Hlw frnds.. its been my first ff.. I has been silent reader… I love avneil so here comes my first chapter of my ff…
Scene of Mehta house
K:avni bachcha
A:yes chachu
K: leaving for office/police station
A: yes chachu…
K:can u bring my medicine???
A:u don’t want to request me chachu u hv to order me …(smiling)
K:OK baba.. sry… I’m going to correct my sentence… Avni bachcha bring my medicine… OK that’s fine
A:yup now better(smiles)
Maaaaa
N: coming bachcha
Neela comes
A:riya and Aman
N:riya went to Ali café n Aman to college
A:OK I leave too… Byee
N:there
Avni reaches police station
All staff: jai hind(saluting)
A:jai hind(saluting back)
Avni goes in there cabin(avneil shares same cabin reason will be revealed later)
A:DD
DD:ma’am
A:I’m leaving for case 1143… When Neil arrives tell him
DD:OK ma’am
Avni leaves
Neil enters he see avni leaving..
All staff:jai hind(saluting)
N:jai hind(saluting back)
N:DD avni kha gae??
DD:sir vo case 1143
N:ok… (In heart)apne aap ko pta nahi kya smjhte h … Akele chale gae .. kuch ho jaega tb…
DD :sir vo case223
N:yes DD …
DD:sir the man is going to sign a deal in panveel hills…
N:I’m leaving for panveel..inform avni..
DD:pr sir akele..
N: DD (glaring)
Neil leaves
Avni see him leaving while entering in police station..
A:DD Neil kha gaya
DD: ma’am vo drugs case…
A: akele(with concerned and anger)
DD: ma’am Maine mna keya tha…
A(in heart)ha vo kiske sunta hi kha h..
(To DD) kha gaya h…
DD: panveel hills…
A:ok… I’m leaving for there..
Avni leaves …
Neil reaches to the area..and start searching someone..
A man with rod comes and hit his head from back..
Blood ozes from his head n he get unconscious..
Man calls a lady..
Man: ma’am kaam ho gaya..
Lady: good… Pura kaam hote hi tmhare Pura payment mil jaega
Man:kl mera aadmi uska kaam khatam kr Dega..
Lady:thek h…
Avni reaches there and think where are u Neil … Kha ho …
She moves ahead and see Blood strains..
Seeing Blood strains and gets worried…
Neil is seen unconscious..
Screen is divided into two parts…one shows avni and second Neil … The screen freezes..
Precape: romance in air..
8 Comments
Two screen of your 1st episode is really different from the ohers, that makes your more better to read. Twist & turns at the beginning of your story makes me more curious to know about your storyline. Overall your concept about your story is very beautiful. Please keep writing like this mind blowing way. I am eagerly waiting for your next chapter.
Thanks barun for ur support
It was different and amazing . I understood why u made avni a acp under neil. Also it is much lovely to read . And dear, kareena and aman is kaman not khatam. I loved it. And dear i could not understood what is screen here. It may be a spelling error and it may be scene. Please clear my doubts
It’s ff and I want to make a visual sene
Sry..so I want to that my readers could just read my story and visuqli
I want reader to visualize my writing and sry for the reply which I made earlier… screen is used to make the reader fell like they are watching not just reading my ff
Yaar laddo. tune muje laddo khiladiya. when i read into i.e character sketch i was like avni a assistant under Neil in police. actually its slightly similar to my upcoming episode of my ff that Avni is a cop. but yaar it’s to good. Sorry actually reading your CS i felt it wouldn’t be great as Avni as assistant cop but u portrayed it well. In serial neil is Avnis protector and here it’s vice-versa.keep writing your writings is kool. and haa Kareena and Aman are KAman. And precap is awesome “ROMANCE IN AIR”
Good one dear update next part