are thinking that if swara does not become normal then ending will be not good Then believe me i will try my level best that it will be beyond your expectations…
And who are wanting not to make swara normal then they also think is this really possible for a man to except a girl like swara where he is perfectly fit and fine… Will he not feel disappoint after seeing happily married normal couple… As i don’t wanna write unrealistic…
I am in same confusion… I have plan for both…
So just answer in number…
1)Swara normal
2)Swara as she is now…
Look guys i am not mentioning name that doesn’t mean i didn’t read your comments… I just give them answers cause i wanna clear their confusion ..
Above all who suggested me to make her understand besics things of life by Ragini and sanskar… I really like their suggestions… Thank you…
And thanks to all…
So let’s start….
‘and the prince and princess starts to live in their big mansion happily ever after’…
Ragini looks at swara who is sleeping peacefully in her lap… She feels pain in her leg and waist…she never felt this type of pain may be due to pregnancy… She slowly places her head on pillow and stretch her waist and legs… Just then door open… She looks… She smiles seeing laksh holding a water glass and a trey on which her medicine were placed… Behind him sanskar…
Both headed towards their respective wives… Sanskar sits beside swara… A whole day passed… Swara who used to jump and play in the whole room… Whose laughing sounds used to echo in the whole room… Now she all silent and sad… Maximum time spends time looking at her own lap… Whenever looks at anyone…her scared fill eyes reflect that how much she is afraid now also…
Sanskar didn’t come in front of her only watches from distance… After the whole day now at about 11 :30 pm he gets opertunity to come near his wife… Sanskar Cares her face lovingly a tear drops from her eyes… He takes her hand softly and looks at her…
Laksh sees ragini’s slightly frowned face…
Laksh smiles and takes the bowl of oil and starts massage her fit… Ragini protests but seeing his satisfactory smile on his face she stops… She then looks at swasan…
Ragini : you know what sanskar…
(She looks at swara…) i used to say… ‘and the Princess makes her own castle… And then starts to live There all alone… Happily ever and ever after… ‘my shona will get married… I never thought this things in my most best dreams also… And now…
Sanskar : bhabi… I am getting scared…
He says looking deeply at swara… Raglak looks at him…
Sanskar : she became so silent… There is only 8 days left for her compitition… (looks at Ragini) will she able to sing??
Just then Ragini realize this… Her face became pale… The day she discovered the one and only talent that god gifted her innocent sister… She dreamed only to see her as a singer… This compitition is the 1st step…
Sanskar is still looking at her… : bhabi…??
Ragini : she has to sing…
Laksh : but how… Look at her… She is not touching anything… She is so scared…
Ragini : i… I… I don’t know laksh but she has to…
Sanskar looks at swara… The guilt which is already gnawing him is became deep… If swara can’t sing… The only ray of hope which will prevent her from all insult of this society is becoming flimsy…
Sanskar : bhabi you go sleep…
Ragini : no sanskar i will sleep here… If swara wakes up then she will create a mess…
Sanskar : no bhabi… I will call you if this happens… And swara is under medicine effects… So i don’t think she will wake up…
Laksh : ragu… You need rest… Please… Doll will be fine…
Ragini nodes worriedly… Laksh takes her in his arms… Sanskar smiles…
Ragini : sanskar please take care…
Sanskar nodes..
Laksh left with Ragini…
Sanskar lay down beside swara… Taking her in embrace… Sanskar kiss her forehead… Swara in sleep feels familiar warm touch… She nuzzle herself in him more…
Sanskar : shona… I will not let you ruin your career for my sin… You have to sing that day… And i will make sure of it…
He kiss his forehead and thinks something and smile…
Sanskar dozes off while Caressing her hair…
Next day…
Sanskar comes out from washroom… Got ready… And comes down… Raglak also…
Ragini : sanskar… Shona???
