Friends, this is my first os. .any typos ignore it. Pls forgive me in case of mistake…this os is specially dedicated 2 shaheer sheikh ….
Lets start
Character sketch :
Dev : smart, handsome, workaholic, business tycoon, owning a company ” Dixit Builders “….his looks all girl will fall 4 him…
Sonakshi : cute, gorgeous girl, she is delhi’s best architecturer
Other than this, all the character in the story are same as the serial….
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Dixit mansion
Dev’s POV
A boy is seen shouting….
“Where is that tie had gone….I dunno what magic my mom has in my mom’s hands …if my mom comes …she can take it easily., but I can’t talk it “…I said…
“Maa! Maa! My tie…..I screamed…
She comes and taks it from the cupboard in a second….
“U will never change.. (tum kabhi nahi sudharegi )…mom said
“Mom ! Y should I change ….”I said
“U r with me ….then y should I change”i said
“I will be there for u dev but I m growing old….I will not be with u forever”said mom
“Maa! Don’t say like that…u will be always with me”…I said..
“That’s what dev..I said u 2 marry a girl..who will help u dev..”said mom…
“Maa!…all girls are same..all r behind me becoz of my money nd my look ….
I want a girl who loves me a lot..who understand me…I ,m waiting 4 her maa…I will surely get her soon”i said
I waved my hands 2 my mom …saying bye 2 her
Bose Mansion
Sona’s POV
A girl is seen sleeping peacefully and sun rays falling on her face disturbing her ….she pulled the duvet nd covers her face…
A lady is seen shouting ….
They r none other than our sona and asha
“Sonaa! Sonaa! Wake up ( uthao, uthao ). Asha said..
“Maa! Maa! 5 mins ….dejiye na….I (sona) said
“No! No! 5min ..wake up sona…u should go 2 the office ” said asha
“Maa..4 min”..I said
Asha pours a juice on her face instead of water ….she wakes up with a thud…
“Maa! Maa! What is this?..I said…
“Tasty! Tasty! Juice…I said licking my mouth”
“U won’t change (tum kabhi nahi sudharegi ) …asha said..
Sona changes the clothes go 2 the office..
On the way to the office
Sona’s POV
A child is seen crossing the road without seeing the surroundings….she was about to hit by the car…when I ran and stopped the car …nd save the child….I wrapped my arms around her and asked whether she is fine or not …and I went 2 the car driver and scolded him…
This all were witnessed by dev
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In dev’s company
Dev’s POV
After seeing that scene ( sona saving a child )
……I thought all girls are same…all r selfish…
they all r behind money (sry..2 say this)…
but that girl was different….she didn’t care about her life and saved the child’s life…..
She risked her life and saved the child…
“Is there anybody in the world who will save the life of other risking their life…I asked 2 myself”
She is kindhearted person not like others..
My thoughts were disturbed by one of my staff…
“Congratulations! Sir! We cracked the deal…”..he said..
“Thank u “…I said..
“Sir! We r in need of a architecturer sir 4 constructing a new building”..he said
“K…search 4 an best architecturer in delhi..”I said..
“Sir! There is 1 architecturer …her name is sonakshi…she is the best architecturer in delhi..I made a meeting with her @1 o clock ..sir”..he said..
“K..u can go.”…I said…
Today, I dunno y I feel something different today….I feeling like somone is gng 2 cm in my life…Lets see …who is
Sona’s POV (@12 : 30)
(Sona too feels same like dev…)…
“Y I am feeling like I m gng 2 meet someone spl”….
Omg…I should go 2 meet the dixit builders…
I had an meeting …omg..she started 2 leave
@1 o clock devakshi meet
Dev’s POV
I was waiting for 10 mins…she has not yet come
Then, I heard a knock in my door..
“Come in “…I said..
“The nxt scene which I saw made me dumbstruck…she is the girl who I saw when she saves a child”…
“Sir! I had a meeting about building the site which is situated in the OMR road “..
