One more swig might make the torment stop. He took another gulp from the glass in his hand. The poison burned his throat, stung his eyes, and seared through his mind. He walked to the window and looked outside as the rain pelted the glass he was looking through. That was soothing. Why should his brain be the only one getting pelted!” Yeah! If I am getting pelted by the torrent someone else should as well. Someone more deserving. He looked at his watch. “Two p.m.? Why is it so dark then?” The sinister blanket of black vapor had completely smothered any sign of daytime. More rain. More pelting. He took a deep breath and downed all of the spirit in his glass into the spirit that was raging tormented, within him.
Diamond cuts diamond. Iron cuts iron. Will torture cut torture? His eyes glinted dangerously and he stormed out of his room carelessly throwing the glass in his hand behind him. The crashing sound of the glass was lost in the pelting on the window.
“What a dark, dark day!” She thought looking at the window. It gave her a nervous sensation and she did not like it. She was the epitome of confidence and menace. She took pride in it. The long forgotten sensation of fear and nervousness, now creeping back up her spine, annoyed her. She shook her head to throw it off but only got a shudder in return. One of the windows flew open due to the gust of the wind letting a violent spray of rain in. As she rushed to the window and closed it, half drenched, the door to her room flew open. She turned around terrified. “Why didn’t I switch on the lights? It’s as if it’s night. Who’s that?” she peered, looking at the shadow shutting the door. Maintaining a pretense of audacity, she walked toward the door. The shadow turned around and just as he did, a streak of lightning shone bright, illuminating his face, revealing his sinister visage for a heartbeat before everything was dark again.
“What are you doing here?”
“Whom else did you expect. When you sow hatred, you reap the same. I am hatred personified. And here I am to shower all over you.You want me right? You will have me then.” He said with a cold finality as he approached her.
“Get out! You don’t scare me. You don’t know me well enough. I’ll destroy you, you pathetic weakling!”
“You already did. What’s left ain’t no weakling!” he said in a whisper that chilled her blood.
“You know what I can do to those you care about. I’ll torment the hell out of them.”
“You already did. They are barely living. Nothing you do can hurt them anymore. And if you try…” He pulled her by her hand, his vice like grip digging deep into her arms, “I swear to Satan, I will kill you. I got nothing to lose anymore.” he hissed close to her right ear.
“What do you want?” she asked shivering now, truly scared and unable to hide it. It seemed like they were in the middle of nowhere, not a sound except the violent pelting of rain on the window and the maddening howling of wind outside. He was walking her towards the wall, leading her from behind. “Why? Maybe I should shout. That will show him.” she thought fearfully. But just as she did, a large hand clamped her mouth shut.
“Not today. There will be plenty of time to shout later and for good reason. But right now you will quietly take the same pounding you have given me.”
Her face was now pressed against the wall. What is he going to do? Her mind shouted. All of a sudden an immense agony racked her being, stung her eyes, and seared through her brain. Intense fear made her panic but she couldn’t shout. She tried to wriggle free but it made the agony worse.
“Do you want to be free?” he whispered.
She nodded furiously.
“Then, when I turn you around I want to see fear in your eyes. If I don’t I will try harder.”
She nodded again.
Slowly he turned her around and looked into her hateful eyes and finally saw that which eased his pain. He was no longer holding her mouth shut but she was unable to speak. A violent clap of thunder shook the room and her inherent ugliness distorted her beautiful face, drenching it in terror. That satisfied him. “Why don’t I do the act and finish it forever?” he thought clutching at her mercilessly.
Just then, there was a knock at the door. He looked at her thinking she might shout, but she seemed petrified. The knock came again. “Are you all right?” A soft voice inquired.
He flinched back at the sound of that voice. It was the voice of sunshine. It cut through the darkness. It made him stop at the fine line he was about to cross between humanity and “demonicity.” He staggered back a couple steps. He looked at her again and with the remaining vileness in him, took one last chance. ” Remember. I got nothing to lose and I care crap about anyone now. I’ll get you!” With that he turned around, walked to the door and unlocked it. It was still dark, and still stormy. And although he could not see her and she him, he knew she was sunshine. He breathed in her vigor that pulled him back from the fine line to keep him on the side of humanity. Then he marched off, leaving her staring behind him curiously.
