This is my three shot, hope you like it.
The lines in black is for what author is saying or describing, # # for avni’s POV and () for translation and = = for song.
Author’s POV
In khanna mansion.
“Avni where are you”, neel screams and fell on his knees, covers his face with his hand and cries. Prakash pats his shoulder, on the sofa, bebe and neela are crying and kareena and maddy are trying to console her. Prakash’s eyes are moist too.
“why did you leave me” neel murmurs in cries.
*** SOME HOURS BEFORE (That day juhi comes to meet avni in neel’s apartment)****
A door bell rings and avni opens the door to find juhi standing on the door, avni personally never liked juhi, she always feels jealous when neel is around juhi. She feels that something is not right about juhi. She had a gut feeling that juhi is wrong and is trying to trap neel, and neel being a good innocent person will unknowingly fall in her trap. For avni, juhi is just a friend which neel had years backs, after that juhi was dead to world, but in reality she was not, she was very much alive. When juhi came back, avni thought neel is just helping her settling here. And she is unaware of the truth about juhi.
# Why is she here, even neel is not here then why is she. Hope she go out soon. I cant bear her. #
Avni says “come inside”, juhi comes and avni asks “what brings you here” indicating her to sit. But she didn’t and remains standing.
Juhi says “you”
# What is she saying. #
Avni asks “me? What”
Juhi says “yes you, don’t you have any shame left that you still are after my neel”
# Her neel, is she mad, I am his wife and she is saying that he is her neel, if she isn’t related to neel then I would have had murdered her right away, but now I cant, so control your anger avni and don’t let it show. #
Avni says “your neel?”
Juhi says “yes mine, don’t you pretend like you don’t know that he is my neel. I am his love, he was my boyfriend. He loved me to life, and he does now also. But you, you are coming in between us, since you have married my neel by cheat, he thinks he has to take care of you, that you are his responsibility. Why cant you let him live his life peacefully, why are you being a burden on him. He is too good that he will sacrifice his love for his duty. Why don’t you leave him. Why don’t you go away from him and let us live our life peacefully with each other”
# No no this cant be true, its false, yes yes it is, else neel would have had told me, but if she is saying is true, then why neel has hidden this fact from me. #
Avni gets shattered after hearing to juhi’s cruel words. Avni stammers and says “n-no it-its not tr-true”
Juhi says “ofcourse it is sweetheart. Are you blind, cant you see how much he cares about me, thinks about me, do stuff for me. Much more than he do for you because its his love for me avni and for you its his burdened responsibility not love. And you think that he is yours but in reality, he is mine and will be mine, our love cant die”
# No, neel cant cheat me, he cant do this with me. #
After hearing to juhi, a tear fell off her eye.
Juhi says “thats the problem of your kind of girls, you trap rich boys for money, and when your plan gets exposed you try to make excuse and be innocent so that your money doesn’t stop coming. Don’t know how your parents nurture you, oh I forgot, shweta aunty oops shweta mom told me about you being illegitimate, what can we expect something nice from you then. And if you have a little shame left then get lost from neel’s life”
Juhi smiles evilly, turns and goes; leaving avni broken.
Avni falls down on her feet, She is sitting on the floor with her legs folded and tightly pressed to her chest, her head on her knees, she is holding herself so tightly as if, if her hold gets a bit loose she might break like a glass. “Ma where are you” she screams more loudly.
Avni is crying very badly, and rocking herself to and fro. She is recalling juhi’s words and past few day’s neel’s action.
= Qismat badaldi vekhi main,
Ehhe jag badalda vekheya,
Main badalde vekhe apne,
Main Rabb badalda vekheya..
(I have seen fate change
I have seen the world change
I have seen my closed ones change
I have seen even God change) (x2)
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Chal jar hi javangi..
