Raj- aaiye saab aaiye iss kamre mein. Main aapko batatu hoon sab se mast item chuni hai aapke aaj raat ke liye.
DEVIL- maine itne paise apni raat aachi karne ke liye hi di hai aur ab chup chap mujhe vaha le chalo…..jaldi.
Raj- yeh lijye saab aa gaye hum yaha. Agar koi problem hui toh mujhe bula lijiye ga bas aap aache se maje lijiye(he left).
3rd person POV:
DEVIL gets inside n locked the door without seeing anything first. As soon as he turns he is just rooted at his spot just can’t move.
There was a girl sleeping cuddling with the pillow as if she was waiting for her client but felt asleep. Eyes closed, black long hairs (almost till her waist) spread over the pillow, lips quivering a bit because of no blanket on her, cheeks flushed because of crying looking so innocent.
Only one word left his mouth after seeing her-“ANGEL”.
She tammed the DEVIL just by her innocence which no one else saw, might be bcoz she was made only n only for him.
She moved a bit in her sleep n thus the spell was broken n he came back to his senses. All the frustration, anger left when he had a look of her. He put the blanket on her n took a chair that was there in the room n slowly making as less noise as possible moved it towards the bed n sat on it and just watched her while she was sleeping.
THE DEVIL again came back to senses when he heard a knock on the door n quickly opened the door just to see raj standing there.
Raj- saab sab thik hai? Doh ghante ho gaye aur aap aaye ni bahar. Aape ek ghante ke paise diye the.
DEVIL- tum jao main bas abhi aata hoon.
After that he locked the door n went inside to see HIS ANGEL still sleeping.
DEVIL (to himself)- i was watching her from past 2 hours n didn’t even realised it. What just happened to me!! I have never been like this, all my anger flew away just seeing her huh.
DEVIL to HIS ANGEL- i don’t know what u have done to me but the thing i know is that i want u to be mine…just MINE n i will surely get u at ANY COST.
He went out from the room locking it in the process n went to mary, the owner of this brothel.
Mary- aare saab aap aa gaye..aapne ek ghante ke liye bola aur doh ghante ke baad aa rahe ho. Main janti hoon ki vo hai hi aisi jo koi bhi yaha aata hai vo jaada hi rukta hai(blood started boiling inside THE DEVIL just listening to her this sentence but remained calm) lekin aapko iss ek ghante zyada ke liye aur paise dene honge.
DEVIL- ek ghante ke tumne 20000 mange the lekin main tumhe 10lakhs dene ko ready hoon abhi ke abhi( listening to this mary’s eye pop out of there socket) lekin main uss ladki ko hamesha hamesha ke liye apne saath le ja raha hoon.
Mary was having a tough time bcoz that girl could bring more money to her but then again 10lakhs at one go would be something else but the next words of him let her make her choice of sending her with him.
DEVIL- tumhare pas koi option ni h q ki tum janti ho ki main kya kya kar sakta hoon n abhi main chahu toh yaha raid dalwa ke tumhe hamesha hamesha ke liye jail bhi bhijwa sakta hoon. Toh soch samaj ke faisla lena….
He immediately called his manager to bring 10lakhs cash at xyz place. After that he went to her to see her still sleeping…he picked her up in his arms bridal style, kissed her forehead n took her away from that hell in his waiting silver coloured AUDI Q5.
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Hello there its my first short story that i m writing….i read a lot of ffs in TU n thought to write one as my exams got posponed for a month n i was getting very much bored…let me know about your reviews n my mistakes so that i can work on that.
Raj- aaiye saab aaiye iss kamre mein. Main aapko batatu hoon sab se mast item chuni hai aapke aaj raat ke liye.
DEVIL- maine itne paise apni raat aachi karne ke liye hi di hai aur ab chup chap mujhe vaha le chalo…..jaldi.