Sanskar : she is sleeping…
Trio comes to dining area for breakfast…
Ap: laksh look i made your favorite dish… Come…
Laksh sees alu paratha…
Laksh : ragu.. I am going office…
Ragini : laksh break fast…
Laksh : i am not hungry…
Ap feels bad… She looks at dp…
Dp sighs: laksh…
Laksh stops but didn’t responds…
Dp: literally you are insulting your mother…
Laksh chuckles: and i am shocked… Shocked to know how heartless my parents are…
Ap shades tears…
Ragini : please laksh… Eat something… If you dont eat then i also will not eat…
Laksh sighs and sits on chair… Ap smiles… And tanks Ragini through eyes… Ragini just look down…
Suddenly… ‘look jiji… Who came…’
All looks… And sees… Sujata and kavita… Sanskar sits beside Ragini without any expression…
Kavita seats beside sanskar…
Sanskar : bhabi… Dolly didi didn’t came till now??
Ragini : don’t know sanskar… I will call her…
Kavita (rolls her eyes… Sujata sign her) : hi sanskar…
Sanskar : hmm.. Hi ..
Sanskar was thinking about swara… He smiles…
Sujata : sanskar you are in casuals till now… Aren’t you going to office??
Sanskar : no mom…
Kavita (excited) : oh wow… Can we go for shopping sanskar??
Ragini’s hands stops…
Sanskar looks at kavita being annoyed : look kavita you came with mom so be with mom… I have not so much time that i will waste on you…
Kavita : you are my friend sanskar… Don’t talk like this…
Sanskar (narrowed eyes) : friends?? Wo kab hua?? When did it happen…
Sujata: sanskar… You are not going office then take her na… And what will you do in home… I know you deserve a good friend in your life… And you also need a good friend at least now…
That’s it for sanskar… He bangs the spoon on plate and stands up…
Sanskar : look mom… I am already very much tensed… So please don’t talk round and round… Here presented every person knows about your intentions… Listen mom… Swara is my life… I love her… None can separate me from her… And i don’t want this girl here… And if she come tell her keep 5 feet distance from her… Or tell her not to come…
Sanskar left the place… He goes to his room… He was sooo angry but as soon as he see his angel… He calm down… Swara is still sleeping… He goes to her and pecks her cheek and smiles… Suddenly he sees swara is moving… He gets tensed… He immediately stands up… And Steps backwards… Swara open her eyes and gets up… Sanskar becomes more tensed…
‘no no… Shona don’t look at here.. ‘ sanskar was stepping backwards… But suddenly swara turns… But nick time raglak comes in front of sanskar… Sanskar turns Immediately… Realizing a big sigh…
Ragini : shona… You didn’t sing a song from so many days… Chalo sing a song for your di..
Ragini says while combing her hair… But swara is no mood… She was still silent…
Ragini cups her face: shona please for your di…
Swara just nodes in no… And hugs her…
Ragini knows this types of reactions… At childhood also she behaved like same… She took 3 months to become normal again… The pain which she got is fresh… Recovering from that in this much less time is impossible… But she has to… It’s very important to make her sing…
Suddenly they heard a guitar sound…
Swara departs and looks here and there…
‘ tere bin na jia kabhi
Tere bin na ji sakunga
Tere bin na raha kabhi
Tere bin na rahe sakunga
Tute dil ki awaj ko sun
Tu sun to sahi
Shikwa nehi kisise
Kisise gila nehi
Naseeb mein nehi tha jo
Humko mila nehi ‘
Swara gets up from chair and starts to walk towards door… She slowly follow the sound and comes to garden… There sanskar was playing guitar… Swara gets scared and hide her face in palm… Here sanskar is still singing… When swara feels she is protected… She sat beside a tree…
Sanskar looks this from corner of his eyes…