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This idea was stuck in my brain and wouldn’t leave. So I thought I’d get it out of my system. It’s upto your interpretation. The characters are from IB and DBO. But you decide who is who. If you are not totally angry with me for writing this then share your thoughts with me. I’d love to read them. Thanks.
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A bit confusing I must say. I’ll read it again. My brain isn’t just working.. ?…. Sorry. (Effect of doing chem for so long ??) …
My guess on the characters…. Soumya and rudra. Idk why I felt so.. but idk. Is my guess ryt?
I read it again btw. The story is just brilliant… Amazed by the way u play with the words bringing them alive. Just too good.
Thanks for bearing with this confusing mess Harshada. The tracks in the two shows have boggled my mind to the point of craziness. ?
Or wait… I feel it’s Omkar gauri and swetlana? Lol. Idk ?
Hahaha…Good guess ?it’s what happens if they throw too much of something in the viewer’s face.
It is awesome dii…. I think it is Anika and shivaay…. And I looks like a war between the hatred darkness and gilltering blooming sunshine…
Thanks for commenting Nikita. Well, the knock at the door makes it confusing if it’s Shivika. But yes a war of darkness and sunshine it is.
Dii it is my thoughts.. Hope it will be full fill your great artistic standard…. Which is reflected in your ff..
I think rumya
Thanks Charitha. Could be. But who’s at the door? ?
Woah you play with words and you write with such a intensity that anyone can visualise the scene happening. Loved every line and everything. Beyond perfect. ❤
Thanks so much Suchitra. Thanking my stars that you liked it☺
Kuch Samjh nhi aya
Thanks Vincy for reading and commenting. And really sorry for the confusion. I had a situation in my mind where a man driven to the point of becoming a monster goes to take a plunge into becoming a demon by torturing the enemy. He is about to cross the fine line when he is pulled back into humanity by a call from hope, purity, and goodness. I did not write the names of characters because I wanted the readers to interpret it according to their own impressions. And more than characters, it was the raw instincts that took center stage in this “awful”, confusing shot. Thanks again for taking the time.
Hai, di. How are you?
I think its Om, Svetlana and Gauri!!
Hey Gayathri. Good and hope you are doing well too. Yes, that’s a very probable and valid guess. Those three would fit in very well. Thanks so much for commenting.?
It was awesome…n I think they must be gaurika….!!!
Thanks so much Deeksha. Your guess is good. Those two would fit into this situation very well.
It’s just superb Diyaa…nd interesting too …nd I think it’s Rumya….
Thanks Lilly. It could be them. But would Soumya be in the room or outside? And who would be the third character? Thanks again for commenting.
Woah…its awesome…..loved it…..just flawless…..
Nd i really hope that it would be shivika….
Thanks Bhavana for reading, appreciating, and commenting. It could be ShivIka but who’d be the third character?
I think sweatlana and omkara
And gauri who knock the door
Thanks for reading and commenting Sanjana. Really appreciate it. And all good guesses! I agree.
Wow…..your writing always dazzles me…. U conveyed so much through a short story…..N so many pair come across me as I read this as all r having hate-love track in IB n DBO…It the slideshow gaurikara…then shivika….followed by Tejvi….Even Priveer n Daksh-Anika for a while.
Now my mind is wandering off thinking what must be the pre n post story of this os…..
But during the conversation between him n her, ‘I’ll destroy u’, ‘i have nothing to lose’, etc. lines also brought flashes of shevtlana n om and Shevtlana n Tej for some moments
Wow! What a great analysis. Tej, hmm? How very interesting. What a track that both father and son would fit the situation against the same woman. I wish they’d go all dark and take the track to another level. I am past disgust anyway now that father and son, both shown snuggling the same woman. ? Thanks so much for taking the time to read, analyse, and comment Nita. Really appreciate it.
Hmm ya even I was amused when Tej n Om both fitted perfectly in this track…..
Om is marrying shevtlana just to ‘save his parents relationship’ but that’s not happening anyway n Tej is lashing it all out on Jhanvi like always. So the whole track is just…..terrible….. I liked the old Om more.
Well anyways, as long as u’ll write I m gonna read it…..all my comments, opinions n praises on all your episodes have been direct dil se……
But if u ever get bored of my extra long comments plz tell me haan….
