Hi peeps I’m Rithika
I’m back with a modified version of my OS ‘Can u give me one more chance??’ I hope this will have better comments. And ya most parts will be same…
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Swara was walking through the gates of her new college. Nervousness took over her mind, she wasn’t concentrating on her movement and the result was dashing into Sanskar. As a result Swara fell on top of Sanskar
Swara : (comes to her senses) Uh….sorry…
She said got up from him and went while Sanskar was captivated by her beauty
Sanskar : (monologue) First time in my life I’ve seen God’s perfect creation
He smiles to himself and goes. Soon it was their break time Swara was sitting on the table eating her food while Sanskar came there and sat near her
Sanskar : Can I?
Swara : Hmm
Sanskar : Ur new here?
Swara : Ya. By the way I’m Swara….Swara Bose
Sanskar : Hi, nice to meet u, I’m Sanskar…Sanskar Maheshwari
They shake hands while he was again lost in her. Many days passed by they both realized their love for each other but were scared to confess. Swara was stuck in the conflict of her mind and heart
Mind : Oh shut up u pest, how can our Swara trust this Sanskar, don’t u know many people like this Sanskar use girls like Swara only to satisfy their desires ok
Heart : Oh u shut up u practical rodent, I need a rodenticide over here….can’t u see Sanskar’s love for Swara his eyes huh! Practical idiot!
Mind : Ay u soft hearted idiot….
Heart : (cuts off) For ur information I’m a heart if u don’t know hahaha u need to check ur eyes and get spectacles then u’ll be the first ‘Chashmish Brain’ Hahaha
The heart keeps laughing
Mind : Hey u shut up
Heart : U pant down
Finally Swara gets irritated by their conflict
Swara : Shut up both now!!!!
They both keep quiet. While on the other side Sanskar was thinking how to propose her
Sanskar : (monologue) Hmm I must think of a beautiful way to propose her….such a way that she’ll…..she’ll fall for me. I can’t wait any more if that Sahil proposes her before me I won’t be able to live
He thinks for a while then jumps up in happiness
Sanskar : Yes!!! Yes…yes…yes…..I got an idea! I got an idea!
He dances in joy and then goes to prepare somethings. Next day in the evening Sanskar messages Swara
Sanskar : (message) Hey Swara…Can u please come to meet me now at my home…urgent!
On the other side Swara’s phone buzzes and she reads the message
Swara : What urgent work he has…let’s see
She goes to his house
Swara : What happened Sanskar y u called me so urgently haan?
Sanskar : One minute
He takes out a cloth and covers her eyes with it
Swara : (feels the cloth) Sanskar what happened y…
Sanskar cuts her off by carrying her
Swara : Sanskar what r u doing
Sanskar : Can’t u feel or what? I haven’t covered ur feeling cells ur asking ‘What r u doing’ I’m carrying u because u can’t see anything and I’ve covered ur eyes because I have a surprise for u
Swara : Hmm u carried me but don’t drop me I’m heavy
He nodes and goes on. After walking for quite some time he kept her down and opened the cloth. She was awestruck seeing the decoration. They were under the starry sky with a lot of trees near by decorated with red and white balloons. She was even surprised when Sanskar kneels down in front of her
Sanskar : Swara I know ur surprised but saying this is important. Swara from the day I saw u I fell for u, we then became friends I came more closer to u, asking this important, I love u, do u love me? Will u allow me to be the father of our children? Will u allow me to grow old with u?
Swara was numb hearing this while her heart and minds conflict started again
Heart : Swara accept it don’t listen to this pest…practical idiot! Huh!
Mind : Please Swara try and understand he’s not right listen to me not this emotional fool
Heart : (loud) Ay!!
Mind : (louder) Ay!!!!
Swara again got irritated
Swara : Shut up!
Sanskar was baffled seeing her silence
Sanskar : Swara please answer
Swara : Yes Sanskar, I love u too!!!
He gets overwhelmed hearing her answer and hugs her tightly planting a kiss on her fore head. While they don’t know someone saw them and burned with jealousy, it was Kavitha (cheapdy?)
Kavitha : No Sanskar…u can’t be anyone else’s till I’m there…ur mine only mine!
2 years passed SwaSan were married happily, until one day…
Kavitha : (she comes to Sanskar’s mansion) Sanskar where r u??
She calls him and he comes from upstairs
Sanskar : Now what??
Kavitha : Swara is not there right!
Sanskar : No she’s in office..