Raj- yeh lijye saab aa gaye hum yaha. Agar koi problem hui toh mujhe bula lijiye ga bas aap aache se maje lijiye(he left).
3rd person POV:
DEVIL gets inside n locked the door without seeing anything first. As soon as he turns he is just rooted at his spot just can’t move.
There was a girl sleeping cuddling with the pillow as if she was waiting for her client but felt asleep. Eyes closed, black long hairs (almost till her waist) spread over the pillow, lips quivering a bit because of no blanket on her, cheeks flushed because of crying looking so innocent.
Only one word left his mouth after seeing her-“ANGEL”.
She tammed the DEVIL just by her innocence which no one else saw, might be bcoz she was made only n only for him.
She moved a bit in her sleep n thus the spell was broken n he came back to his senses. All the frustration, anger left when he had a look of her. He put the blanket on her n took a chair that was there in the room n slowly making as less noise as possible moved it towards the bed n sat on it and just watched her while she was sleeping.
THE DEVIL again came back to senses when he heard a knock on the door n quickly opened the door just to see raj standing there.
Raj- saab sab thik hai? Doh ghante ho gaye aur aap aaye ni bahar. Aape ek ghante ke paise diye the.
DEVIL- tum jao main bas abhi aata hoon.
After that he locked the door n went inside to see HIS ANGEL still sleeping.
DEVIL (to himself)- i was watching her from past 2 hours n didn’t even realised it. What just happened to me!! I have never been like this, all my anger flew away just seeing her huh.
DEVIL to HIS ANGEL- i don’t know what u have done to me but the thing i know is that i want u to be mine…just MINE n i will surely get u at ANY COST.
He went out from the room locking it in the process n went to mary, the owner of this brothel.
Mary- aare saab aap aa gaye..aapne ek ghante ke liye bola aur doh ghante ke baad aa rahe ho. Main janti hoon ki vo hai hi aisi jo koi bhi yaha aata hai vo jaada hi rukta hai(blood started boiling inside THE DEVIL just listening to her this sentence but remained calm) lekin aapko iss ek ghante zyada ke liye aur paise dene honge.
DEVIL- ek ghante ke tumne 20000 mange the lekin main tumhe 10lakhs dene ko ready hoon abhi ke abhi( listening to this mary’s eye pop out of there socket) lekin main uss ladki ko hamesha hamesha ke liye apne saath le ja raha hoon.
Mary was having a tough time bcoz that girl could bring more money to her but then again 10lakhs at one go would be something else but the next words of him let her make her choice of sending her with him.
DEVIL- tumhare pas koi option ni h q ki tum janti ho ki main kya kya kar sakta hoon n abhi main chahu toh yaha raid dalwa ke tumhe hamesha hamesha ke liye jail bhi bhijwa sakta hoon. Toh soch samaj ke faisla lena….
He immediately called his manager to bring 10lakhs cash at xyz place. After that he went to her to see her still sleeping…he picked her up in his arms bridal style, kissed her forehead n took her away from that hell in his waiting silver coloured AUDI Q5.
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Hello there its my first short story that i m writing….i read a lot of ffs in TU n thought to write one as my exams got posponed for a month n i was getting very much bored…let me know about your reviews n my mistakes so that i can work on that.
Raj- aaiye saab aaiye iss kamre mein. Main aapko batatu hoon sab se mast item chuni hai aapke aaj raat ke liye.
DEVIL- maine itne paise apni raat aachi karne ke liye hi di hai aur ab chup chap mujhe vaha le chalo…..jaldi.
Raj- yeh lijye saab aa gaye hum yaha. Agar koi problem hui toh mujhe bula lijiye ga bas aap aache se maje lijiye(he left).
3rd person POV:
DEVIL gets inside n locked the door without seeing anything first. As soon as he turns he is just rooted at his spot just can’t move.
