Hi peeps,
I’m Rithika. I’m new to this page and this is my first OS also, so please be kind enough to give ur views ?
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Swara was walking through the gates of her new college. Nervousness took over her mind, she wasn’t concentrating on her movement and the result was dashing into Sanskar. As a result Swara fell on top of Sanskar
Swara : (comes to her senses) Uh..sorry..
She said got up from him and went while Sanskar was captivated by her beauty
Sanskar : (monologue) First time in my life I’ve seen God’s perfect creation
He smiles to himself and goes. Soon it was their break time Swara was sitting on the table eating her food while Sanskar came there and sat near her
Sanskar : Can I?
Swara : Hmm
Sanskar : Ur new here?
Swara : Ya. By the way I’m Swara..Swara Bose
Sanskar : Hi, nice to meet u, I’m Sanskar…Sanskar Maheshwari
They shake hands while he was again lost in her. Many days passed by they both realized their love for each other but were scared to confess. Swara was stuck in the conflict of her mind and heart
Mind : Oh shut up u pest, how can our Swara trust this Sanskar, don’t u know many people like this Sanskar use girls like Swara only to satisfy their desires ok
Heart : Oh u shut up u practical rodent, I need a rodenticide over here….can’t u see Sanskar’s love for Swara his eyes huh! Practical idiot!
Mind : Ay u soft hearted idiot….
Heart : (cuts off) For ur information I’m a heart if u don’t know hahaha u need to check ur eyes and get spectacles then u’ll be the first ‘Chashmish Brain’ Hahaahah
The heart keeps laughing
Mind : Hey u shut up
Heart : U pant down
Finally Swara gets irritated by their conflict
Swara : Shut up both now!!!!
They both keep quiet. While on the other side Sanskar was thinking how to propose her
Sanskar : (monologue) Hmm I must think of a beautiful way to propose her….such a way that she’ll..she’ll fall for me. I can’t wait any more if that Sahil proposes her before me I won’t be able to live
He thinks for a while then jumps up in happiness
Sanskar : Yes!!! Yes..yes..yes…..I got an idea! I got an idea!
He dances in joy and then goes to prepare somethings. Next day in the evening Sanksar messages Swara
Sanskar : (message) Hey Swara..Can u please come to meet me now at my home…urgent!
On the other side Swara’s phone buzzes and she reads the message
Swara : What urgent work he has…let’s see
She goes to his house
Swara : What happened Sanskar y u called me so urgently haan?
Sanskar : One minute
He takes out a cloth and covers her eyes with it
Swara : (feels the cloth) Sanskar what happened y…
Sanskar cuts her off by carrying her
Swara : Sanskar what r u doing
Sanskar : Can’t u feel or what? I haven’t covered ur feeling cells ur asking ‘What r u doing’ I’m carrying u because u can’t see anything and I’ve covered ur eyes because I have a surprise for u
Swara : Hmm u carried me but don’t drop me I’m heavy
He nodes and goes on. After walking for quiet some time he kept her down and opened the cloth. She was awestruck seeing the decoration. They were under the starry sky with a lot of trees near by decorated with red and white balloons. She was even surprised when Sanskar kneels down in front of her
Sanskar : Swara I know ur surprised but saying this is important. Swara from the day I saw u I fell for u, we then became friends I came more closer to u, asking this important, I love u, do u love me? Will u allow me me to be the father of our children? Will u allow me to grow old with u?
Swara was numb hearing this while her heart and minds conflict started again
Heart : Swara accept it don’t listen to this pest…practical idiot!
Mind : Please Swara try and understand he’s not right listen to me not this emotional fool
Heart : (loud) Ay!!
Mind : (louder) Ay!!!!
Swara again got irritated
Swara : Shut up!
Sanskar was baffled seeing her silence
Sanskar : Swara please answer
Swara : Yes Sanskar, I love u too!!!
He gets overwhelmed hearing her answer and hugs her tightly planting a kiss on her fore head. While they don’t know someone saw them and burned with jealousy, it was Kavitha (cheapdy?)
Kavitha : No Sanskar…u can’t be anyone else’s till I’m there…ur mine only mine!
