People!
So firstly I ll show my gratitude to all ur love…
N I ll share something wid u all since u r really special to me..
I used to write stories wen I was a kid but never shared it wid someone.. U guys are d first .. M sharing my work for d first time..n wen u love it .. I feel so amazed I can’t explain..
I love you all…
So d fourth part..
Location: parking of dat mall
Adi n Shravan were walking to d car..
Adi was staring Shravan.
Shravan was a bit disappointed coz he didn’t get a apt tym wid sumo..
Shravan realises ADI’s stare..
Shravan: wat?
Adi: (raising his eyebrow)
Tujhe kaise pta chla ki suman yha aane wali h?
Shravan: ahn! Mujhe ..mujhe kaise pta hoga..
Adi: ah.. Don’t lie… Tujhe pta tha..
Shravan: pagal h kya ? Mai kya ldkiyon ki event list leke ghumta hun?
N walks a lill ahead ..
Adi: sbki nai … Suman ki …
Shravan closes his eyes n bites his lower lip …
Adi walks to him
Adi : sach bol… Tujhe uss din pyas v nai lgi thi na..
Shravan gets nervous .
Shravan: a.. Adi nai pyas lgi thi… Utni nai PR..
Adi laughs ..
Adi : sale .. Shakal dkh apni asa lg ra h ki kisi ne AK47 taan di ho….
Shravan: shut up!
Adi : I mean seriously finally u found “d ur kind gal”
Shravan: my kind gal h ya nai pta nai but one of a kind h.. She is full of colors(remwbers d first time he saw her)
Vibrant (d time she was talking to her mother)
Kind hearted (wen she helpd d pups)
Adi : itna jaan gya uske bare me…look at u … Ur in love. .
Shravan: (teasingly) tujhe bda pta h pyar k bare me..
Meri chod apni dkh.. WO dkh vidhi ja help kr good books me aa jaega..
Adi : ammm.. Mai abhi aaya..
Shravan laughs
Shravan moves towards his car…
Shravan : sbko samajh aa ra h pr jisse smjhna chahye usse nai.. Kamal h yaar..pta nai wo kB..
He turns to see sumo..
Sumo :kya? Kya bdbda rae ho khud me?!
Shravan: phew! Agg.. Kuch nai .. Tm!?
Sumo: hmh! Mujhe pta chl gya h k tm yha kyu aae ho! Shravan: (shocked) kk.. Kya!?
Sumo: ar avi avi tmne kya kia WO v Maine dkha..
Shravan: (in his heart) isse to sb pta lg gya… Gya tu Shravan… Baki chor tu to friendzone v nai hoga…. Sb khtm…
She was staring him…
Sumo: mujhe pta tha tmhe v whi feel ho ra h Jo mujhe…
Shravan: (more shocked)
Kyaaa!!! Tm v whi feel krti ho??
Sumo: haan (she turned the other Syd) kuch v kho cutest pair h …
Shravan: (smiles) haan wo to h..
He was going to hug her..
Sumo : hme kuch krna chahye inke lye…
Shravan: (smiles) haan..
Ek minute… Inke kinke?
Sumo points towards adi vidhi..
Sumo: inke lye… Inhi k lye aae ho naa..
Shravan: (sadly) haan… Exactly…waah yar inki baat kaise turant samajh gai tm…(sarcastic)
Sumo: hmm…
Shravan: but .. Usse phle hm frnds h rite?
They look at each other n smile..
Shravan wanted a hug but suman took her hand towards.. Nevermind!
Sumo: to mai chlu!?
Shravan nods..
Sumo : ammm…. Points towards their hand..
Shravan leaves her hand ..
Shravan : oo sorry!
Sumo : its okay..!
She goes..
Location: Shravan’s room
Shravan was lying on his bed..
Shravan: pagal h ye ldki puri duniya ki khbr h pr meri nai..itni ajeeb baat h ek hafta hua h usse Jane fr v itni apni lgti h…
He remembers their moments … He recieves a msg .. (He gets excited thinking it to be sumans msg but it wasn’t .. It was a remainder msg about the fresher’s party..)
Shravan: ar ek ye fresher’s … Isme mera event dalne ki kya zarurt thi.. Now I ll modelise dose stupid girls..
Morning
Shravan was sleeping his phone rings
Shravan: (huskily) hello ?
Mom: college?
Shravan: hai mom.. Avi jaa ra hu..
Mom: Skype!?
Shravan: okay
He gets up n freshen ups
He calls her!
Mom: haaye, Baal kaise bna lie h..
Shravan: m convinced ap normal ho .. .
Mom: shut up!
Someone knocks d door..
Shravan: aaja khula h,,
Adi comes in..
Adi : morning aunty..
Mom: gudnite beta!
Shravan: ab bolo kya interrogation krna h?
Mom: how mean mai shak krti hu?