“Yeh…can u work as a architecturer for that site?..I asked her
“Yeh…its my pleasure 2 work 4 u…she said..
“Sir! I m having some model drawings / maps 4 the building..pls give a check on it…sona said..
“Yeah sure”…I said
After seeing the maps which was sketched by sona, i was impressed by her….
How creative and innovative …she has drawn the maps …I thought
“This maps were excellent…we can work on it from tomorrow”…I said…
“Thank u ! Sir! She said…..
I offered her 2 drop her house but she rejected it ….
I thought..what the girl she is??
All the girls die 2 talk with me.,..but I offered her 2 drop her but she rejected me…
She is not same like ..all the girls…
Dev! What r u thinking? Y r u thinking about her since morning… (u..buddhoo..thum pyaar me haii)…Am I in love? Yeh…dev , u r in love..
That too…love at first sight
@ n8
Dev’s POV
I saw her walking lonely on the road…no one is there…I didn’t offer for drop up becoz she rejected me on mrng…so I slowly followed her….
After a few distance
I saw 3 boys cmg and they started 2 misbehave with her…she slapped 1 boy…and the other was about 2 slap sonakshi…I held his hand…I beated him bue black …becoz how can he touch my girl…sonakshi stopped me and I stopped beating…
She was so tensed and she hugged me and I reciprocated…..
“I said…don’t worry ,,, I m here 4 u…nothing happened”….I consoled her..
“Thank u Mr, dixit, if u r not thr …I dunno what would have happened 2 me …thanks a lot Mr.dixit” sona said…
“No need of thx Ms.bose. ..I just helped u”…I said
I dropped her nd
“Friends? “…she asked me hesitantly
“Sure…friends…”I smiled on her
“Once again thank u Mr.dixit”she said…
“Firstly, its dev 4 u …secondly, no thx nd sry in friendship..k..Ms.bose”…I said smilingly
“Its sonakshi 4 u ” she said…
We waved our hands 2 each other saying bye…
Sona’s POV
I dunno what would have happened 2 me when dev was not there..I think …I should thank him again…I took the phn,,,
@dev
Thank a lot…I dunno what would have happened 2 me when ur not there..
@sona
Its absolutely fine sonakshi…take care…
@dev
K…can we meet @cafe coffee day , , tomorrow @6 o clock
@sona
Yeh…I will cm…gn..ms.bunny
Sona blushes reading bunny …her face turnes into red..
@sona
Dnt blush sona…sleep..gn
@dev
K,…Mr.handsome.
Here, Dev’s cheek turns red
Mrng
Dev’s office
Sona’s POV
I was searching for dev ….I was seeing her and there 2 had a glance of him
Then, I turned back…when my leg gets twisted…I dunno how it get twisted (its all fate)..I fall…I closed my eyes in my fear ….
After a few seconds, I found me in btw 2 protective arms instead of floor..
We had an eyelock…(bolna song from kapoor nd sons films play in bg)…
After a while, eyelock was broken…
Nd he said me 2 take care left becoz of his embarrassment….
I dunno how I lost in his eyes…those brown eyes..I can see everything in it….
Dev’s POV
I dunno what magic she has in her eyes….I dunno what happened 2 me when I say her eyes..if I see her eyes..all my sorrows r vanishing….I m so happy when she is near me…
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Days passed…they both become best friends..4 dev…it is love and sonakshi…she has not yet realised….they did many outings, parties etc….
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One day,
Dev’s POV
We were siting in the chair in the park…
“When is ur birthday dev? “She asked me..
“26 march”i said excitedly…
“What! Omg! 26th march…only 3 days 2 go 2 ur birthday….
“Yeh..I want a spl gift 4 u “I said 2 her…
“K..pakkaa..”she said..
Nxt day (24th march n8)
Sona’s POV
I was walking down the road without seeing the surroundings….I was lost in thoughts…what 2 gift dev…
When a truck was about 2 him…a man pushed me and fall on top on me…the man is none other than dev….
