My first FF article. Hope you folks like it…
NEIL: Avni… I don’t know how to say thanks to you. for solving this case, for saving Ali and Juhi. What you did…
AVNI: Neil… you dont have to say thanks to me. You have given me everything that I had been yearning for from my childhood – a family, lots of love, lots of happiness, and beautiful moments which I can never forget.
NEIL: How can you be so good, Avni. What you did for Juhi, after knowing her role in my past – nobody else would have done that.
AVNI: Nothing matters to me more than your happiness, Neil. I can understand your feelings. You have got your long lost love back. Once I see you happily united with your love again, I can leave. [hands the divorce papers to Neil] here, Neil. go ahead sign it.
NEIL: [throws away the papers] bas, Avni. What are you saying? How could you even think of leaving me? The other day I said I would sign it – but that was out of anger, to stop you from putting your life in danger. How do I make you understand, nobody can take your place in my life. Nobody. Not even Juhi. You never listen to me, Avni. Nor do you ever tell me what’s in your mind. Why do you always run away from happiness, from life?
AVNI: Neil, I just want your happiness, and…
NEIL: [interrupts] My happiness? So you have decided yourself what MY happiness is all about? Why are you worried about my happiness anyways, Avni? Tell me. Why do you always risk your life for me? Why do you care for me more than anyone else does? Are you doing me a favor? Or are you just playing with my emotions, and leaving me when you are done with me.
AVNI: [cries] Because I love you Neil, I love you. From the moment you put this mangalsutra on me, or maybe even before… I don’t know, Neil.when I fell in love with you. I didn’t realize my true feelings for you. Not until it was too late, when I had lost you.
NEIL: [Neil holds her face in his palms] Nothing is lost, Avni… I’ve been waiting for long to hear you say what’s in your heart. You want to know why I can’t take my eyes off you – because I want to capture your face into my heart and my soul. Because there is nothing in this world that I want to see more than I want to see you, Avni. I too love you so much that I can’t even describe, so much that my heart aches. [takes out the ring from his pocket] I have been carrying this ring with me so I could give it to you when you tell me what you feel for me. [puts the ring on her finger] Avni, I want to live all my life in your love. You are my life, My dear wifey. [they embrace]
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LOVED IT so much please please make it longer you are a amazing ff writer for you first ff that was sooo good post next part soon
Thank you Aisha
Wow it was really nice….
Yeah itna acha tha ki mujhe laga ki mei real episode ka scene read kar rahiho
I wish this all happen in real episodes of naamkaran and Avni confess her love to Neil..
Seriously it was awesome……
I think in Hindi, write that up and then translate it. Maybe that’s why it sounds likea real scene.. Here is the Hindi version:
NEIL: Avni… main nahin jaanta kis tarah tumhe thanks kahun. is case ko solve karne ke liye, ali aur juhi ko bachane ke liye. tumne jo kiya voh.
AVNI: Neil… tumhe mujhse thanks kehne ki koi zaroorat nahin hai, Neil. tumne mujhe voh sab kuch diya hai jiske liye mei bachpan se tarasti rahi. ek parivar, dher sara pyar, dher sari khushiyaan. aur khoobsoorat pal jinhe mei kabhi nahin bhoolungi.
NEIL: tum itni achchi kaise ho Avni. Juhi ke liye jo tumne kiya, mera ateet jaanne ke baad bhi – woh koi aur hoti to nahin karti
AVNI: tumhari khushi se badhkar mere liye kuch bhi nahi hai Neil. mei tumhare dil ki haalat samajh sakti hun. tumhara khoya hua pyar aaj tumhe vaapis mila hai. Juhi ko apni zindgi vaapis mili hai. tum donon ko milakar… mei… mei tumhari life se duur chali jaungi.
NEIL: bas, Avni. yeh kya bol rahi ho? tum aisa soch bhi kaise sakti ho? tumhe kis tarah samjhaun, Juhi mera ateet tha aur tum mera aaj. aur aane wala kal bhi. meri life mei tumhari jagah koi nahi le sakta, Juhi bhi nahi. tum kabhi meri baat nahi sunti, aur na apni dil ki baat bataati ho. kab tak aise khud se duur bhaagti rahogi? zindagi se door bhaagti rahogi?
AVNI: Neil, mei to sirf tumhari khushi chahti..
NEIL: [interrupts] meri khushi? meri khushi? tumhe meri khushi ki itni fikr kyun hai, Avni? kyun mere liye apni jaan par khel jati ho? kyun mujhse zyaada mera khyaal rakhti ho? ahsaan kar rahi ho mujhpe? mazaak kar rahi ho mere saath? ya bas khel rahi ho mere jazbaaton se? aur jab tumhara dil bhara to chod ke ja rahi ho.
AVNI: [cries] pyaar karti hun mei Neil. pyar karti hun tumse…
AVNI: pyar karti hun. jabse tumne yeh mangalsutr pehnaya hai. ya shaayad usse pehle… mei nahi jaanti, Neil. kab mei tumse pyaar karne lagi. aur na hi mei is ahsaas ko pehchaan paayi. samajh nahi paayi ke mujhe kya ho gaya hai. aur jab samajhi tab mujhe laga bahot der ho chuki hai. mai tumhe kho chuki hun.
NEIL: [Neil holds her face in his palms] Avni… mei kab se intezar kar raha hun ke tum mujhse apni dil ki baat kaho. tum jaanna chaahti ho na mei tumhe dekhta kyu rehta hun – bina palkei jhapkaye? kyunki mei tumhara chehra apne dil mei apni aatma mei utaarna chaahta hun. kyunki mei tumse bahot, bahot pyar karta hun Avni. tumhare pyar mei sari zindagi jeena chahta hun. [takes out the ring from his pocket] kab se yeh ring leke intezar kar raha hun. ke jab tum abni dil ki baat mujhse kahogi to mei tumhe pehna sakun. tum meri zindgi ho, Avni [puts the ring on her finger], meri biwi ho. yaad hai na – wifey? [they embrace each other]
Amazing Superbbbbb hope it happens in serial also
I wish the same
Waiting for this confession in show also… awesome Dear, hope to read more such good scenes
I don’t think the confession is gonna come any time soon.. Just to keep the show going!
Wow, it is superb… U are such a good writer…. Hope this will happen in one of the episode.. It was like watching the real scene… Keep it up.. Come back with the part 2 soon.. ??
Thank you Pavithra. Part 2 with alternative track coming today..
Here you go…
http://www.tellyupdates.com/naamkaran-tale-avnis-sacrifice-part-1
Let me know what you think!!
yaar u are a superb writer.u expressed emotions so well.and it is so sweet and nicely done…u are a fab writer…thx for such a story…and do read mine as well.i have written 4 till now
Thank you so much.. I’ve been following your stories as well! I’m writing up a different track now. Somehow I feel it would be phenomenal if Avni and Neil are separated, and Neela ma finds Avni alone, singing the old lullaby for herself… Avni baking a cake at Ali’s cafe which eventually reaches Neil as husband birthday cake and he would feel her presence…