(I have seen everything that was mine change
Still, I will bear it)
Ve je hun tu vi badal gaya,
Main te…
(But if even you change, I shall)
Ve je hun tu vi badal gaya,
Main te mar hi javangi.. (x2)
(But if even you change, I shall die) =
# Neel doesn’t love me so why was he doing that, being so flirty, so touchy, so weird. Why was he showing as if he loves me? Why did he cheat me, why did he break all the promises? why? Why did he break all the dreams which he taught me to dream, with him? Maa says that neel loves you, and wants to accept me as his wife, than why has he changed maa. Why? You always use to say that I am a normal girl and will get what all girls get, love from her husband. And here my husband does not love me, maa, after juhi has come neel is totally changed, I know he has loved her but I am his wife, his wifey. He always used to be with me,do everything with me, for me, pamper me, embrace me, makes me happy, comfort me. Why has he changed, everything has changed after juhi came back, neel is always there for her, with her rather than being with me. Neel’s behaviour was breaking me but now juhi’s words have broken me, my heart has broken into pieces as if it was made up of glass. Why am I feeling so pain, why so hurt? Why? Why my heart is feeling like it is getting ripped apart? Why it is feeling so broken? Why it is feeling like something is piercing it? Why juhi’s words are affecting me so much? Why is neel’s changed behaviour breaking my heart so much? Am I in love with neel? No I am not, I had just got a habit of him and his attention, his presence and thought that he will be there with me, that he – he will be mine. So does that mean that I love him, does it? yes it does. It does mean that I love him. I love him. But why did I get to know, why not early, why now, why not later, why now when everything is broken, when my world is broken. I shouldn’t have got to know because now when I have got to know then nothing cant be done as neel cant be mine, he is juhi’s. Nothing can be good now, no happiness is left even when I got to know that I am in love. That love has finally entered my life, that my mothers wish has come true. Nothing can be fixed, everything in my world is broken now, my heart and my soul. Why god why, why did you do that with me, why let me guards fell off, why let neel to come in my life and why did you make me fall for him. It feels like nothing is left, like I am not alive, just physically alive but emotionally I am dead. Like I am a living dead, it looks scary at the very thought but that it is what I have become now. Everything inside me is dead, all emotions, all feeings, my heart and my soul too, everything feels so lifeless. #
= Ho qismat badaldi vekhi main,
Ehhe jag badalda vekheya,
Main badalde vekhe apne,
Main Rabb badalda vekheya..
(I have seen fate change
I have seen the world change
I have seen my closed ones change
I have seen even God change)
Tu aakhri umeed meri,
Tutt kite jaavin na,
Lutti hoyi nu ve Jaani,
Lutt kite jaavin na.. (x2)
(You are my only hope,
Don’t break it
Don’t rob the one who has already been robbed)
Main jhooth badalda vekheya,
Main sach badalda vekheya,
Main badalde pathar vekhe ne,
Main kach badalda vekheya,
(I have seen lies change
I have seen the truth change
I have seen rocks change
I have seen glass change)
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Chal jar hi javangi..
(I have seen everything that was mine change
Still, I will bear it)
Ve je hun tu vi badal gaya,
Main te mar hi javangi..
(But if even you change, I shall die) (X2) =
# Why did you do this god, why are you repeating the history, first you snatched Ayesha ma and neela ma’s love and now mine’s. What wrong have we done, why did you make us so ill-fated. Why so much pain and cries in our destiny, why so little happiness. Dayawanti Mehta was right, I am ill fated. Why am I alive? I should have died either from the bullet or from the fire. Then everything would have been perfect, neel would have gotten juhi without feeling guilty because of my responsibility. And I would have been saved from the pain of heartbreak. Or I should have had given divorce to neel, but how could have i. I have had fallen for neel, I didn’t have power to get separated from him, but now after the cruel act that destiny has played with me, I have to leave my love. I have to go away from neel, for his happiness. I think that is what love is being selfless, losing your own self in the fire for your loved one’s happiness. #
= Ho qismat badaldi vekhi main,
Ehhe jag badalda vekheya,
Main badalde vekhe apne,
Main Rabb badalda vekheya..
(I have seen fate change
I have seen the world change
I have seen my closed ones change
I have seen even God change )
Je lod nahi ae hun meri,
Mooh te mere bol ve,
Maang na salhaan jaake,
Par lokaan kol ve..
(If you don’t need me any more,
Say it to my face
But don’t ask for advice from others)
Je dena ae te dil naal,
Saath devin mera tu,
Je rolna vi ae te fer,
Changi tarah rol ve..
(If you want to be with me,
Stay whole heartedly
And if you want to destroy me,
Do it completely) =
# Yes I have to go away from neel’s life for forever, so that he can be with juhi, the perfect piece of his life puzzle, else as I am the mis-fitted piece that neela ma was trying to fit in neel’s life, and neel was letting her do to as I am his legally wife, his burden, his forced responsibility. But now I wont let this happen anymore, I will go away from neel’s life. It will hurt me but for his happiness I will do it. #
= Main chann badalda vekheya,
Taare badalde vekhe main,
Haaye lod pehn te duniya ‘ch,
Saare badalde vekhe main,
(I have seen the moon change
I have seen the stars change
I have seen everyone change as per need)
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Sab kuch badal gaya mera,
Chal jar hi javangi..
