There are many writers who write an article on their favorite serial and it may be love revenge or betrayal and many of them wrote an excellent articles and i want to appreciate them and this is my first one shot on Avneil and those who dislike my Article i want to know my flaw so that i can overcome it and any suggestions you want to give me then you are most welcome and i will accept both negative and positive comments. there are not many characters in this ff.
Shot-1:
We see a big mansion and on the name plate” Mehta Mansion” is written and while we enter there we see a man of late 40’s is sitting reading newspaper and a woman of 60 years doing prayer and another woman of early 40’s is making breakfast. The man completed reading and called his wife.
Man: Ayesha is the breakfast is ready?
Ayesha: Ashish it is ready and you have to wake up your princess and prince and mom you can also have breakfast
Dayawanti nodded her head.
Ashish: fine
He got up and went to the upstairs and went inside the room there we can see a king size bed and we can see that one person is sleeping on bed the other on couch.First Ashish went to the bed and said wake up prince charming and a boy of 20’s woke up listening and wished good morning hero he kissed his dad cheek and went while Ashish is making faces and then went to the couch and said princess wake up your prince charming is calling you and a girl of 23 woke up in an instant listening prince charming.
Avni: Dad how many times told you not to wake me up by saying prince charming
Ashish: princess you are going to marry your prince charming then what can i do?
Avni: My prince charming has name Neil and whenever you call prince charming all are teasing me saying i am small girl
Ashish: who has dare to tease the great directors daughter Avni Ashish Mehta.
Avni: dad i will miss you
Ashish: I will miss you but now get ready as you have to drop your little prince
Avni: Aman has holidays dad and his college will reopen after my marriage
Ashish: hmm ok get ready as you have to go out with Neil as your marriage is after three days and you have pre-marriage rituals
Avni: hmm ok dad
Aman had shower and came out washroom and Avni went to washroom to get ready and Ashish and Aman both went to downstairs and went to dinning area to have breakfast and meanwhile Avni came out wearing crop top and jeans and straightened her hair and done light make up and when she got ready she called to her finance.
Another place we see a big mansion and there is a nameplate written “Khanna mansion” and we see a man of 50’s reading a newspaper and talking to someone one on phone and a woman of 60’s has just completed her morning prayer and sat in dinning area and then woman of 40’s came to the dinning area carrying the breakfast and then said breakfast is ready.
Man: Shweta did my champ woke up?
Shweta: Prakash your champ is sleeping
Harleen: your champ wakes up when i will go to his room and wake him up
Saying Harleen went up to the room upstairs and as entered the room Harleen took a sigh this boy will never change he always make a mess of his room and behaves like a kid don’t know what happens to Avni thinking this Harleen went near the bed. there we see a boy of 25 is sleeping peacefully
Harleen: prince charming your lovely grandma came now wake up
Listening this Neil woke up with jerk and hugged his grandma and wished good morning meanwhile his phone rang and widened his eyes seeing caller id
Neil saw towards grandma and said grandma you go down and i will come later and Harleen understood that Avni is calling him and went downstairs while Neil lifted the call.
Avni: Neil are you ready?
Neil: no sweetie i will be ready in 10 minutes and come to your house to pick you up.
Avni (sad tone): Neil are you ready to marry me?
Neil was shocked to listen Avni question and worried why she asked this question.
Neil:of course my princess no one forced me and we have dated for 5 years and now i want to marry you and i want you to be my wife so don’t think that i will not marry you.
Avni: Prince be ready in 10 mins or else i wont marry you
Neil: princess don’t worry i will be ready love you
Avni: ok hate you
Neil laughed as he know that Avni says hate you word whenever he is late and went to washroom to get ready and then went down to have breakfast.
Shweta: Neil now you are going to marry so you should become more responsible
Prakash: Shweta dear my champ is not a kid he has grown up
Harleen: Yes Prakash i am unable to believe that my grandson became so big an is going to marry
Neil:my grandma don’t become emotional
They had breakfast and Neil finished his breakfast and reached Mehta mansion and went inside and greeted Ayesha,Ashish and Aman. while Avni came downstairs and Neil saw Avni and opened his mouth and then closed and when Avni came they bid bye and went to the car.
In the car Neil asked Avni about what she is wearing.
Avni: I am wearing crop top an jeans
Neil: I know princess but all guys will stare at you
Avni: Oh! Now i got it you are jealous that all guys stare at me but they don’t know that i am belong to you
Neil: princess you know how to handle me.
Avni: if i have to spend whole life with you then i should know how to handle you
Neil:hmm you statement i also correct
Both enjoyed the whole day and next day their rituals started and both didn’t got time and soon wedding day came and Avni doesn’t know what to feel whether she should be happy that she is going to marry her prince or sad that she is leaving her family behind but from starting she decided that she will not be sad and won’t cry while leaving her family so she decided that she wont cry.
She got ready in red bridal dress and is waiting for her prince while her mother,dad and grandma came to her room and became emotional seeing Avni. While Avni said if you cry i will not marry Neil and i will stay here. Listening Avni trio looked each other and Aman went to call his jiju and said about Avni threatening and Neil immediately called Avni listening to Aman and Avni took the call of Neil and put it on speaker for purpose.
Neil: mom,dad and grandma don’t cry please i want to marry your princess
All the trio laughed and said don’t worry your marriage will happen and Avni cut the call and meanwhile Neil got ready and left to the destination.
Part 2
9 Comments
Amazing
Good but I think to make it best there should be more avniel scene
I will add more scenes and this is just the beginning of the story
Really awesome….loved it……but I have a doubt u mentioned harleen is 60 yrs and prakash is 50 yrs….only 10 yes difference……. Anyway loved it…….plz update soon
Actually Harleen age is not exactly 60 she is in 60 as I didn’t mention that it early 60 but think that age gap is 18 years and i will mention in next shot with exact age gaps
Story looks really good dear please update it soon waiting for the next part
Thanks
awesome deariee…u write good..but u needed to EXPRESS EMOTIONS AND FEELINGS… in a story its a very important thing….do update soon..
I did included emotions and feelings more because I thought the shot is to long and I had written at night so i couldn’t include properly thank for the suggestion i will show emotion and feelings in the next shot