Hi guys this is Niyati , I am writing first time on Avneil. This one OS is dedicated to my lil sis Pavithra as she is die heart fan of Avneil & all the writers & fans of avneil. Hope u guys like this & u too like this Pavithra.
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(Note : Neil & Ali are best friends like in the serial. Avni & Riya are sisters . In this all are positive characters including Dayavanti as I am believe in positivity).
Neil P.O.V –
I was busy in talking with Ali. Suddenly , I got feeling that she is very near to me . I could feel her presence . She is best friend of Ali & sister of Riya . We all four share unbreakable bond of friendship.But sometime I feel that for her my emotion is more than friendship though I don’t say to her or u can say I have no courage to say her…..like really……I am in police & i have no courage to say i love u to a girl. It’s not like that I am coward but I don’t want to lose her friendship. She is stand infront of me & I am lost in her beauty.
Neil P.O.V ends
Avni P.O.V.
I come here to discuss something to Ali but I feel those brown orbs who are busy in checking out me. I don’t want to lost in them . So ,i just ignore & busy in talking with Ali . He is Ali friend but I feel attraction to him though I never attracted to any boy before him.
He was continuously looking toward me when Ali shake him.
” Where are u lost bro? ” Ali said to him. He come in his senses & said ” Nowhere , In my next case ” .
” Yaar Neil ye jo apne case ka poti – patra hai na wo police station mein hi chod ke aata kar” Riya said to him while he start laughing.
A small smile crept on my face seeing him smiling. He look so cute when he smile…..Ahh…..What are u thinking Avni. I patted myself & tried to control my heart.
“Avni , what are u sayimg” Ali asked to me .
“Actually , I think how to celebrate this Ganesh chaturthi” I said to Ali while he jumped with happiness.
“Celebration ka toh mujhe pata nahi lekin modak khaane me bada maza aayega.” He said to me . ” Ali , u never become serious. Tera kya hoga Ali ” I said in a reply while patted his head.
” You only become serious on behalf of all” Riya said to me while I just give deadly glare to her.
Avni P.O.V ends.
Ali : I think we done this time great celebration.
Riya : Ya, I am also brought clothes & make up for function.Let’s go Avni for shopping.
Ali : Avni kahi nahi jaa rahi . Tujhe toh jab dekho shopping ki padi rehti hai Miss beauty queen.
Riya : Shut up Ali . I will not spare u .
She start chasing him while they both tried to stop them .
Neil : Guys , Why are u behaving like childrens ?
Avni : Inka kuch nahi ho sakta. We are discuss about this .
Neil : Hmm……..why not ?
They stary discussing & they both stupid come after the Marathon.
Ali : My legs are paining….. Ahhh…
Riya : This is ur fault.
Avni : You both started again. We planned that Ganesh chaturthi celebration in Neil’s house.
Ali : What ! Yipee . Shweta aunty make very tasty modaks.
Riya : You are really bhukkad.
Ali make faces while others start laughing.
On Celebration day –
All are busy in preparations .
Shweta : Avni , Tillu ko uske kamre se bula laana.
Avni : Hmmm…..
Avni P.O.V –
My heartbeat become faster with my steps toward his room. I enter in her room & found it empty. I saw his book shelves which is beautifully decorated. My eyes stuck on a piece of paper in which written “With love Neil”. This much is only visible. My heart is broke into many pieces.
I took a lot of courage to open the letter. My happines has no bounds after read that letter. Suddenly his voice disturb me ” Avni , Wat are u doing?” . I tur toward him & directly hug him .
Neil P.O.V
I was somewhere shocked by her behaviour but I feel very happy in her arms. My eyes fall on love letter which I written to her. I understand the situation . I too reciprocate with happiness as She loves me . I never confessed her but Bappa already planned. Our journey from friendship to love become succesful without confession.Now, we welcomed bappa with whole heartedly in my …..oops our life.
