Heyyo guys 🙂 Seems like I really can’t keep myself away from writing as well as thinking about Mahi! His character is becoming more and more lovable and well-formed with each episode. Not just that, but I also think his character is actually developing with time at a nice pace. I just loved it when he stood up to his Mom for Shivaay but did not disrespect her besides putting down his foot firmly. I believe his huge capacity to love others will do some good to the Oberois, especially Pinky and Jahnvi, as Kamini seems too stupid to realize that yet.
But this ff is not for me to check off all the good things about Mahi, although I have a feeling I’ll have to keep reminding me that more often than not! 🙂
So, this ff is to explore one of the multitudes of paths this story could take from here. I already broke down two of the most probable outcomes in the recap pages for Ranilya, so I’m gonna safely say that there may be some unexpected and unbelievable twists up ahead; or not. Please let me know honest reviews after reading this prologue, though I don’t think there’s much info in it. 🙂
FIND ME: PROLOGUE
MAHI’S PERSPECTIVE
I looked out at the glittering lights in the dark night and turned my mouth organ in my hands. “This wasn’t what I had signed up for! Why doesn’t she understand?” I said to myself. Agitated with my own unusual thoughts, I walked around the edge of the cliff. This was my favorite spot in the world. It was one of the few isolated places in the crowded city that is Mumbai; rejected by the world, just like me. Somehow, it calmed me to know that I wasn’t the only unwanted one and that I could see everyone from up here, even if they all looked like little dots bustling around on the planet’s surface; but no one could see me.
But today this place seemed to have lost its magic on me as my inner turmoil was nothing close to being resolved. If anything, it seemed as if my thoughts were the ones working up the storm rising within me. Just two months ago, I was a different man, someone who would give his life or take another one for the few people he loved. But now I was worrying for the enemy who wanted to capture me, while not giving a thought about my own Mother’s rage! Shivaay, in his palace and surrounded by his family, with every weapon against my life at his disposition was the strongest opponent I could be up against, but the fact was that I had put him back there myself. Mother won’t be happy with my actions, and Ranveer would be on her side too.
No good can come out of this anyways! So why was I doing this? I could finally rest if someone served me the answer on a silver platter, like the ones in that palace, but I don’t think that is going to happen.
I dialed ‘her’ number again, but the same old irritating record of ‘this number is not available’ replied. With a sigh, I sat down on the big rock again, playing the comforting tune and watching the innocent lives I had wanted to change, if only briefly. A dream that suddenly seemed far, far away from my reach… I still think I can do it with some extra effort and a lot of time and money on my hands, but that doesn’t sit so well with my impatient nature and powerless state. Now I think it must be because all of my patience was used up in waiting for my perpetually angry Mother to return what I should rightfully own.
Regardless, I was on my own now, with no shelter whatsoever from the misunderstandings that I knew won’t be cleared in a while. The thought made me feel tired suddenly and I had to remind myself over and over again of what ‘she’ had said to me, “Mahi, a roof is more important than food for people like you and me. Even the people you love won’t love you back unless you have a home to store that love in.” And that’s how I found myself dragging my feet back to the two roomed house in Good Luck Chawl, the place where all my shortcomings come alive to stare me in the face. Also, that’s when I realized that even if it wasn’t meant for me, I wouldn’t really mind being Shivaay if only for the love that was showered on him.
What remained to be seen was to what extent I would go to have that forbidden fruit for myself…
Copyright to Samm
31 Comments
Wow Samm…Nice introductory episode…..looking forward to the ff….
thanks nita 🙂 i posted the first episode now, it should be uploaded soon 🙂
Beautifully written samm?. Waiting for the next update ?
thanks sofiya 🙂 will try to post next soon 🙂
Very good.. But who is SHE???
you’ll come to know soon, gayathri 🙂 thanks for the comment 🙂
Wow samm..
I liked it.. as u said mahi is a character with a lot of potential to be shaped into a solid character..
Ur prologue is very intriguing.. wanna read more of it!
Waiting for the next update!!
Love ur writing!!
thanks anu 🙂 will try to post soon 🙂
Hey samm it’s beautiful, waiting for ur next update, u have conveyed mahi’s pain to us in ur own style
thanks dhar. mahi is one of my fav characters so far, so i wasn’t sure if i will be able to convey his thoughts well. i’m glad you liked it 🙂
It was a really nice starting ….i have a feeling that the “She” is Kamini.Don’t know, it’s just a thought.I am looking forward for your ff.
update soon.
thanks for the comment, tanz. if that ‘she’ is kamini or not, you’ll have to wait and watch! or rather, wait and read 😀
Awesome
thanks shuklarashi 🙂
Amazing start….actually am not watching Ib now because for me the show is bit dragging only ….And ur justification abt maahi and shivaay ‘s characterization is really amazing and in fact i loved this one more than the show only…….U have conveyed maahi’s feelings very beautiful and when u will write more episodes i want 2 see mahi,shiv,om and rudy all including in oberoi moment……I mean it will be so nice 2 read……Hope u will include my small wish…..in any of the episode…..So samm u are on next ff…..Keep writing and thanks for sending links…….
it’s true renima. i, too, don’t watch it when it airs, but my love for both shivaay and mahi, or just nakuul, keeps drawing me back! 😀 also, your wish is my command, so you’ll definitely get to see shivomru with mahi, but it will take some time. so stay tuned 🙂 thanks for the love and support yaara, i’ll try to hold up my work to your expectations 🙂 i just posted the next one, it should be uploaded soon 🙂
It is awesome dear… Nicely written the Mahi pov…
Eagerly waiting for the next update…
thanks nikita 🙂 i’ll try to post on regular intervals 🙂
Awesome
thanks fffan 🙂
Superb dr and mahis pov is superb and whom he mentioned as she???
thanks for your comment arthi 🙂 as for who he mentioned as ‘she’, you’ll have to wait and watch 🙂
Hey Samm Di !! Wow you penned down so food. I always wanted someone to write about mahi. Beautifully written. Post soon Di☺
thanks jerry 🙂 for now, i’m really rooting for mahi being the reason for the oberois to bond and provide him with lots of love and care as he deserves. since i’m guessing it’s not happening anytime now in the show, i thought it would be better to write an ff on him! 😀
Hi, Samm! That was wonderfully written. Mahi is a very interesting character and has a lot of potential.As usual, I loved the vivid descriptiveness in your writing. Awesome ?
thanks diyaa 🙂 i’m glad you liked this 🙂 i’m already floored by mahi and the last two days when he wasn’t shown, i missed him so much! he’s as transparent as clear water, but his situations seem just too cruel. i hope i can put into words exactly how i think his mind must be working and his heart must be feeling. 🙂 thanks a lot for the love and support. 🙂
Nyc prologue
thanks alekhika 🙂
This is awesome dear and is it a first point of view story? If yes then it should be definelty from Mahi’s perspective….and I’m loving the way you portrayed his feelings. It’s very intriguing so continue soon
thanks for the comment kriti 🙂 yes, it will be mostly in mahi’s point of view but i’ll also add other pov’s if needed for the story 🙂 i’m glad you liked it, thanks again 🙂
Fantastic