2 years passed SwaSan were married happily, until one day…
Kavitha : (she comes to Sanskar’s mansion) Sanskar where r u??
She calls him and he comes from upstairs
Sanskar : Now what??
Kavitha : Swara is not there right!
Sanskar : No she’s in office..
Kavitha : Look at this
She opens an envelope and takes out Swara’s picture with Sahil..1 with Sahil carrying her ans the second with Sahil kissing her on her forehead, as expected Sanskar got angry and went out of there while Kavitha smirked
Kavitha : Yes! As expected now Swara will be out and Kavitha will be in
She happily went out from there while Sanskar reached Swara’s office and barged in her cabin
Swara : (happily) Sanskar!! U here….y r u angry haan! I already gave u good morning kiss then what u want!!
Sanskar doesn’t pay a heed to her words and shows her the pictures
Sanskar : Swara what is this? Just tell me once these pictures are fake, then that Kavitha will be gone, please tell me once
Swara : (shocked) Sanskar where did u get these pictures from, yes they r real but..
Sanskar : (cuts off) Enough! What I thought about u what u became as. U know what go and stay with Sahil itself..
He says this and leaves her shattered
Swara : Sanskar listen..
She starts crying and remembers how this happened
FLASHBACK
2 years ago in SwaSan’s college. Swara was really sick she still managed to come to college and that time Sanskar wasn’t present
Sahil : Hi Swara
Swara : (feeble tone) H..hi
Sahil : What happened Swara?
He touches her forehead
Sahil : Swara ur burning up..who told u to come to college
Swara : (feeble voice) No….I…h..had t..to…co..come
Sahil : No ur not
Saying this he carried her
Swara : (feeble tone) B..but Sahil
Sahil : Shut up!
After walking for sometime he drops her home
Sahil : Take care
He says and kisses her forehead and leaves
FLASHBACK ENDS
Swara : This happened 2 years back who clicked these pictures??
But her heart and mind again got into conflicts
Mind : Look I told u not to believe this duffer
Heart : Shut up u practical pest. Sanskar must be doing this for some reason someone brainwashed him maybe
Mind : Oh hello no one brainwashed him u emotional fool. I told u before these kind of people just satisfy themselves that’s y they use girls like out Swara
Heart : Shut up!!
Mind : Pant down!!
Swara got irritated by their conflicts
Swara : Both shut up
She feels really sad and after the office ends she goes directly to Sahil’s house
Sahil : U here and y have u wiped of ur sindoor and removed the mangalsutra haan?
Swara : Everything is over Sahil!
She tells him everything and again starts crying
Swara : Sahil please marry me I need to move on if I keep thinking about Sanskar I’ll never be happy
Sahil unwantedly agrees and they marry the next day in the temple. They both lived happily, Swara became happy again till one day while making the room she suddenly fell unconscious
Sahil : Swara..Swara(pats her cheek).Swara
He gets worried and carries her to the hospital
Sahil : Doctor..doctor see na what happened to her
Doctor checks her and then comes out
Sahil : Doctor what happend?
Doctor : Nothing to worry she’s fine in fact its a happy news ur wife is pregnant
Sahil gets overjoyed and goes to meet Swara he enters the ward and sees her crying
Sahil : Swara what happend y r u crying? Its a happy news
Swara : I know Sahil but this kid is Sanskar’s
She turns her face away from him
Sahil : I know Swara it’s ok
Swara : If u want I can abort this child
Sahil : No need, I will take care of this child like my own
Swara : Promise me that u will never let this child know ur not its father
Sahil : Hmm
They go home. 6 months pass by in the midnight
Swara : Sahil…Sahil wake up
Sahil : Now what u want
Swara : Vanilla ice cream ….no strawberry…no vanilla…hmm no get both
Sahil : How much will u eat..just now I bought u salad…how much does this baby eat ugh!! I won’t spare it when it comes out
Swara : Hahahaha now go get it
Sahil gets happy seeing her laughing and gets the ice cream for her. Next day they both went shopping Swara was walking happily when she dashed into someone (that someone is Sanskar), and Sanskar saved her by holding her waist. He finally gets a good look of her and gets shocked to see Swara
Sanskar : (whispers) Swara!!!!
