Hello everyone! I have been receiving many suggestions and comments, thank you. This is my first ever fan fiction so please excuse any mistakes that I make.
In the snowy mountains of Kashmir, a family is busy having their breakfast consisting of a nice hot cup of Kashmiri tea, Gobi Manchurian and parathas.
Meet the Gills:
Meher Kaur Gill: A loving mother of 3 kids, a caring wife and an awesome cook. (Has changed her name to Seerat)
Sarabjeet Singh Gill: His family’s strength, big and strong, always thinks of keeping his family happy and satisfied.
Paramjeet Singh Gill: A 10-year-old boy, strong just like his father. Very obedient, always listens to his parents and sets a good example for his siblings.
Karanjeet Singh Gill: A cute and Bubbly child, free and talkative like his mother. Tells a lot of stories and is a little naughty. He respects his brother a lot.
Seher Kaur Gill: A charming and mischievous kid, has many traits of her father, always restless and can’t sit in one place for a long time. She does what she wants and always finds her way out.
(Seher and Karan don’t know that they are siblings; I am continuing the ongoing track; Seher and Karan are very good friends.)
Meher is serving more gobi to Sarab while he is busy staring at the way she serves.
Sarab: Seerat ji your gobi is very tasty, it is just like my Meher’s….Seerat Ji, please say something, from the time I have entered you are not saying a word. Karan had told me that you look very beautiful; please give me a chance to compliment you. You and my Meher Ji have so many things in common, I miss her a lot, there is not a day when I don’t think of her, looking at you I may get her vibe all over again…
Meher: (In her mind) Sarabjeet Ji what to tell you I wish I could show you my face, but if I do, you will take me back to Punjab, and my kids will have the tag of murderer’s children, I know I didn’t kill my brother, it was Tarkash ji, he is in jail, I know, but mummy ji doesn’t know and will never believe it even if she is told, she still thinks I am Veer ji’s murderer. I don’t want to face mummy Ji ever in my life.
Sarab: Seerat ji, please…
Meher walks away from there and goes into the kitchen and cries silently.
Sarab: Param and Karan my lion cubs, I know you’ll are clever like your father But I need a little help from you…
Karan(interrupting): Papa, if we are smart like you then why do you need to take our help? You can take help from your smart brain only…
Param and Seher giggle
Sarab: No sons it’s not like that, my brain is a grown-up one, your brains are small so I want a little help from your small brains.
Seher: What about me Uncle Ji?
Sarab:(Taking her on his lap) My sweetheart, how many times to tell you that you can call me papa, I know you are really missing your papa and you are waiting for him to come back, till then I can be you papa…
Seher: Ok uncle Ji, I mean papa…
Karan(Whispering in Param’s ear): Isn’t it weird Veer Ji that that little munchkin will call our papa “papa”?
Param: Karan don’t say that, she doesn’t have a papa…
Karan: As though we have Mumma?
Seher hears that
Seher: Youll can call my Mumma “Mumma”…
Sarab: Are you sure princess? Will you Mumma be ok with it?
Seher: Until today whatever decisions I make mama has never gone back on it…I know my Mumma better than she knows herself!
Sarab smiles and recalls how he and Meher used to laugh and play truth and dare and when it used to be Sarab’s turn for truth, Meher used to tell the answers!
Karan: Papa in what way should we help you?
Sarab: Make Seerat ji show me her face
All kids start laughing
Sarab: What is so funny in that?
Karan: your poor big brains cant help you for such a small thing!
Param: (in a strict vocie) KARAN!
Karan: Ok sorry sorry
Karan: I have a plan…papa for that you have to take Mumma (Remember Seher gave them permission to call meher “mumma”) out for dinner. Is that ok?
Sarab: Of couse! I can do anything to feel my meher around me
(Karan tells the plan to Param, Seher ans Sarab)
Sarab: Awsome! So everyone get ready at 8 o’clock for a night out!
Param: But who will tell Seerat aunty, I mean mumma?
Karan: We will surprise her
Seher: Yayy mumma will be so happy!
PRECAP: Meher is walking towards the kitchen when someone kidnapps her and makes her faint.
So that was it for today…. I really hoped you guys loved it…suggestions are always open.
Pls let me know about the length of it…if it is too long or too short…accordingly I will adjust.
So one question:
Who do youll think kidnapped Meher??
24 Comments
Nice episode and a good start. I am not following the show post leap. I just know the basic story post leap, so it would be helpful if you give reference regarding the on going storyline.
I really loved Karen’s naughtiness and Param’s maturity. Seher asking Param and Karan call her mother as mumma was really cute. Meher’s turmoil was sad.
About the size, it is the right size but still you can reduce the length considering the opinions of other readers
Thank you @Shesha485. well, the story is that Meher doesn’t want Sarab to know that she is there in Kashmir and pretty much similar to the Dialogue that Meher says in her mind…so Karan and Seher at first were enemies but over time they became the best of friends. Karan doesn’t like girls but later Meher and Seher became an exception. Karan tried to escape from the bus returning home from his school trip to Kashmir but Meher saved him so Karan sees her as his fairy godmother. Sarab arrives there worried for him and so, I have continued from there.
Hi… nice one… good work.. keep going…
One question… are you meaning that sarab has a feeling that seerat is mehar??
yes, kind of…because he knows that his wife is only one in the whole world…
Awesome ♥
Thank you soooo much @Jazzmiiiine10 it means a lot to me that you are replying…you ae in STD 8 and you write so well…I am of that age only so it really means a lot to me…
Awasome keep it up 😘
Thanks so muchh…I will be posting whenever I get time, not periodically, so yes, thanks again..
Well thank you so much everyone for ur comments but they are really few… I don’t think many people are reading it… that is kind of discouraging guys..pls comment after reading so that I can go ahead and yes try guessing who could have kidnapped Meher.
Who kidnapped mehar
I can’t break the suspense so soon…do ull want me to twist the story or just reunite them soon?
And when will Sarab and mehar meet????.
Soon
Tq so much for the uodates
Most welcome…
Good one. Pls first reunited them, we so desperately want them to be together, then make them solve the problem like they used to do.
Sure…
Maybe sarabji disguise himself as a kidnapper and kidnap or kaul sahab kidnap and the Gills will save meher ,sarabji will see meher ‘s face…the three musketeers are the masters for this plan.
Well maybe, can’t say so soon..wait and watch
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Great job…Really very nice… Enjoy comedy scenes More excited…. 😍😍😍😍😍
I think maybe sardarji 😂😂😂😂
Thank you for replying…makes me feel encouraged
Thanks!
Check out my part 2!
https://www.tellyupdates.com/home-is-where-the-heart-is-choti-sardarni-fan-fiction-2the-tearful-reunion/