“Sonaa! Where r u lost? If I would have not there means what would have happened 2 u”.dev shouted on anger…
“I know dev..u will be always with me…” I said..
I dunno how I said those words ” always with me”….I was thinking…
“Sona ! R u in love with dev….yeh…ur in love with dev “sona.!…I jumped in happiness and repeating Ithat “I m in love, I m in love”
Now, what 2 give 4 Dev’s birthday..,..idea….yeah…It will be the best birthday gift 2 u dev…
Nxt day (25th march n8)
Dev’s POV
I didn’t meet sona from mrng…I missed her so badly…if she is there she will be always talking like a speaker (like me…)…without her, it was boring…
My thoughts were disturbed by the phn call…
I became so happy after seeing the name that flashed on my phn…I took the phn..
“Hlo..sona..I m missin,…..”said I
Her words were cut the Dev’s words…
“Dev! Dev! Come fastly 2 XYZ place..Ahhhhhh. “….she said…nd finally screamed while cutting the call…
I panicked and ran 2 the XYZ PLACE….
That place was like a old palace..but sona ..what she is dng here.,.I panicked and went inside
Lights were switched off..
Dark surrounded all over the corners..
“Sonakshi! Sonakshi!… I screamed….
And I heard a clock hiting 12 o clock a d that moment all the lights were turned on…
Sonakshi ran and hugged me tightly and gave me a kiss…she kissed passionately,,.,
I was dumbstruck with her sudden action..I was so happy…I was in argue 2 feel her lips again..when
Sona kneel down…in a proposal manner and
Said……
“Here is my love , take it
Here is my soul , use it
Here is my heart , don’t break it
Here is my hand , hold it
Together we will make it forever…..
I know dev, this is world’s worst proposal but what 2 do..that is said to world’s best man…
Most handsome dev dixit….
“I like 2 be Mrs, Dixit….will u acept me?”…
I asked…
Dev came near me and made me stand up….
And took me to a bone crushing hug…
And said…
“Yeh…I want u be my girl, my wifey, my sona, only mine…dev said..
“I took 27 years 2 find u…now I don’t 2 waste my single second of my life..I wanna enjoy my life very happily”he said..
And asked me 4 a dance…
They dance 4 a krpkab title song….
He put my hand around his shoulder..nd he put his hand on his waist… he twirls me..
I tripped..he holded me back …we shared a eyelock ..he pulls me back and continues the dancing
They both said their love 2 their parents…
Both of their parents agreed….all marriage function…haldi, mehendi, sangeet, mangal sutra changing ceremony…everything finished..
After 7 years,
Golu is devakshi’s son
“Golu! Golu! What r u dng…eating this much sweets, chocolates, loolies..then ur health will be deteroied nd u will have cavities in ur teeth..don’t eat..golu” sonkshi shots on him
Dev comes and ask what happened….
Dev say what is this golu! U should not do like..this…u should give some chocolates 2 ur mother too (haaahaaa)..
“Maa! Take the chocolates…and ma…papa only said me 2 eat more chocolates…sonthat I will be like chocolate boy..”golu said this by looking at dev ..laughingly
“Dev! Dev! Where r u gng! Stop! Stop!..
(Dev, thum kaha jarahi hun…bas..ruko..ruko dev)…..she say this while chasing hin with a dough making stich…
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Guys, how was the os…I know ..it was boring. ……other than this ntng strike on my brain…
Pls do cmt…I want 2 no ur response ……
Both positive and negative cmts r allwed..
Pls do cmt becoz …I m writing this os 2nd time…it has deleted before…I didn’t sleep its 5 o clock…so pls I sacrificed a lot 2 this os
So, pls do cmt..I know shaheer’s b day is yesterday but can’t post yesterday…sry 4 it..
If I got nice cmts…I will start a ff…so pls do cmt..