(I have seen everything that was mine change
Still, I will bear it)
Ve je hun tu vi badal gaya,
Main te mar hi javangi.. (x3)
(But if even you change, I shall die) =
Avni lifts her head and wipes off her tears. Her eyes and face is red due to so much of crying. She gets up and finds a paper and a pen, she writes ‘Neel, I am going from your life for forever, stay happy with juhi, yours avni” she cuts yours because now she doesn’t have any right on him, she has separated herself from neel so that he could be of juhi and juhi could be his. Few tears also fell on the paper.
She puts this note on the bedside table. She then goes to her cupboard and takes out her clothes, and packs them. She takes out a pink colour suit for herself to wear. After that, she takes her luggage, phone, and car keys and goes out of neel’s apartment and neel’s life.
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This is my avneil ts. Hope you guys like this, if yes don’t forget to hit the like and comment down below please. I love comments, so please comment and don’t forget to hit the like button who so ever read this, its a humble request.
And the song is a Punjabi song ‘Qismat’, I love that song very much.
Sorry for any grammatical error or any other error.
Thank you for reading
Love you all
Mehak
17 Comments
Nice yaar too good hope even in the coming days to see Avni realise her love and admitting it to Neil he should reciprocate avni’s love instead of any stupid seperation track whoever may come
And go but Neil and Avni should always choose each other over anyone else
Thank you so much… yes i hope and wish for the same.. i want there love confession to happen soon in the serial..
Avneil is goal..
It’s awesome ?
Loved it so much ❤️
Everything was so awesome
And me too loved this awesome song and I cried too after seeing the girl’s state in the last….????
Please please update soon
Thank you so much… i am glad that u loved it.. this song is very good.. my favourite.. so emotional song.. love it..
I am so sorry that I made you cry.. i didn’t mean to do that.. just wanted to express avni..
Even while reading and writing this ff i was on the verge of crying… but i just somehow controlled my tears so that i could finish this chapter..
Will try to update asap…
Again thank you… i never knew that my words can touch someone’s heart so deeply and affect their emotions.. it’s a big compliment for me.. thank you so much
Love you
Mehak
Too good yaar very exciting
Thank you so much…
No words to say.its amazing
Thank you so much… i am really very gald..
It was amazing I hope in real episodes Avni realize her love for Neil but instead of getting separated because of Juhi they should even come more to each other and confess their love for each other
This was so exciting but I hope they don’t get separated either in this chapter or even not in the real episodes….
Seriously I can’t see Avneil getting separated and when Neil cry for Avni it really looks bad even when both Avni n Neil cry for each other…….
Thank you so much…
Even i wish for avneil’s special love confession.. i too don’t want any separation track..
Avneil is goal.. i love avneil.. and i cant separate them; never not even in dreams.. i love them so much.. good news for you.. at the end they will be avneil only..
I hate when they cry, but what to do.. Destiny has put villains in their life.. so they need to kill them (not literally) to be one..
Love you
Mehak
Super mehak……….lovely storyline……….? ?
Thank you so much….
I was planning to write a similar ff but I don’t think it’ll be better than urs. The way u expressed avni’s feelings was WOW I cant say how good the shot is. keep writing cause I loved it.
I wish Juhi realize her mistake of separating Avneil keeping the obsession aside for neil as she USED TO luv him in the past. I even wish Neil juhi ko deewar pe satade in front of avni n proposes avni with pouring out all feelings in his heart in front of juhi. And explains juhi how much he luvs our avni. N I wish this time swetha accepts Avniel with open ♥ ? ❤
Thank you so much.. thank you.. thank you.. for this big big compliment… i am so overwhelmed with joy after hearing you… right now my emotions of happiness are overflowing.. seriously i am speechless…
I to think that juhi should be positive in the end… yes .. Avneil should confess their feelings that they have for each other.. not here only but in serial also…
About Shweta only god knows.. lol..
Again thank you very much… it means a lot to me.. i am touched by your words.. thank you.. and yeah… do write something… i would love to read it…
Love you
Mehak
Nyc episode……
Thank you so much
Loved this one from heart,I really appreciate your all work..I read all of your ff. Thank you for giving us sooo wonderful ff on Avneil….do one shots too if you have time…this ff also started with Avneil separation like kyun main jagoon…hope it ended on a happy note ….I love your writing.so,it’s a humble request do update soon…byeeee