There was a girl sleeping cuddling with the pillow as if she was waiting for her client but felt asleep. Eyes closed, black long hairs (almost till her waist) spread over the pillow, lips quivering a bit because of no blanket on her, cheeks flushed because of crying looking so innocent.
Only one word left his mouth after seeing her-“ANGEL”.
She tammed the DEVIL just by her innocence which no one else saw, might be bcoz she was made only n only for him.
She moved a bit in her sleep n thus the spell was broken n he came back to his senses. All the frustration, anger left when he had a look of her. He put the blanket on her n took a chair that was there in the room n slowly making as less noise as possible moved it towards the bed n sat on it and just watched her while she was sleeping.
THE DEVIL again came back to senses when he heard a knock on the door n quickly opened the door just to see raj standing there.
Raj- saab sab thik hai? Doh ghante ho gaye aur aap aaye ni bahar. Aape ek ghante ke paise diye the.
DEVIL- tum jao main bas abhi aata hoon.
After that he locked the door n went inside to see HIS ANGEL still sleeping.
DEVIL (to himself)- i was watching her from past 2 hours n didn’t even realised it. What just happened to me!! I have never been like this, all my anger flew away just seeing her huh.
DEVIL to HIS ANGEL- i don’t know what u have done to me but the thing i know is that i want u to be mine…just MINE n i will surely get u at ANY COST.
He went out from the room locking it in the process n went to mary, the owner of this brothel.
Mary- aare saab aap aa gaye..aapne ek ghante ke liye bola aur doh ghante ke baad aa rahe ho. Main janti hoon ki vo hai hi aisi jo koi bhi yaha aata hai vo jaada hi rukta hai(blood started boiling inside THE DEVIL just listening to her this sentence but remained calm) lekin aapko iss ek ghante zyada ke liye aur paise dene honge.
DEVIL- ek ghante ke tumne 20000 mange the lekin main tumhe 10lakhs dene ko ready hoon abhi ke abhi( listening to this mary’s eye pop out of there socket) lekin main uss ladki ko hamesha hamesha ke liye apne saath le ja raha hoon.
Mary was having a tough time bcoz that girl could bring more money to her but then again 10lakhs at one go would be something else but the next words of him let her make her choice of sending her with him.
DEVIL- tumhare pas koi option ni h q ki tum janti ho ki main kya kya kar sakta hoon n abhi main chahu toh yaha raid dalwa ke tumhe hamesha hamesha ke liye jail bhi bhijwa sakta hoon. Toh soch samaj ke faisla lena….
He immediately called his manager to bring 10lakhs cash at xyz place. After that he went to her to see her still sleeping…he picked her up in his arms bridal style, kissed her forehead n took her away from that hell in his waiting silver coloured AUDI Q5.
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PROLOUGE
Raj- aaiye saab aaiye iss kamre mein. Main aapko batatu hoon sab se mast item chuni hai aapke aaj raat ke liye.
DEVIL- maine itne paise apni raat aachi karne ke liye hi di hai aur ab chup chap mujhe vaha le chalo…..jaldi.
Raj- yeh lijye saab aa gaye hum yaha. Agar koi problem hui toh mujhe bula lijiye ga bas aap aache se maje lijiye(he left).
3rd person POV:
DEVIL gets inside n locked the door without seeing anything first. As soon as he turns he is just rooted at his spot just can’t move.
There was a girl sleeping cuddling with the pillow as if she was waiting for her client but felt asleep. Eyes closed, black long hairs (almost till her waist) spread over the pillow, lips quivering a bit because of no blanket on her, cheeks flushed because of crying looking so innocent.
Only one word left his mouth after seeing her-“ANGEL”.
She tammed the DEVIL just by her innocence which no one else saw, might be bcoz she was made only n only for him.
She moved a bit in her sleep n thus the spell was broken n he came back to his senses. All the frustration, anger left when he had a look of her. He put the blanket on her n took a chair that was there in the room n slowly making as less noise as possible moved it towards the bed n sat on it and just watched her while she was sleeping.