Shravan: apko zarurt nai pdti..
Mom: acha to! Kl tere credit card se kuch 8,000 ki shopping hui?
Shravan : (looks at adi)
Ahmm.. Haan thodi shopping kri thi..
Mom: thodi hi pr middi?
Adi looks at him shocked
Adi : WO dress tune li thi?
He laughs ..
Shravan: mom !! Bills fax krae … So typical..
Adi laughs out loud
Mom: kon h wo ldki!?
Adi: aunty WO….
Shravan kicks his leg
Mom : jldi bol wrna mai tere dad ko..
Shravan: yaar ap hr baat pe dad ko kyu le aate ho!
Mom: to bol?
He takes his phone n sends her sumo’s pic
Mom: wow , she is so
Shravan: beautiful ..
Mom: ahhaa(excited) to!? Baat kha tk pohonchi?
Shravan: avi hm bs frnds h…
Mom: kya? Kitna slow h tu..
Shravan: mom! Bs ek week hua h mujhe usse jante..
Mom: tujhse ek saal me v kuch nai hoga..
Adi laughs..
Shravan: tu kya hass ra h ..mom! Ye v kuch km nai h
Ap ruko…
He sends vidhi’s pic too
Mom: waah dono bete set ho gae..
They all smile..
Location: college
Sumo n Shravan were hurriedly going to dere classes.. They bump into each other…
Both : satyanash!!
Both : tum?
Dey smile .. N leave..
Next day fresher’s party..
All were enjoying…
Dance , music , fun..
Shravan was dere in a black texuedo n loose tie knot..
He sees her coming…
All d boys were staring at her..
Shravan: (in his heart) so chuck it… I can’t stop dem stare at her.. She is soo
Sumo: beautiful?
Shravan: (amazed)
Sumo turns around n asks him!
Shravan : yea very much..
Dey all dance…. After sometime she goes out wid vidhi just den d host calls for him
Shravan gets to d floor ..
All d gals hoot..
Shravan: wats d game!?
Host: sooooo… Girls r u excited!?
Yeaaa!
H: so ye bottle hm turn kregae n jiske uppar ye bottle rukegi usse hmare hunk Shravan k sath dance krne ka mauka milega…..
Woooh…
Shravan luks out for her but dere was no one..
Shravan: siyappa!
They spin d bottle n it stops on a girl .. He gets up to see who it was n gets happy seeing sumo..
Adi : (in shravans ear) control.. Sbko pta lg jaega..
Sumo: amm! Kya hua?
Host : kya hua ye hm btate h…
She goes to the stage
Host: apko dance krna h hmare….. Shravan k sath..
Sumo: han!? I can’t
Evryone was shocked..
Host: amn but..
Shravan : rhne de na yaar .. Ldki h kya nachegi!
Sumo : acha?
He comes close to her n den goes to dance on dance ke legend ( hero movie)
At d end of d song dey dance as a duo .. Very beautifully….
Sumo was staring at Shravan .. Shravan snaps his hand around ..
Sumo shys n Shravan smiles..
Precap: shraman quality time together in d college terrace .. Their first hug..
N entry of tiaa
Hope u lyk it…
Plz share ur veiws….
N tell me how do u lyk it..
Lots of love ❤
Sorry for being late actually dere was some error.. ?
55 Comments
Its was cute.. Shravan and his mom’s bonding was funny and cute.. Sumo, kab samjhogi! Nice one.. Post soon
haha.. thanks Niki.. m glad u liked.. ❤
loved it . pls continue with the same track.
thanks deotima .. the further part is more interesting … 🙂
Amazing amazing amazing…… Kya bolu di…..aap toh just fab ho….u r my inspiration di kash main bhi kabhi aap ke jaisa likh saku……and thanks for the update di….main bahut der se wait kar rhi thi…..and meri wait bekkar nhi gyi….it was just fabulous????
thanks khushi … so sweet of u.. but tm phle hi bht talented ho … really u write so good .. I enjoy it.. 😉
Nice epi……..
thanks Lily..
superb fantastic amazing episode…u know it really feel good to read ur story as these days waiting the original really irritating…other thong i like ur ff shravan too much…his character is really inresting from original one n funny Hindi made the conversation more adorable….update soon next part
n yes Hindi gives soul to dialogues
n my Shravan n suman both r very much different from d show…. u kno in d begining I was scared dat may b u won’t accept the change .. but u all gave a great response ..
thanks for dat …❤
thanks sss m glad you liked it.. ❤
Amezing.. Superb.. so sweet ? Shraman dance…?