Kavitha : Look at this
She opens an envelope and takes out Swara’s picture with Sahil..1 with Sahil carrying her and the second with Sahil kissing her on her forehead, as expected Sanskar got angry and went out of there while Kavitha smirked
Kavitha : Yes! As expected now Swara will be out and Kavitha will be in
She happily went out from there while Sanskar reached Swara’s office and barged in her cabin
Swara : (happily) Sanskar!! U here….y r u angry haan! I already gave u good morning kiss then what u want!!
Sanskar doesn’t pay a heed to her words and shows her the pictures
Sanskar : Swara what is this? Just tell me once these pictures are fake, then that Kavitha will be gone, please tell me once
Swara : (shocked) Sanskar where did u get these pictures from, yes they r real but..
Sanskar : (cuts off) Enough! What I thought about u what u became as. U know what go and stay with Sahil itself..
He says this and leaves her shattered
Swara : Sanskar listen..
She starts crying and remembers how this happened
FLASHBACK
2 years ago in SwaSan’s college. Swara was really sick she still managed to come to college and that time Sanskar wasn’t present
Sahil : Hi Swara
Swara : (feeble tone) H…hi
Sahil : What happened Swara?
He touches her forehead
Sahil : Swara ur burning up…who told u to come to college
Swara : (feeble voice) No….I…h..had t..to…co..come
Sahil : No ur not
Saying this he carried her
Swara : (feeble tone) B…but Sahil
Sahil : Shut up!
After walking for some time he drops her home
Sahil : Take care
He says and kisses her forehead and leaves
FLASHBACK ENDS
Swara : This happened 2 years back who clicked these pictures??
But her heart and mind again got into conflicts
Mind : Look I told u not to believe this duffer
Heart : Shut up u practical pest. Sanskar must be doing this for some reason someone brainwashed him maybe
Mind : Oh hello no one brainwashed him u emotional fool. I told u before these kind of people just satisfy themselves that’s y they use girls like out Swara
Heart : Shut up!!
Mind : Pant down!!
Swara got irritated by their conflicts
Swara : Both shut up
She feels really sad and after the office ends she goes directly to Sahil’s house
Sahil : U here and y have u wiped of ur sindoor and removed the mangalsutra haan?
Swara : Everything is over Sahil!
She tells him everything and again starts crying
Swara : Sahil please help me. Tell me what to do further na…please because I’m carrying his child too!
Sahil was shocked
Sahil : Then y didn’t u tell him haan. He would have been really happy
Swara : I tried to…but he didn’t listen to me
Sahil : This guy…I know him very well he won’t listen to anyone when he’s angry
Swara got sad
Sahil : U do one thing till he calms down u go somewhere abroad na, then ur mind will also freshen up and his anger will lessen then tell him the good news…
Swara : (hugs him) Thank u thank u so much Sahil ur right, I’ll go to Laksh bhai’s house in Delhi there I’ll meet Ragini bhabi also
Sahil : Hmm okay I’ll book ur tickets too
Swara : Thanks
Soon she reaches Delhi and goes to Laksh’s house. She stands on the door and sees Laksh and Ragini doing work
Swara : (shouts) Bhai!!!!
She calls him and Laksh looks at her and gets happy
Laksh : Shona!!!(happy)
He goes towards her and hugs her
Laksh : Shona Sanskar…where is he
The smile of Swara’s face disappeared and she tells him everything. Laksh gets angry
Laksh : This surely must be that Kavitha….usse toh mein chodunga nahi
Swara : Bhai leave it…I want to tell u happy news
Laksh : What??
Swara : Ur going to be a mama
Laksh was overjoyed hearing that , he immediately called Ragini
Laksh : Ragini…Ragini come fast
She came down
Ragini : Tell…arey Swara u here…where’s Sanskar??
Swara tells her everything she gets happy and sad. Sad for Sanskar leaving Swara and happy because she’s going to become mami
Ragini : Kya baat hai Swara. Now u must stay here for all ur 9 months haan
Swara : Haan y not bhabi
8 months passed Swara got her happiness back in Delhi while in Mumbai Sanskar lost his happiness after knowing the truth from Sahil he was broken as he insulted his love
Sanskar : Sahil mere bhai please tell where is she
Sahil : Y haan
Sanskar : Please!!!
Sahil : Hmm okay okay….she’s in Delhi, staying with Laksh and Ragini
Sanskar : Y??
Sahil : What do u mean by y…that day if u would listen to her this wouldn’t happen
Sanskar feels guilty and gets determined to get his Swara back while in Delhi Swara was wondering whether Sanskar’s anger has cooled down or no
Ragini : Arey Swara kahan khoi hui ho haan
Swara : No wo actually bhabi I was thinking whether Sanskar would have forgiven me or not
Ragini : No need to worry he will be here I think in 5-6 mins
Swara : What??