Sanskar (while playing guitar think in the mind) : i know shona… In this whole world only songs can attract you… U will starts to sing soon…
Ragini gets happy…
After finishing song… Sanskar looks at swara who is now scared like hell… What if that devil watches her… Swara closed her eyes tightly… Sanskar smiles and turns his face immediately… Swara slightly open her eyes and watches him not looking at her… She slowly gets up… And turns… And runs inside… Where she sees Ragini talking in phone… She goes to her and wraps her…
Like this 3 days passed… Sanskar sings song and swara being attracted comes to listen… But still nither she humming any songs or nothing…
After 3 days…
Dolly can’t come due to some reason… Ragini after making swara sleep goes to hospital with laksh for daily check up… Here sanskar was sitting in his room in the couch doing some office work… And swara is sleeping only…
Suddenly sanskar’s phone rings…
Sanskar : han bhai when will you both come… Look na it’s already 8.. Come soon…
Laksh : open the tv…
Sanskar : why…
Laksh : arey open na…
Sanskar opened : a famous politician got arrested… So people started striking fighting in the streets…
Sanskar : you both are fine na bhai…
Laksh : hmm… We are in hospital… But Ragini is worried about doll…
Sanskar looks at swara… He also gets worried… But still…
Sanskar : bhai… Don’t take tension… I will do something…
Sanskar thinks Something…
Here after sometime… Swara gets up rubbing her eyes… She looks here and there…
Swara : diii…
She calls in a low voice… Suddenly she sees the small plants near the curtains is moving… She gets scared…
Swara : diii (almost cries)…
It’s again moves…
Swara slowly steps down from the bed and move towards it… When she reaches she stops… She slowly peeps… A big teadies head also peeps from other side of the cartain… Both Immediately hide again… Again peeps again hide… Swara gets confused… And slowly steps forward… Here the Teddy also steps forward… Both sees each other…
Swara Immediately close her eyes ??
The teddy also close eyes… ??
Swara slightly remove her palm and sees… Teddy also did same..
She looks at her with cute pouty scary face… And again close eyes… She steps back and sits on sofa… Teddy also sits… Swara looks at him… Teddy gets scared and immediately sits on the corner… Swara slowly sits beside him and pokes his big nose… Teddy also pokes her nose… A smile appears in her lips… Teddy takes her hand and keeps another palm on her palm and then takes off… Swara sees candys in her palm… She grins… Teddy pulls her both cheek… Swara hugs him…
Teddy sterled… He slowly hugs her back and tighten the grip…
Then departs… Swara smiles looking at him… Teddy stands up and brings food trolley…
Then again sits beside her… Sanskar forward food plate towards swara and gesture Her ‘wanna eat??’…
Swara nodes in yes… Teddy makes her seat on his lap…
Teddy hold the plate and takes the spoon… And makes her eat slowly… All the time swara poking teddy’s nose… Ear… His bow on throat…
Then wipes her face by tissue and makes her drink water… Swara smiles and hugs the teddy tightly…
Teddy makes her stand and sits on bed… He starts to tickle her… Swara laughs…
Swara : will you play with me teddy??
Teddy nodes in yes vigorously…
Swara smiles…
Swara : ok fold your hand… ??
Teddy folds…
Swara: zip zap zup
Kabhi upar kabhi niche (give hifi✋ at up then down)
Kabhi dayen (at right)
Kabhi bayen (at left)
Kabhi sida (???)
Kabhi ulta(oppsite sides of palm)
Kabhi khana (acts to eat )
Kabhi pina (acts to drink)
Kabhi sona (acts to sleep?)
Kabhi rona (acts to cry ?)
Kabhi hasna (acts to smile ??)
Kabhi ????…
Swara close her eyes… And again ?
Teddy close his eyes but can’t do ?
