Again I have came here to give u an OS . I was overwhelmed to see your response on my last os. Thanks all of you. Plz encourage me like this through ur comments. I have waited for it. First some scenes I have given Raglak scenes. But this is a swasan os so read it till end.
So now I am stopping my bak bak and starting my story
A big mansion has shown in Mumbai where a boy was busy preparing himself to went his office.
Boy: ( to his wife) I am getting late baby . Will u prepare my breakfast, please?
Girl: ( hug the boy from his back ) my hobby is so unromantic. See here we are married only before one month and my husband is busy with my cowife.
Boy: Ragini!( yes the girl is Ragini only) u and ur acting . I am fed up with ur drama.
Ragini: (Fake crying) ahhhh? see my husband is thinking I am acting in front of him. U r so bad Laksh. Now days u don’t love me . ( make a pout face)Go to ur office and don’t come near me. Go. ( pushed him)
Laksh:( murmuring) drama queen ?. And kissed her forehead
Ragini: Smile ? and hugged him more tightly.
Laksh: A business man. He is 30 years old. He is having a sad past for which he has married before one month only. Now also he is frightening to his past. But he loves her wife very much and a orphan.
Ragini: Wife of Laksh. She is also 30 years old. A housewife. Love his husband more than anything. She has only a younger sister Uttra. Her parents had died in a car accident.
Laksh left for his office and Ragini busy with her household works and time has passed like this.
At night
When Laksh came back to his house he saw Ragini was watching tv and news reporter was telling one couple ? has brutally killed by a serial killer. And this is his 6 th target.But Mumbai Police can’t catch the killer till now . This time Ragini saw Laksh has stood near the door. She came to near him and hugged him.
Ragini : My husband is looking very tired today. Anything has happened in office.
and kissed his cheek.
Laksh: Nothing. Just a headache.
Ragini: Ok u sit here and l am bringing ur favourite ginger tea. When u will drink it u will be forgot ur headache. She went to kitchen and other side Laksh was thinking something very deeply. Ragini came back from kitchen having with two cups of tea and forwarded a cup towards Laksh and they started some random talk.
Ragini: U know today also the serial killer killed a couple. Now I am frightening. What happened if he will attacked us . I can’t live without u.
Laksh:( in deep voice) nothing is happened with u. Don’t worry I will not allow anything happen with u. I will always protect u . (See towards Ragini) I love u . Plz don’t leave me.
Ragini: (Look towards Laksh and said )I love u too baby and kissed his cheek. (She saw Laksh’s tensed face and change the topic) u know after 5 days uttra’ s marriage will be fixed. And this time she strictly told u will attend her all functions. Last time u didn’t attend her engagement ? and she forgave u but this time she will not. So tomorrow we both will leave for Kolkata. And don’t worry I packed our bags and conform the tickets. Without any option Laksh agreed and they leave Kolkata next day morning.
In Kolkata a bungalow has shown where two love birds were loving each other in front of mirror and the lady was moaning her husband ‘s name when he beaten her neck.
Girl: Oh sanskar ( yes this is our hero who always want to romance with his wife) leave me na. See today u have a important case and u just romancing with me from morning. Jaan leave na I will also prepare ur breakfast.
Sanskar: U know what Swara( yes she is our doll swara) all wives are having one argument after marriage that all husbands are changed and not more interested on her. But here I have this complaint on u. After our marriage u r so unromantic jaan.
Swara: ( in an angry look) Really I am unromantic. Then don’t talk with me and left the room.
Sanskar:( Smile and murmur something) my angry bird. Everytime her anger tip on her nose. But I love to irritate her. And then he also left the room.
Sanskar: A psychiatric belonging a rich family . He is 24 years old. But don’t like his parents bcz they only wanted to use him for their own benefits. He loved his wife more than anything. In one word she is his whole world. Now they both are leaving alone in a bungalow.
Swara: She is a perfect example of brain with beauty. She is also 24 years. She belongs a middle class family. Love his husband but sometimes a bit unromantic. Which irritated Sanskar most of the time. A housewife.
In breakfast table swara told: Sanskar u know after 4 days my friend uttra, her marriage will be done. So tomorrow onwards her all functions will be started like mehendi, sangeet and
Sanskar: And haldi. I know all marriage rituals Swara. Don’t tell me all rituals name and smirked
Swara π In angry tone) I know that my husband is having some extra knowledge in every matter ( Sanskar shakes his collar which irritated her more.)