THE DEVIL again came back to senses when he heard a knock on the door n quickly opened the door just to see raj standing there.
Raj- saab sab thik hai? Doh ghante ho gaye aur aap aaye ni bahar. Aape ek ghante ke paise diye the.
DEVIL- tum jao main bas abhi aata hoon.
After that he locked the door n went inside to see HIS ANGEL still sleeping.
DEVIL (to himself)- i was watching her from past 2 hours n didn’t even realised it. What just happened to me!! I have never been like this, all my anger flew away just seeing her huh.
DEVIL to HIS ANGEL- i don’t know what u have done to me but the thing i know is that i want u to be mine…just MINE n i will surely get u at ANY COST.
He went out from the room locking it in the process n went to mary, the owner of this brothel.
Mary- aare saab aap aa gaye..aapne ek ghante ke liye bola aur doh ghante ke baad aa rahe ho. Main janti hoon ki vo hai hi aisi jo koi bhi yaha aata hai vo jaada hi rukta hai(blood started boiling inside THE DEVIL just listening to her this sentence but remained calm) lekin aapko iss ek ghante zyada ke liye aur paise dene honge.
DEVIL- ek ghante ke tumne 20000 mange the lekin main tumhe 10lakhs dene ko ready hoon abhi ke abhi( listening to this mary’s eye pop out of there socket) lekin main uss ladki ko hamesha hamesha ke liye apne saath le ja raha hoon.
Mary was having a tough time bcoz that girl could bring more money to her but then again 10lakhs at one go would be something else but the next words of him let her make her choice of sending her with him.
DEVIL- tumhare pas koi option ni h q ki tum janti ho ki main kya kya kar sakta hoon n abhi main chahu toh yaha raid dalwa ke tumhe hamesha hamesha ke liye jail bhi bhijwa sakta hoon. Toh soch samaj ke faisla lena….
He immediately called his manager to bring 10lakhs cash at xyz place. After that he went to her to see her still sleeping…he picked her up in his arms bridal style, kissed her forehead n took her away from that hell in his waiting silver coloured AUDI Q5.
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Hello there its my first short story that i m writing….i read a lot of ffs in TU n thought to write one as my exams got posponed for a month n i was getting very much bored…let me know about your reviews n my mistakes so that i can work on that.
47 Comments
its so amazing concept yaar
but please post next sooner i cant wait to read more 🙂 :$
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awesome…hope it swasan
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Excellent….. Please continue soon.
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Awesome dear….!!!!! Check it once it is posted three times…..!!!!!!
Yup I saw…by mistake. Next time I will check it.
nice
thank you…
sounds interesting. If it’s swasan I m surely gonna read it.
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it doesn’t matters if its swasan or anyone else bcoz when I read I always imagine my fav couples to be their in any story…
Awasome…plz make it SwaSan…plzzz
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Awasome…
Amazing….
Superb…
plz make it SwaSan…plzzz
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Loved d concept…
Amazing… hope its swasan
Continue soon
thank you so much….
the eyes in the dp are really very preety…
Awesome dear please upload daily and please make it swasan.
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Awsm Dr..
Waiting for next part…
Nd please make pair of Swasan
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Wow Yarr its awesome next part soon plzz
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Awsm ..but pls make it swasan …
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post soon can’t wait
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Plzzz make it raglak
Sry but I m a swasan fan..
hahaah shinchan name its my fab cartoon u know any way aswm episode looking forward fr the story
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n yup shinchan is also my fav…
Thank u to every one…n yup I would past soon
nice..
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Awesome buddy .. keep going. . nd post asap …???????
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????shinchan!!!
Its amazing..
thank you…
Pls make It swalak.there are more swasan ,raglak ff
Awesome
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Awesome
I wished it was raglak
But even if its swasan i will love it
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It’s fantastic. ….?❤?❤❤❤❤❤
thank you..