73 Comments
Hai priya darling….. Forgive me I’m new to this forum… U know I’m from Mehak forum… So it’s difficult for me to relate the characters….. I saw few episodes in tamil dubbed version that’s all sry my baby girl…
But so far nice os dear superb superb????….. great job..keep it up…nice narration❤
Akkkaa, what is this asking me forgiveness… no need of sry akka..even ur not krpkab forum…u read my os…thanks a lot akkka…
Luv u a loads…
Characters, (think like this)
Dev as shaurya
Sonakshi as mehak
Ishwari (Dev’s mom) as karuna
Asha (Sona’s mom) as kanta…
Now u can easily understand akkaa…
Once again thanks akkaa..love u a lot…
I m so happy…that ur the first 2 cmt in my first os…
Chella kutty…nxt os eppo????
Innaki…eludhalamunu irruken…but innum start pannalaa akkaa..
Priya dear…it’s amazing…hehe!!devakshi scenes were awesome…simple and cute OS I loved it dear…
Poor dev…sona u mde him nervous wid ur prank…wow!!golu as their son perfect…it’s too good…
Enakkum apdi daan aaytu da I lost my contents bcz some issues in my mble…marupadiyum typ pannen…u too used bunny…it’s nice na…kalappi viduvom trend aaydum…hehe!!
Overall superb stry da…it’s nt boring dear…i was laughing through out…superb OS…expecting an ff frm u da??? tc dear
Akkaa, I m happy u liked it…and I m happy that I made u laugh while reding this os…
Thank god…I thought it will be boring…nope..yeh..my whole os got deleted
It took me 3 hrs 2 again write…
I thought Golu will be the perfect son 4 devakshi…so I added it..
Thanks a lot akkaa…keep supporting me…
I dunno whether I can write an os or ff..
I m exhausted…I will try my best 2 writ..
It was nice.. Very well written. I wish Dev could find his Sona in serial also
I m glad u liked it…thanks a lot…richa di
I too wish the same di…
Keep supporting me di..
I am always with you dear.. Don’t worry
Thank u di…
Amazingggg
Sona scared him with her prank
And it wasn’t boring
Thanks rithu, I m glad that u didn’t find it as not boring…yeh…sona scared him with her prank but later she gifted the best gift ever ..
Luv u a lot..keep supporting me…
Nice … loved it …. keep on doing ..
Thx nive…I m happy that u luved it…
Yeh…I will try my best write an ff or os…
U did well priya.u can continue to write ff… So nice..All the best for ur success as u said Tat u wrote for second time
” PRACTICE MAKES A MAN PERFECT ”
U know!!
Thanks rashi (moka)…I will try 2 my best 2 write an ff or os….
Thank u 4 ur…inspiring words…
Luv u nd keep supporting me…
Awesomeeeeeee❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
I think u should start a ff Dear it will be great?
And Haan I always wanted Golu to be devakshi’s son and u completeled my wish?
Love u?
Me 2 ayushi I also wanted golu to be devakshi’s son
Same here! I always wished that adorable sweetu was the junior Mr. Obodro!
Hi5..nikkita0194 …me 2…
Thanks ayushi…I will try my best 2 write an ff or os…I dunno I can write it or not…
I m happy that I completed ur wish…
I too want golu 2 be devakshi’s son…
Hi5….
Hi5…nikki..I too want that sweetu as the
Mr.jun obhodhro…so I fulfilled my wish by writing in my os dr…
Hey priya
Dev:I took 27 years 2 find u nw I don’t want 2 waste my single send of my life I wanna enjoy my life happy. ….(this dialoge is frm REMO I am I rite) and ya I knw u r a tamilian -Akshada
Cming to this episode it was awsome
Thanks akshada…yeh remo patatulaa irrundu sutaduthaann…
Keep supporting….
Awesome
Thank u princess…keep supporting me…
nice!
this is amazing for your first attempt.
but just one thing is bothering me so much its not architechturer, it’s architect. Being one, I think it’s OCD to correct it :p
Thanks khyati…
Yeh..u were crt architect should come..