Swara: ( angrily) stop it now Sanskar. We are going tomorrow to attend her marriage.
Sanskar: ( sad tone) I have other option
Swara: No. Now go to ur hospital. Today u are getting late.
Sanskar stood in front of Swara and give a peck to her lips and said
Sanskar: Pack our bags. We will leave tomorrow and now take care urself. By
Swara:( kissed his cheek) by jaan
Next day on marriage hall Swara and Sanskar reached the place. Where haldi rituals are started. Swara as invited from the bride side and Sanskar was invited from the bridegroom side. ( Sanskar and chirag are college friends)
(The bride and bridegroom booked same hotel for their marriage.)
Uttra: Hi Swara,( fake angry look) u r late.
Swara: I am sorry. U know na Sanskar’s work . For this only I am late. Sorry again darling. But u are looking beautiful today.
Uttra: ( smile shyly and then realised what Swara told her) angrly what do u mean by today. I am always looking beautiful.
Swara and all her friends laughed.
Swara: Ya I know that.
Ragini came with a food plate for Uttra.
Uttra: Meet my di Ragini and di she is my best friend
Ragini: (Cut her words ) Swara , am I right? U know Swara everytime she only tell about u. Like u know di Swara is very beautiful, she is very intelligent , she is having a very caring and lovable husband. I just want a husband like Sanskar. And blabla…
Swara smiled listened all these talks.
Ragini: Really Swara I want to meet with ur husband. Where is he?
Swara: Actually Chirag and Sanskar are college friends. So now he will attend the marriage from bridegroom side. But don’t worry I will meet him with u.
Ragini: Ok (saw Laksh who were coming outside and called him) Laksh come here.
Laksh:( Come towards Ragini and said )yes baby and hugged her in sideway
Ragini: Swara meet my husband Laksh and Laksh ,she is Swara , uttra’ s best Friend.
Laksh: Hi
Swara: Hello.
Ragini: Ok. By the way u go to ur room and get fresh and then join us . Swara leave to her room. After sometime haldi ceremony has finished.
At night in a dark room one couple romance with each other. This time a man come here only his eyes were showing which is now turned into red. In these eyes one can clearly see only the hatred, anger for these couples. He stabbed the couple many time by a knife till they are not stop breathing. After their death he left the place.
Other side Sanskar is searching network for his Mobile he dashed with someone.
Other person: I am sorry. I don’t see u.
Sanskar: Its ok. Actually the place is also dark. Never mind. U have come for this marriage. But I don’t see u. In which side u are attending the marriage.
Ahil: Hi I am Laksh Mehta . The bride is my wife ‘s sister
Sanskar: Oh u r Laksh Mehta, the no.1 businessman in Mumbai. Hi I am Sanskar Maheswari( both sake hand with each other) nice to meet u.
Laksh: Same to u and good night.
Sanskar: Good night
Next day morning everyone gathered in front of the dark room by listened a servant screamed. Everyone who present their frightened by see the scene in front of their eyes. The couple was brutally killed by someone. After sometime police came there and collected all the evidence and asked questions to all the members . When the inspector asked question to Laksh
Inspector: Yesterday night u have seen any suspected people around the hotel
Laksh: No .i didn’t see like this type of people.
Inspector: Ok . Can i know When this murder happened where were u present in this time?
Laksh: U are suspecting me. U know who am I? I am Laksh Mehta . And u r thinking I have killed this couple. I also don’t know them.
Inspector: Relax Mr Laksh. And for ur information I am suspecting everyone who is present here. This is my job only.
Ragini:( to Laksh) Laksh plz cooperate them . They are doing their job only.
Laksh: I am sorry inspector. I am just disturbed for some issues for which I told u like this . But I don’t mean any words .
Inspector: Its ok I am understanding ur condition. Now can u tell me where were u present yesterday night?
Laksh: Actually yesterday one of my friend came from Delhi I just went to meet her.
Sanskar surprised listen this answer but he does not say anything. After sometime police collected all the evidence and left from there. After that as usual all ceremonies are started. 1st mehendi and then sangeet.