Swara laughs ???and claps…
Swara makes him close his eyes by holding his hands… And makes him stand in the middle of the room…
Swara : i will hide… Ok
Teddy nodes while still closing eyes… Swara hides behind the teddy… As the teddy is very big… Teddy open her eyes and scratches his head… Then turns round… Swara also turn… Teddy starts to search in the whole room but can’t find… Then acts to think putting his fingers on his cheek…
He starts to move round and round… Swara also… After 5 rounds Teddy stops being tired… Swara was giggling behind him… Teddy holds her hand and drags her in front and starts to tickle her… Swara laughs whole heartedly after so many days… Suddenly
Swara : aaaaah…
Both stops… Swara wince in pain as Teddy mistakenly hurt her burn marks…
Swara’s eyes fills with tears ??
Teddy makes her seat on bed and wipes her tears… Then takes a ointment and makes her apply that on burn mark…
Sanskar then makes her lie and pulls the comforter… He was about to go… But stops…
Swara : Teddy….
He turns and sees swara is extending her hand…
Swara : make me sleep…
Teddy Nodes and sleeps beside her… Takes her in his warm embrace…
Swara (poking his nose) : you can’t speak??
Teddy nodes in no…
Swara : ???then who will tell me story…
Teddy again place his palm on face and acts to think…
Then ??
He takes out a recorder and plays it… He starts to cares her face…
Recorder…
‘once upon a time there was a big palace… One prince and his princess used to live there happily… But one day… A witch came and curse the prince and prince turns in to beast and scold princess very much ‘
Swara remember sanskar and hugs the teddy tightly…. Hiding her face in his soft furry chest…
‘ but then prince realizes his mistake and tries to convince princess… But princess didn’t forgive him… Now what will prince do?? ‘
Teddy offs the recorder as he saw swara is in deep sleep…
Teddy makes her lie properly…
And looks at the watch… 11 pm…
He goes to washroom and stands in front of mirror… He takes out his head and its sanskar (i know u all guessed it)
He drenched in sweat… But he is smiling in tears…
Sanskar : after so many days… Thank you so much shona…
He takes out the costume… And takes bath… Then again comes out… He sees sleeping swara…
He goes and kissed her forehead lovingly… And rubs his nose on her cheek… Swara turns her head in sleep… Sanskar sees her small petal like rosy lips… He can’t control and pecks her lips…
Sanskar smiles : love you…. Love you soooo much…
He cares her face… He heard the ring of his room… He sees swara and kiss her cheeks… Then goes to open the door…
Raglak was standing there… Ragini comes and amused to see swara sleeping peacefully… And empty plates of food…
Ragini (amused) : ye kaise hua…
Sanskar (smiles mischievously) :magic… ???
Ragini smiles and shook her head… Then goes to swara and kiss her head…
Ragini : laksh i am feeling hungry…
Laksh : what… We just did dinner…
Ragini pouts: 1.5hrs ago…
Sanskar : koi nei bhabi… Come i will accompany you… I didn’t eat…
Laksh slaps his forehead… Trio headed towards dinning area…
End…
Precap music compitition… Will swara sing???
GUYS… Thanks for those comments… And i don’t know what i wrote… I wrote what came in my mind… Sorry if you feel bore… Please comment… Thank you
58 Comments
Hii pikachu..I was the silent reader till now but your writings forced me to comment..I have read all of your works till now and this one is my favourite..u r an amazing writer..
Its awesome dear
want shona to be fine
sanskar is just fab
Woww thats amazing dear, I think sankar and dagini should teach her slowly basic things, Sanskar is patience man and understand well now
Then slowly they should teach values of love marriage
I think this is the best things
Every girl is not completely developed from mind but slowly they learn
Swara is pure heart girl she don’t know anything bad
How can swara become normal after operation etc as when already she never experienced anything like this
If by chance any mental level like this be corrected then also she will take time to learn things and again everything will start from child mentality only
1 make swara normal
hey pikachu, you really have awesome skills of writing. …
Yesterday only I read your os “busmate” and I loved it… and this “life partner ” is going really well just write what comes in your mind. …. all the best ??
Hey Pikachu!!! I am a silent reader of your story but today i thought to give you my response because i don’t want you to end your ss in an utter confusion because this story is really really nice!