Becoz of auto correct in my tab..I think it has changed…
Anyways thank u 4 pointing out my mistake dr..
Thanks a lot..keep supporting me.,.
Nice … i loved it … keep on going
Once again ..thank u nive…
Hey Priya di!
Firstly,you need to be more confident okay?youre a great writer!I enjoyed it thoroughly!!infact I never wanted to end reading it.As Long as you always think that you can do it,it’s easy!All the best for your coming up OS’s❤️
Yeh..I should be confident nishi dr…
I m happy that u enjoyed nd u thought not 2 end reading me os….
I m so happy that u said me as a great writer….I really dunno about my writing skills
Thank a lot dr…u were also the one of the reason 2 write the os…
Luv u a lot …keep supporting me
I dunno about my upcmg ff or os..I will try my best 2 write..
he dear it is fabulous
u really naled it
wow nice proposal and those words “it took 27 years to find u”is from remo right
u really banged it off
sooper siso naa idhul impress aietane
it is no words to dscribe
and golu cutipie wow devakshi paiyana…
last poori kattaiyal addi super
nice family na…
really really superb
Thanks my luvly sissy….aamam sissy remola irundaa suthadu thaan…
Impress aitingalaa…ennoda ff la..omg..
Yeh..golu..devakshi paiyana aakiteen…adhu enooda romba naal aasai..
Poori kataa…last minute la thoonu nichu.
Thanks a lot my luvly sissy…luv u a lot…
hey wow u really do it right
then beauty and the beast start pannu
i want u to show ur talent…
Kandipaaa ungaal kandi eludhuren luvly sissy…beauty and the beast
ok my dear chweety…..
Amazing it was..ur hard works paid off!!!!!!!
simple and cute?…waiting for ur works in a form of a ff..
love u?
Thank u darshana di….
I will try 2 post an os tomorrow
Hey di??..whats ur age..??..i am 15!
Yeh…I m 14…9th std…I know ur 10th std….
U said about ur boards in activity page and in moni sissy os…so I called u di…
Oh ..so u also read moni di os..they are just great na!..
take care and keep smiling!?
Yeh…I do read all moni akka os…yes, they r amazing, so great..
Same 2 u di, u too take care and keep smiling…
Is ur boards finished di?.how did u write?.
No not yet..i have one on 30th of this month!….
but i have lot of gap between this exams..10to12 days so quite free..boards are not difficult as they are been told by our elders..trust me??!
Omg..di..u were the one …who said the boards r easy…except u ..all will be saying exams r hell…ur quite different from others..
All the best di…keep smiling
ya maybe..but in our school I and my frnds have already attempted 2 preboards before writing the main boards of CBSE so I am chilling…thanks for the luck..
Yeh..di..we too write pre boards before sa 2
Nd I m too cbse…
awesome. plzzzz come back with another…
Thanks ritika
I will try 2 post another os tomorrow
Super os. Simple n cute.
Thank u sgatik
Its gr8 priya u can write many ff’s if you have confidence and one thing how can it be mangal sutra changing serimony? boy does not wear mangal sutra ??
Thank u nikkita…
Actually nikita, yesterday I was in a weaken state that my os was deleted…nd I was in half sleep while I wrote this…
I was also in hurry 2 finish and argue 2 sleep
So by mistake, instead of vermala..I wrote mangal sutra…sry 4 the inconvenience…
Thanks nikita and keep supporting…
I will and by the way call me nikki
Okk…I will call u nikki..k
Fantabulous OS… a beautiful piece!!
It was simple, sweet and amazing!!
Simply loved it!
Golu is DevAkshi”s son…awwww!!
And Sona’s prank on Dev!! Awesome!
And come on yaar, u are such a great writer… be more confident..
Ur hard work just completely paid off!!
U nailed it!!
Pls start an FF soon!! U can be sure I’ll be a regular commenter!!
Wishing u all the best for ur upcoming works!!
Thanks a lot niki..