At night in sangeet everyone enjoyed and dance with her / his partner. But Sanskar was watching Laksh in a corner of his eyes. This time anchor announced for couple dance. Every couple joined the dance floor with their respective partner. But Laksh didn’t come for dance. He is looking very tensed. When Ragini tried to bring him on dance floor he rejected and went outside of the hall. Everything watched by Sanskar from dance floor.
Next day on Marriage
On bride’ s room the newly would be wedded couple are romancing with each other when a loud sound come from the door. When they saw the man they are nervous and sweating badly. The man tried to kill both of them. He pushed Chirag for which he fallen unconscious on floor.
Uttra: Jiju, what are u doing? ( yes the serial killer is Laksh and now he is holding uttra’s neck) its paining jiju( and tried to free herself from his hands) leave me jiju and breathing heavily.
This time Sanskar came from backside and injected a injection. After that all gathered this place. Laksh slept on bed quietly.
Sanskar: Ragini I don’t know how to tell u but I am doubting Laksh is a psychiatric patient. He is needing a proper treatment.
Ragini: But how?( cried holding Swara’s arm)
Sanskar: Will get this answer I am needing ur permission for his treatment.
Ragini: Nodded her head and allowed Sanskar for his treatment.
Everyone left the room . Only swasan., Raglak are present inside the room. Sanskar started hypnotised method on Laksh.
( I don’t have much idea about hypnotized. So forgive me if u will find any mistake)
Sanskar: Laksh u are listening me.
Laksh:yes
Sanskar: Ok . Now calm down urself. And give me some questions answers.Who are u?
Laksh: I am Laksh Mehta .
Sanskar. Now how old are u?
Laksh: I am 30 years.
Sanskar: Now u go back to ur old age.
Sanskar: Now how old are u?
Laksh: I am 6 years old .
Sanskar: What are u seeing now? Any one present near u.
Laksh: My father. We are playing cricket. My father is smiling looking at me. I am also laughing.
Sanskar: Ok. Now come some days before. Now what are u seeing?
Laksh: I came from school happily. But my father lied on floor with pull of blood . And here my mother are laughing continuously stand in front of my dad. My dad’s friend hugged my mother on her back side.
Flash back start
When Laksh returned from his school he saw his father lied on floor with pull of blood. He ran to his father and kept his father’s head on his lap. Mom what happened with dad? Why are u laughing like this? And uncle plz call doctor.
Person:( laugh loudly) see sweet heart ur son is crying very badly for his father. U don’t call the doctor and hugged her from backside.
Lady: Oh darling why r u acting now in front of him? And u ( pointed her finger towards Laksh)u know i am not ur real mother . U r my step son . I only married ur father for his property which now I have got it . So now both father and son are garbage for me.( Pointed towards the finger towards Laksh’s father) D.P Mehta , I don’t love u. I only love ur money and now I got it from u . So good by Mr D.P Mehta
D.P: Don’t do this with me and my son.
Person: I am sorry friend but now we don’t want u in our life. And about ur son, if any one murdered then one murderer would be there na. So now the murderer is ur son. After sometime police will come and arrest ur son.
D.P: No plz don’t do this with my son. He is a innocent child. ( Laksh just staring his father, mother and his father’s so called best friend)
When D.P are leaving his last breadth and their the lady and the person don’t worry about the situation kissed each other madly in front of Laksh and D.P .The lady is moaning his name madly when he was bitting his lips very hardly.All this scene was seeing by the little boy. After sometime police came and arrested the boy and sent him on rehab center.
Present
Laksh: Plz don’t beat me. I don’t do that. I am not a killer. I am not killed my father. Plz leave me. No its paining.( crying and telling all these things on his sobbing)
Sanskar: Relax no one will beat u . U r fine. Now relax and sleep.
After sometime Laksh relaxed and has gone in deep sleep.
Outside of the room
Sanskar: Ragini u know his parents.
Ragini:( in deep thinking ) no Sanskar I don’t know about his past. I thought he is a orphan. So I never asked him about his past.
Sanskar: Then how we will know about his past?
Ragini: ( thinking something) I think he has a photo on his wallet. I don’t know whose photo but we will be got some clue on the help of this picture.