Swara hears Sanskar’s voice she opes her eyes and gets even shocked to see Sanskar. She immediately gets up and goes to Sahil
Swara : Sahil come we’ll go to some other mall. Come!
Sahil : But…
He looks around and sees Sanskar and understands her mood swing and they leave from there, while seeing them go Sanskar notices Swara’s baby bump he gets angry and somewhat happy
Sanskar : (monologue) I missed u so much Swara, and u married him…but wait this child is my or his…(gets angry) I won’t spare him if he did anything with Swara
He angrily goes from there. One week passed he found Swara’s address and reached there when Sahil wasn’t there. He angrily barged in
Sanskar : (shouts) Swara!!!
She hears Sanskar’s voice and comes down
Swara : Now what haan! U told me enough and as u said I came here now won’t u let me be happy
Sanskar : Leave that! Just tell me this child is mine right not Sahil’s na
Swara : Hmm ur right but one change this is only my child! Understand now get out!
Sanskar leaves sadly and sits outside
Sanskar : Y did I do it
Just then Sahil comes there
Sahil : Ya right y did u do it. U know how much she cried after u blamed her simply..yes those pictures r true but u don’t know what happened do u?
He nodes no and Sahil tells him everything and that leaves Sanskar shocked
Sahil : Where r u going? Don’t u want to apologize to Swara
Sanskar : Later..for now teaching that Kavitha a lesson is important
He leaves from there (don’t expect me to write the lesson he gives to Kavitha?). Next day he again comes to Sahil’s house
Sanskar : Swara please Swara forgive me I’m an idiot for not believing u please Swara
He said this following her. Just then Sahil comes
Sahil : Yaar Swara he’s right…zyada bhav mat khao na please
Swara : Waise Sahil u r going for ur business trip right for 4 days
Sahil : Hmm so what?
Swara : So I’ll give him his punishment and then forgive him okay!
Sankar’s jaw dropped down hearing the word punishment but nodded in helplessness
2 months passed Sahil and Sanskar walking here and there outside Swara’s ward. After sometime they went inside hearing a baby’s crying voice
Doctor : Congrats it’s a girl
Sanskar was overjoyed seeing his daughter. Yes Swara had forgiven him but with a punishment
Sahil : Waise how did Swara take revenge haan
Sanskar frowned hearing that while Swara was laughing
FLASHBACK
Sanskar’s POV
Ur Swara madam took proper revenge in those 4 days
* Swara : So Mr. Maheshwari come here *
She took me to the kitchen I never expected doing that
Sahil : Accha what she told u
* Swara : Clean all these dishes now
Sanskar : Swara y!! *
My mouth opened in ‘O’ seeing all those dishes
Sahil : Then
What then I stared at those dishes for sometime then it took me 2 long hours to do that. God! The work I did in those 2 hours I didn’t do in 2 years
Sahil : Hahahaha then
Abay ay tumhe hassi aa rahi hai. Meri halat patli ho gayi. Then after 10 mins this maharani came with her cravings God how do u manage those cravings
* Swara : Go get me chocolate all flavours*
My mouth opened wide hearing all the flavours
* Sanskar : What???? Just now u had 3 whole packs of chips and now this
Swara : Shut up and get me chocolate now!!*
Seriously yaar how did u manage it
Sahil : Bhai even my halat was like ur’s
All my days were like these cleaning everything and bear her cravings. Finally on the 4th day
* Swara : (strokes his hair) Wake up Sanskar*
She kindly woke me up when I got up I realized that it was 10
* Sanskar : God I woke up so late I’ll do the work now
Swara : No need I forgive u. I don’t want to die drinking ur extra sugar tea
Sanskar : Y didn’t u tell me
Swara : I couldn’t waste the food and especially if it’s made by u..*
She cut herself by hugging me she had finally forgiven me and we remarried in a temple
FLASHBACK ENDS
Sahil was laughing like a maniac
Sahil : Haha I’m feeling so bad for u bro
Sanskar : Haan haan has lo jitna has na hai has lo mera bhi din aayga then I’ll show u but for now my cute daughter
He picked her up and kissed Swara on her forehead
Sanskar : Thank u for giving me this happiness
Finally everything was alright they got their real happiness back. Soon Sahil got married again with Kavitha as she realized she was only obsessed with Sanskar and truly in love with Sahil
5 years later Sanskar was running behind Kriti (their daughter)
Sanskar : Kriti stop get ready u have to go to school come now please for daddy
Kriti : Fine but only if Ansh (Sahil and Kavitha’s child) comes
Sanskar : Meri ma he got ready
Swara : (comes there) Kriti here ur tiffin box finish it….yeh kya u haven’t got ready yet jaldi karo look Ansh also got ready
Kriti : Mummy what full time Ansh Ansh even I’m there
Swara : Ok my princess go get ready
Soon they leave for school and Kavitha, Swara, Sanskar and Sahil share a group hug thanking god for such lovely kids
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That’s it sorry if I bored u to death ?