Yeh..it is my desire tat golu as a devakshi s son..so I fulfilled my wish by my os…
Me a great writer?…k,..I m so happy…..
I dunno niki whether I can start a ff or not.
But I write an os..k..
Once again thx niki..luv u a lot dr..
Keep supporting dr..
Luv u too dear….. if u can start an ff, then I’ll be veryyyy happy! But if not, no probs, at least a few more amazing os’s like this!!
Ok….I will try my best 2 come with an ff…
But, now, I will write an os..k.
Dude …Priya
Well done
Hats off
Start an ff
You’ll rock it
Thanks riti…
I dunno …I will start a ff or not but I will write another os dr…
Keep supporting me dr…
Awesome OS priya… You should keep writing… It’s a good start dear…would wait to read more of you works…☺☺☺☺☺☺
Thanks shruthi….
I think tomorrow …I will write another os…
This is soo good…
keep writing…
Thank u so much priya di
Keep supporting me…
This is something literally awesome… The proposal was mindblowing tooo.. I really wish you make it into a book rather than an OS.. a detailed version.. Even a short story would do.. 🙂 ❤❤❤❤❤lovely…
Thank u so much marzia di,
I m so happy seeing ur beautiful cmts…
I m feeling great after hearing this cmts from a such a great writer like u…
Thanks a lot di…
Even in ur exams..u read 4 me…thank u so much…
Keep supporting me di..luv u a lot…
Hey priyu..(hope u don mind)
It was….
Ummmmm
It was jst awesome…mindblowing yaaar..
D first scene where dey meeeet…sona helpingna child den dev’s love @ first sight…..
Dis alll was awesome…
But d bestest i liked.was sona’s proposal….
N can i ask u 1 thing..?
Ab puch hi leti hu?.
Those sona’s line was from.GOOGLE BABA….right..??
Chal dont mind…leave it…
I would suggest u to start a ff for sure yaaaaaar…
U r a amazing one…
I had not read muh krpkab ff on telly update but i had read on wattpad….
Ur os was ekdmmmmmmm awesome….??.
N yaaa waiting for ur ff…?
Wen r u gonnna post??..?
Hehe..
I took ur decesion of starting a ff..??
M yaa sorry for d long cmnt…
But i thought u’ll like it…as i like it on my ffs so…!
Bhbye…
Love yaaaa
???
U can call me priyu..I luv it..
I m glad u liked devakshi meet, love at first sight
And proposal..actually, it is some from google and some from remo filmand some I wrote on my own….
I m not sure, of starting ff…becoz nxt year …I m 10th std..so I don’t know..
But I have posted another ff..I will be here so soon…
I too read ff on wattpad…wat r the ff u will read di..?.
I m so happy 4 ur cmt…same here…I too luv long cmt…
Keep supporting me…luv u a lot yaar
Thanx priyu..
N yaa i can understand…
I was in 10 std dis year..
Haash i dis year paassed so soon man..!
It was a hectic….
N u can start wenever u want..focus on studies…
N i will read all d ff on krpkab page..(will try..as m.busy)
N on wattpad ..m not reading all…
My favourite ff on wattpad is “arranged in love” devakshi by neha..
U must rmtry it is really amazing one…n few more..n yaa i m writing dis devakshi partners for life der tooo…if u will read der..u may get media’s tooo (if needed..)…my username is aamu031..
Wat bout u..
Oops again i gav a big lecture??
Thx , aamu di…
My username is padmajaaaa…
Yeh, di, I too read arranged in love by neha and I will read humari second hand shaddi and locha e ulfat by beautiful angel of life…
K..di..I will read there too…I have cmted on ur 1st epi…
Its k…di..I luv ur big lecture
Hey miss di…
Pls dont call me DI…
I hate dat..
Actually oldie waali feeeling aati hai na..!
N thanx i will check it now…n locha e ulfat i had read ,2-3 epi n hshs tooo…?
But i love neha’s arrange in love?