m glad you liked it. ty bhoomi
hiiii sumo….u always surprised me….aap itna achhaaa kaise likh leti ho yaar???? ( touch wood ) jb bhi mai aapki story pdti hu tb automatically becomes smile 🙂 on my face…i feel like mai tv pr koi serial dekh rhi hu, or sare characters mere samne h….everyone can imagine… but apni imagination ko words me describe krna bahut hi hard work h or kuch log hi ye kaam kr skte h aur aap unn logo me se EK ho…thank you sumo….sumo ek baat bolu…ur imagination power is strong n ur writing skills is too good…agr aapko life me chance mile to aap writing ki field me jrur apply krna…ur future is so bright in writing field….May be kisi din hum sb aapka likha hua koi serial tv pr dekh rhe ho…. 🙂 🙂
hy Ankita …. tm ase hi comment krti rhna .. I feel so good.. thanks yaar…
aur tum hameha itnaa achha hi likhti rhna… 🙂
n rhi baat likhne ki. … shayd aage jake main koi book likhun.. kyuki likhna bht pasnd h mujhe…
waise jb Maine yha likhna shuru kia to lga nai tha ki itna warm response milega… ar tmhare jaisi commentor.. bht acha lga tmhe jaan ke …
All the best tumari book ke liye….i know ki i can’t write properly in English 🙁 but i can read properly…. pr mujhe English me bolne or likhne me problem hoti h….so guys please forgive me, agr maine likhe me koi mistake ki ho to plssss……….Sumo kya aap or anyone else meri help krega….i want to improve my english….so guys kya aap sbhi mujhe kuch tips doge, jisse meri english improve ho ske….plsss 🙁
Ankita how did ur dp got changed.. mean from brown to green ??
i don’t know sumo….maine bhi just abhi check kiya…Mai to apni ID register krva rhi thi….but register to hui nhi….aur dp change ho gya 🙂 🙂
n about English…
just read English newspapers n magazine..
n watch English series… it gives you d fluency..
n if u need basics .. den search on internet for basic idea on English speaking
I hope it helps… 🙂
thanks sumo for the tips….it will help me a lot…. 🙂
u r just amazing sumo <3
seriouslyy hatss of too u for writing such a beautiful fanficion 🙂 🙂 🙂 love it …!!
thanks maria … m glad you liked it.. ❤
Amazing
thanks nandini
U r just amazing sumo…really enjoyed this story now waiting for next part
thanks seema m glad you liked..;-)
waise tm kha se ho Ankita?
I’m from bikaner ( Rajasthan) where r u from? n which class r u studying?
what is d name of your ff ankita…
m from Ranchi jharkhand …
our captain’s town…. I love to give my introduction like dis…. 😀 😉 🙂
I know I m a lil late…..sorry for that
But yr kya likhti ho….and han jab book likhogi na toh mujhe zarroor batana main pakka Teri book read karungi sumo…..I love reading….. And ur ff is really awesome…. Mazza aa jaata hai padh ke and the best thing is u write in Hindi …..saare emotions best way mein bahar aate hai…..keep it up dear u r the best??
haan … I was waiting for ur comment … finally!
so? how r u?
n yes jb likhungi to zarur btaungi …:) 😀
n thanks .. for dis love..
mere se zada u r d best! ❤
hey lovelylady maine koi FF nhi likha h….because my writing skills is not good….
but agr kvi likho… do tell me… I ll read it …. 🙂
i love reading more than writing….aur likhne ke liye to aap sbhi ho hi….aap itni achhi achhi stories likhna or mai pdungi….. 🙂
its ok dear…..likhna shuru karo hindi englsh mila kr likho… dheere djeere sari heaitatn khtm ho jayegi….
plz strt wrtng dear……
tum khud apne aap ko kaise jdg kr skti ho dear……
*hesitation
hiiii lovely lady….agr maine likhna start kr diya to aap sbhi ye page chhod kr hi bhaag jaoge… 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 just kidding…. thanks for the encouraging me…
if u wrt any ff thn plz infrm me in my ff page….
i wll surely read it….
btw in wch class u r
hey lovely lady….aape register kaise krvaya….meri ID to register ho hi nhi rhi h
btw kya prblm ho rha h????
yeah sure lovely lady….I’m student of master in economics….
registration ke liye I m using my phone….i think…. that’s why having problem…aapne phone use kiya tha ya laptop????
mera v issi wjh se nai ho ra… :-\
ni guys hm to phn se hi kiye the……
laprop se try karo….. so that we cn be in tch always
kon sa browser yaar!?
hey lovelylady….vese aapke FF page ka kya naam h…i wanted to read…n where r u from?? nd which class r u studying??
its together forever … dkh lo…
n yes u r senior to me since m a medical aspirant..
iss saal Diya h… I hope u don’t mind me calling u tm… ✌
waooo….that’s great… u r a medical student….no no it’s okay dear….mujhe aap dono se baat krke bht achha lga…thanks to both of u….n haa I’m sure ki tumara medical ka exam clear ho jayega… 🙂
tysm.. kash ho jae… 😉
i hv jst completed my 12th…..
hey u r so younger…. so sweet of u guys….:-)