But please give ur responses they might help me in future
And if my ending was abrupt sorry for that
26 Comments
it is lovely
Wat should I say
I think u should have described it more
But its gd
Wow nice one
Amazing
Nice
Nice
Gud dear……!!!!!
nice..
nyc
Amazing dr….
awesome dear ?
RJ dear,, ur writing is good.. keep going.. !! story was nyc..
but sorry to say i didn’t like it..
1st of all Sanskar misunderstood her.. that’s ookk..they would have solved that problem …
2nd When Sanskar asked or blamed her she didn’t even tried twice/thrice to make him understand or saying the truth.. instead iif she went to Sahil.. lioe seriously? what was that for?
3rd in a few days ahe wanted to become Sahil’s … like seriously? Did she ever loved him? oh God i understand both are at fault but saying those dialogues by Swara u just ruined her character.. omggg both insulated marriage… i didn’t like it at all.. !!
overall was good..
do write more dear.. sorry if i words hurt u but acc to me it was needed to convey my feelings…
Thnk u… 🙂
Like seriously love is like that ki patii ne chora toh agle hi din dusre se shadii kar lo…huh…
Writing was gud
Awesome dear
Awesome….
Good one
Dear I liked your story plot a lot…you could have written it more detailed do it would seem convincing…. Swara how can she decide to abort that child…it doesn’t suit her character….when sanky left her she straight away went to sahil instead of sanky…..and why would she tell sahil that its sanskaar child because they never got physical so it was obvio that the child is sanky’s…these things kinda spoiled swara’s character….but I loved your story..just wanted you to describe it more…
nice
Nice dear
nice one. but sanskar misunderstanding swara, i didn’t like that part and swara’s punishment…..umm… i thought she will not accept him and he doing a lots of things to convince her. and swara thinking to abort the child was not good. and coming to sahil, i never imagined sahil’s to be this much good. sorry if i hurt you
Nyc
Wat was dat ???
Sorry to say bt i didn’t lykd it…
1. Sanskar misundrstood her
2. She didn’t even try for once to clr d MUz fine bt
3.she gone dirctly to sahil n married him lyk srsly ???
4.she even askd she can abort d baby ??
5. Dan sanskar came to knw abt it aftr some months she gve him punishmnt n married him again
Is marriage somekind of joke ???
Fine snaksra misundrstd her she cud leave him n al bt she married sahil d next sec.. did ahe evr loved him??
No offence dear….but i did not like it at all…first the fall once sanskaar distruster swara, she just like that went to sahil….was marriage a game for her to marry trice? Then she forgave sanskar and the punishment was to wash vessels??that was not nice at all dr…then story plot should be modified a bit and marriage should be shown in a more serious manner.Then you can describe the story more and maybe keep the description a bit long to capture the readers attention…sry if i had h]urt you with my words…but good try and try more os
Awesomeeee dr….
Sorry if u mind, but Bringing a little modification in one of the KRPKAB ff and marking it as ur OS and posting it on swaragini page ? I think it was maleeha’s ff coz I was a silent reader of her that ff. Ok, u just adapted the mistrusting and punishments idea but u must have given her the credit at least.
Anyways, it was a good try from ur side. I liked it
Nice