Look the main point is you continue your story as you planned and continue your story like the way you wanted!!! And it really does not matter of you make swara normal or not because sanskar loved her as the way she was and will always love her because she is very innocent!!!
Hope i cleared all your confusions ???
Post soon
Love you ??
1 make swara normal…. lovely epi… ufff so sweet efforts f sanskaar
Loved it. I guess swara is suffering from Autism spectrum disorder. This disorder can be subsidied till a great extent by proper training and medication
Make swara normal
awesome…………
Awesome chapter dear
Like someone suggest make sanskar n Ragini teach swara basic things if she cant be normal…
There is no need of punishment for sanskar in my opinion bcoz he is handling Swara carefully…
It’s awesome yaar. I loved it just loved it . U want some suggestions for ur story then I think u should be kept her like this and she will learn things because she is not a mad so she can easily understand things slowly. It will time taking but I think in ur story sanskar have that much patience to handle it.
2nd option u told it is a ss then u will do patch up between them and then will convince for operation. After operation she will be fine and both of them leading a happy life. If u will want transfer the story in a gf then u can do her a mature person but don’t remember anything. She accept her family but don’t know that she is married. Then u can entry other man in her life and some twist and turn.
This is ur story so u will give best end. But I don’t think so if swara will not get normal sanskar leave her or he will sad because he cannot live a happy married life because in ur story u portrait sanskar is very loving and mature .so he can handle swara and can learn things.so now everything depends on u .
Amazing……
Awesome
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Hai, Pikachu. I want to tell my suggestion that is 1. Yaah, please make Swara normal….pleeeaassee……. Unite SWASAN,,, don’t separate them……
I didn’t said u to make sanskar force swara and she will get pregnant…. U asked opinion i just said about this as i saw in many films thats it…. But u took it in wrong way…. No pblm…
Even i am not saddist to think like this….
Hahahaahahah shan dun get angry dear… she didn’t mean dat…
I also said u this thing in lst chappy… she was jus telling u d same… now smile girl n b happy
Arshu there is diff between ur saying and her saying…. She is saying that my suggestion is showing like i want sanskar to force swara and make her pregnant…. She could have said that it won’t look good by making swara pregnant in this state but her statement is like i want sanskar to force swara and make her pregnant…. Ok leave it…. And pikachu i am sorry ok….
Yup i know i an sounding rude…. But i am sorry… Ur comment hurted me thats it…. And sorry dr
No no I didn’t took it wrong… But your suggestions are showing that only… So I said… Please don’t mind yaar… I am sorry if you hurt… Thanks for the comment and tell me what u want
U r saying that my suggestion is showing to make sanskar force on swara right…. I said in the way u can make swara understand sanskar rights on swara and then with her knowledge only she becomes pregnant…. U can ask me how can a mentally stable understand this??? Then even none will marry mentally stable person…. So its just a story so i said like this…. But thank u soo much for understanding my suggestion very negatively…. Now I don’t have anything to tell….
Leave it…. U won’t understand….
See there were many ffs which had similar situations….either swara or sanksar was mentally challenged but they consummated. Each writer had shown different ways not necessarily forcing. Shan meant that u could also show something like that.
Aaawww pikachu u r cute u r asking sorry so many tyms…
Vyshu dun misundrstd her yr she didn’t said anything in bad sense.. even she said sorry to shan… u knw in msg we cn nvr undrstnd how person felt bt it sounds rude d way some right… shan thought shez being rude n al n dey clrd it dear…
Nw b happy u all…love u all vyshu shan n pikachu ?