Ragini : Ya I talked to Sahil now he said that he told Sanskar everything he’s going to come here
Swara : Wow!!
Ragini : But u won’t talk to him u will be angry with him
Swara : Y ??
Ragini : Arey u forgot how he simply blamed u badla toh lena padega haan
Here Swara got into thoughts while her mind and heart again started fighting
Mind : Yes Swara now be angry with him and show him how u felt
Swara : U think it will help
Heart : No Swara don’t be angry after all he did realize his mistake na
Swara : Ya I think ur right
Mind : Swara don’t listen to this emotional fool I’m telling u
Heart : Shut up practical pest. I think this brain of ur’s is empty that’s y ur talking rubbish, someone give me a pesticide
Mind : Y
Heart : For spraying it on u idiot
Mind : Shut up
Heart : Pant down
Swara : Shut up NOW!!!
She thinks for a while
Swara : Yes I’ll give him a punishment
Mind : Yes yes yes I won I won..
Heart : Aw!! Swara seriously ur listening to this pest
Swara : Sorry my heart but for the first time I following my mind because he has a point if I forgive Sanskar easily he will always do this
Mind : What first time…aw!!!!
Heart : Hahahaahaha u deserve this hahaha
Swara : OK now both keep quiet
Soon Sanskar arrives
Sanskar : Swara where r u look ur Sanskar came now
Swara : (happy) Sanskar..
Mind : Swara!!
Swara : Aw fine….
Ragini : Dekho Swara kaun aa ya
Swara : Bhabi tell him I’m not interested in talking with him
Sanskar : What oh no!!
Ragini chuckles a bit
Ragini : Y
Swara : Because he hurt me a lot
Sanskar : I’m sorry Shona listen na
He told her with such love that she wanted to melt in his arms but her mind kept reminding her to be angry
Sanskar : Please for our unborn child
Swara : (mind) Isse kaise pata
Sanskar : Sahil told me about it
Swara : Fine if u want my forgiveness u’ll have to pass a test
Sanskar : What test??
Swara : Wait u came now take rest because tomorrow will be very tiring for u
Sanskar : What punishment she’s going to give me…hey bhagwan bacha lena
Next day
Swara : Sanskar u came. Good now go make breakfast for me, bhabi and bhai
Sanskar gave her a ‘seriously’ look
Swara : Dekh kya rahe ho go this is ur punishment to make food for us the whole day whenever and whatever we want okay now go
Sanskar : Hey bhagwan kahan phasa diya
He goes in the kitchen while outside they all chuckle. After about 1 hour he comes out with the food
Swara : (tastes it) Wow not bad hena
Ragini : Haan Sanskar khana acha bana lethe ho
Laksh : Wow yummy even Ragini can’t make food like this
Ragini : (glares) Laksh
Sanskar : Really I made so good
Sanskar smirks and the servant shakes his head
FLASHBACK
Sanskar : Arey Ramu
Ramu : Ji Sanskar ji
Sanskar : Khana banao
Ramu : Par Swara ji ne toh aapko kaha
Sanskar : U making or I’ll fire u
Ramu nodes helplessly
FLASHBACK ENDS
So actually Ramu made the food not Sanskar
Swara : Come u eat
He nodded and they started eating. In the afternoon
Swara : Sanskar com here
Sanskar : Haan what
Swara : Clean my room
Sanskar : What?? But u said only to make food
Swara : But now clean my room even bhai’s room
Sanskar became sad and started cleaning the rooms. After 2 hours he finished
Swara : Good now make pau bhaji
Sanskar : What
Swara : Fast karo after that u have to keep the cloths for drying to
Sanskar was shocked . Poor Sanskar now couldn’t escape while Ramu smirked over there. Finally after 4 hours he finished all the work by now even Swara felt sad so she decided to forgive him
Sanskar : Please Swara I’m sorry I can’t do any work
Swara : Who’s telling u to do work. I came to say ur forgiven
Sanskar was happy and he hugged her
Sanskar : Love u
Soon after 1 month they were blessed with a girl whom they named as Kriti. In Mumbai when Sahil came to know what Sanskar had to deal with he was laughing like a maniac
Sanskar : Sahil enough haan this is too much
Sahil : Hahaha sorry yaar but it was so funny
Swara : Hena
Sahil : Now I know what any girl can do when they take Kaali mata’s roop. This has given me a lessen never to blame Kavitha without any reason(forgot to mention Sahil and Kavitha got married)
THE END
How was it hope it was much better than before
8 Comments
awesome
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Superb yeah this version much better than before version
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this is much better