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Hope u guys like it .Kindly ignore grammatical & spelling errors. If i hurt anyone’s feeling ,then forgive me as I don’t have any intention to do it. I don’t watch Namkarann from two weeks as i am lil bit busy with my studies. So, this one is idea of my khurafaati dimaag. Don’t throw tomatoes on me . I know I am not a good writer but just try for my lil sissy. Do comments & keep smiling.Be happy & stay safe .
24 Comments
It’s really good. According to me, your episode is very easy to understand. Friendship turns into love in your 1st episode is interesting. You are trying to give your best shot that’s why I can’t stay without commenting about your story.
Aww , thank u so much dear.It really means a lot to me sweetie . Glad that u like this one . Gn dear . Have sweet dreamz.
oops sorry as I typing by mistake I mean that’s really sweet of u.
You are welcome. Best of luck for your next one. GST
Awww!? That was such a sweet OS! It was nice to have everyone including Dayavanti and Riya positive for once! Loved Ali’s attitude- the way he said that he would love to eat the modaks! ? The way Avni got to know about Neil’s love and their hug- it was just fantastic… Please write more on AvNeil!
Aww , thank u so much sweetie for ur comment .Your comment make my day dear .It really means a lot to me.Glad that u love this one .Ya,whenever I got time i write on avneil. Gn.Have sweet dreamz.
Awesome
Niyati Sissy.
Aflatoon OS simple Nd sweet.
I just loved it i too love and believe in positivity.
Thank u bhai for ur comment .Ur words really means a lot to me as u are one of my favourite & great writer.Glad that u like this. Gn.Have sweet dreamz bhai. Glad to know u also believe in positivity.
hey u are such an amaing wrter. u shuld post this on wattpad an if too.if is india forums. it was so amzing that u can carry it on as an ff. and thx for dedicating me. i loved it sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much. thx my love. please do continue as an ff
Aww , thank u so much dear for ur comment . Glad that u like this one .Ya, whenever i got time , i post next one .I don’t write ff as I am already write an ff on ishqbaaz. Thanks for ur kind words my sister.Gn & sweet dreamz.
oh. i thought it was so great that u could continue. ya u can go a bit slower if u want
Ya dear , I post next os soon & think about ff . Don’t say sorry . Thanks once again for ur comment.
awwwwwwww soooooooo sweeeeeeet os avneil my fav coupel amazing ??????????keep writing thanks
Aww , thank u so much di for ur comment . Glad that u like this.Ya, i like avneil too.Ya, I will keep writing . Gn & sweet dreamz di.
i am not di niyu.just call me sami.
sorry by mistake commented
Niyu dii… Its wonderful dii.. Its too much for me.. Thank u so much dii.. I have to thank u this time di.. U wrote an os especially for me.. Thank you so much…
You have written well dii… ??? just love you dii.. You are the best…?
Aww , thank u so much my lil sis for ur comment.Glad that u like this one.It really means a lot to me .I write this os for u as u are very sweet .Luv u too. You are also best.Gn.Have sweet dreamz.
Amazing
Thanks dear for your comment . Glad that u like this one.
It’s perfect and sweet and Avneil are cute. But remember not to write paining, because even though many people say it, it’s not a wore
Thanks dear for ur comment. Glad that u like this.
It was cool dear. I liked ur OS. It was simple and sweet. There were no confessions but the way they realized each others love ❤ was awwwwww… Plzkeep writing OS and TS as these always have a short and crisp story with many moments in it. and this is just a advise dear.
If you don’t mind can you tell me ur shivika ff naame dear niyu… I mean Niyati. Cause I’m a die hard fan of both IB and N so…..
I loved ur OS keep writing and keep posting
Aww , thank u so much sweetie for your comment . Ya,u can call me niyu . It really means a lot to me . Glad that u loved my writings though i am not a very good writer.My exams are going but whenever i got time,I post another one OS.Ya, my ff name is Dastaan. I will send u links as I am glad that u want to read that . Hope u like that . Gm dear . Have a sweet day.