Oh my god shan di… diiiiiiiiiiii. … Yoi are getting angry.. . You are getting me wrong… I didn’t say that. .. He bhagwan bachao mujhe. .. I just said that cz i feel that m. I am sorry. .. Ok Leave it… Maine kuch na bola aapne ku6 na suna… ok sorry sorry sorry sorry sorry sorry.. . Gussa always remain on your nose tip… I am poking your nose tip ????.. . Vago.. . Fir gussa ho gyi… Hi hi hi hi hi hi… love you di… Don’t get angry pleeeeaaaaaaasssssssseeeeee ????
Just one suggestion dear….when u ask for opinions, different ppl will give different ones. If u find some ideas helpful, use them. If u do not like some ideas or if dont find them apt for ur story, just ignore them but dont point out unless if u want to offend the commentors
I am sorry… I won’t repeat this.. . Please don’t scold me.. . ????chorry…
No need to apologise to me dear….i m sorry if u felt bad.
Awesome and excellent dear
Amazing dr….
Plz nxt one soon….
Superb …n i choose 1st option ..make swara normal ..
M not saying to make her perfect in one go..but wid time,love,care n off course medical science can make her perfect..n singing competition is 1st step….n dont give sanskar more punishment coz I guess swara’s behavior towards him is not less than punishment….
waa,, thank you so much for your answer Pikachu.. well even i said that Down syndrome won’t normal rite ? (as there is no alien also ) 😀
hmm i have a cousin with down syndrome also, same as Swara, she got traumatic during pregnancy.
in my country, there is a school for down syndrome people to teach the basic thing of life, exp = house keeping, right or wrong (stealing is wrong, lie is wrong, helping people is good) something like that or at least counting 1- 10, i don’t know the rest but she is at least lil bit independent now, she can take a bath by herself, take care during period, even she can take care of her sick mother, giving medicine or clean her punctually even though she even asked her mom, when she will die 😀 😀
mostly, people with down syndrome is punctual and do everything the normal people teach them with their simple thought, for example, if you asked them to take a bath every 7 00 am, they will do that no matter what, if you asked them to no lie, they will be the most honest person in the world.
in an expert hand, Swara’s intelligent can be upgrade for few level.
well it’s my story 😀 😀
about Sanskar’s feeling, hmmm… if you only asked me can he accept swara condition as normal person ? i will ask you back…right now, sanskar’s love to Swara as a brother ? as a human, as a friend or as a man to a woman ?
about your polling, i should follow the winner or up to you as writer….
btw, for today episode.. uugghh i just want to chop chop that cavity
But it’s a chromosomal problem right??? Even they can’t conceive right?? ? But it’s not chromosomal defect… She got hurt on head when she was in her mummy’s tummy… So she is unmatured from brain… So this two things are different right? ??
well i didn’t much in this, but yes it has differences based on caused problem…
as i knew there was down syndrome patient as she ever drown on the river on her childhood also… and she can’t conceive.
may it’s depend on how huge the damage of the brain…
on Swara case, well let’s say that they bring Swara for scanning and x-ray and found there is blood clot on her head that made such bad effect for the symptom and nerve of her brain due accident..
by head surgery, she can be normal.. what say ? i think it’s logic enough 😀
amazing loved it. and i will prefer 2 option.i want to see naughty swara and sanskar together forever.
Awesome dear.
awww….. chooo sweet no need say thank you dear… can we be frndz??? anyways 2day’s epi was just fab again and again am falling in love with ur ff i think first time am reading a Swasan ff. are u elder to me??? UPDATE NEXT PART ASAP. LOVE U DEAR!!!!!!!!
awesome
Awesome dear… Write the story the way you planned.. Don’t make her normal by any operation or accident.. But make her learn basic things ..and finally somewhat normal .. Extend chapters as you can .. Becoz I love to read it
Nice..sanky and rags should teach her basic things..she is not mad..her mind works like a child’mind..a child learns things slowly..if they teach swara slowly she will also learn everything..
plzz o make h normal soo….but sanskar and ragini caeacher slowly slowly….
sanskar and ragini can teach her slowly…but make it quick….nd awsom cahppy
*dont make it quick….I love how cute she is