Bye for now. Take care!
N can u please elaborate the sunshine wala part for me. Please?
Your comments can never be too long. I really enjoy reading them. I do like dark stories but not tacky ones. So I tried to turn the current track all dark. Sunshine was innocent, pure, and positive energy that dispels darkness and in Om’s case, by the current track in the show, would be Gauri.
Oh ohk….thx…..well even I like dark stories but I want happy endings as well….
I felt as if it was Priyanka getting tortured by Shikar. I mean the nervousness turned to boldness could only mean Priyanka. Maybe the track could go on as Priyanka beung forced to hurt Shikar under someones pressure and the golden voice at the door would be Aashi – the only one stoping him from becoming a demon.
Waiting for next!!
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Awestruck!
Cool interpretation!! I loved it. ?
Heya,
Erm . . My mind says, it is Om, Gauri and Svetlana. Aha! I don’t know which characters you’ve kept in mind while writing. A vague idea at least?
Well, getting back to it, I can’t get enough of the story. The words you’ve used are so apt and everything has been described so well. Words might fall short of describing! I’d be looking forward to more of your works and impatiently waiting for EXPRESSIONS UNFETTERED, but probably it’ll take time so, I’m ready to wait for another masterpiece. ?
Thanks Ria. I did have those three in mind. But I wanted the focus to be on atmosphere, aura, and instincts. So I left out the names.
Amazing update… loved it… I think shvetlana and om…
Thanks Ankita. Glad you liked it. Yes I had those two in mind when the idea came to me.
It is OM Vs Swet.. and the softer voice.. I will prefer it to be Jhanvi.. Coz as of now, I can only see Om consider her as his sunshine.. cannot relate Om to Gauri yet.. Unless you create a magic in your writing.. the way you usually do! But the face-off was quite intense!!
Waiting to see what form this takes!
Thanks Anu.?
Seriously i did think it was Rumya !!! And i think the one at the door is soumya s mom ? Not sure about that
Wow! Great interpretation. Thanks Anonymous.
okay after reading it twice… I got it…
the girl & boy in room is svetlana and omkara…
and the voice at the door is gauri..
i guess so…
bcoz after reading it again & again i found resemblance in situation hence i thought so…
anyways whoever the characters r..
this shot was amazing…
superbly written…
marvelous….
Thanks so much Mrunal. Yeah those three gave me the idea but I am amazed at the various interesting takes on the situation. Imagination is a powerful thing!
It amazed me totally……thinking of characters i read it twice……interesting……totally different and brilliant piece of work
Thanks Shivika. Really appreciate it.☺
Hey there Diyaa… whats up? How come you didnt upload another chapter of you masterpiece? I really am eagerly waiting tk see where this goes.
Hi Awestruck! This was just an OS that came to my mind given Om, Swetlana , and Gauri situation. I can think of a short story if enough people are interested. I am still racking my brains for an interesting story for my other ff- Expressions.
How can someone be so heartless ?? I was going to say stone hearted, but stone hearted people still have some feelings hidden in them *afterall their heart is still there* but this act can only be done by a person who is completely heartless!
I mean even when the person knows they have fans eagerly waiting for them to post an article, tht person simply turns a blind eye to their love and affection and dissappears for 10 days!
Know someone like this Diyaa?
? ok fine i did over the top drama but it was nessessary ?. Its been !!10!! days since you posted something. I have been opening this website every single day with a hope tht their will be something uploaded today!… but you have been miserably dissapointing me for the past few days.
Arre yaar ik… you must be busy or caught up in some work of *utmost importance*, but when Aashi can find time for Om, so can youuu. Dont you love the people back who are absolutely fascinated by the beauty of your writing?
Welll all i can do is hope my words *move* ? you and create the compelling effect i wanted them to.
Waiting for you reply…
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Awestruck!
Haha? really, that was heart wrenching speech. Dont know to feel super happy that my writing is awaited so much or terrible that I have made you wait like this.I am so sorry. Yeah, haven’t been able to think about a proper story yet. A few more weeks to get some ideas maybe. Thanks for getting in touch. Really appreciate it! You are quite a fine writer yourself ??