Sanskar , Swara and Ragini went inside the room. Sanskar took out the wallet from his pocket. In wallet a passport photo is present in which back side has written ” I miss u dad” . And front side a couple and a man stood on a row and hugged each other. One lady and a person face has made a cross symbol by pen. When Sanskar saw the photo he was speechless. He couldn’t move from his place and the photo was slipped from his hand.
Swara: Sanskar what happened with you? Why u are so surprised to see the picture. When Swara saw the picture she also surprised like Sanskar. Sanskar left the room immediately and later Swara left the room behind him. Ragini just looked at them surprisely and then saw Laksh who now sleeping very quietly.
Sanskar room
Sanskar is moving from one corner to another corner of his room when Swara entered worriedly
Swara: Sanskar, u r fine. Don’t take so much stress it is harmful for ur health. We will solve this problem.
Sanskar: But how swara? Till now I think my parents are greedy but today I know that they are murderer Swara. They have murdered Laksh’ s father. How could they do that Swara? How could they play with others emotions and relations? How can a person cheap like them( said loudly)
( yes friends Sanskar parents only killed Laksh’s parents. The lady and the person is Sanskar ‘s parents.)
Swara: Calm down Sanskar. Plz calm down. I can’t see u like this. We will think about this later. We will sleep now( holding his hand take him near to the bed)
Sanskar : ( removed his hand from his grip) no Swara they should be punished. They would be punished.
Swara:( surprised) but Sanskar they are ur parents. How can u….
Sanskar: (said loudly) He was also Laksh’s father. How could they do that? I know they are my parents but told me one thing Swara what is Laksh’ s fault in all these things(in a frustration tone) . I know I never get any affection from my parents but for the name shake they are present with me. They have never cared about me, they have no time for me but I have a name swara from them but think about Laksh for them only today he is a orphan. He has no one for him. ( when he said all these a lone tear drop from his eyes. He knows how badly he missed his parents. But they don’t have time for him. How he was feeling when parents meeting was occurred in his school how badly he was waiting for them. But they were never coming and at last giving some lame excuses like today we have to go a birthday party, today we will go to a business meeting, today we would have to go in a business trip etc. Daily they give me some excuses. So for this only I hate to be became a businessman and mostly hated them. Then I left Maheswari mansion and live here.
Now I am a psychiatrist doctor. Now I am happy with my life. I am having everything in form of Swara.She is a best friend cum lover cum mother and a life partner. Yes she is having all shades which a man wants from his life partner. I loved her very much. After her coming to my life everything has been perfect. I can’t think a life without her. She is a perfect partner for me.) here sanskar ‘s monologue end.
In other place a man and a woman are talking something.
Man: (to the woman)see till now we have not got his money. After his death also he is not leaving us. And his son Laksh don’t know where is he now? If this idiot police killed him on rehab center then D.P’s all property has transformed on our account . But no our all dreams are shattered. And left of others are shattered by ur son Arnnapurna.( AP mother of Sanskar)If he is married to kavita then our all problems has solved. Her father was giving us 49%shareholder from his company. If I got this much shareholder then our industry has reached on top position. But ur son destroyed my all dreams to married with that blo*dy middle class girl Swara.(said angrily)
AP: Relax Raj( sanskar’s father) U are a BP patient Raj.Don’t take so much stress . It is dangerous to your health.
Raj: How would be I so calm and happy where my all dreams are shattered. We are fully destroyed Arnnapurna. My all dreams were broke down. Now I can’t do anything without would be saw my destruction. Today I am feeling more hopeless AP.
AP: Nothing happened with us Raj. Before 25 years how we solved our problems to killed D.P, like the same thing will be happened again now also.
Raj: What are u trying to say? I can’t understand anything.
Ap: Our main problem is Swara then why we are not thrown her from our lives.
Raj: Mean u are saying we will kill swara.
Ap: Exactly the same thing I am saying .
Raj: After swara’s death what will be happened? How her death will helped us in our business?
AP: Seriously Raj u r a stupid. For u only we are having this much loss in our business.
Raj: ( angrily) what do u mean by that
AP: I mean to say Mr Singhania till now wants Sanskar is marrying to kavita. So if we are killing swara! then kavita will be married sanskar. And her all property will come with her and our all problems are solved.
Raj:(happily said) wah Mrs Raj Maheswari. Wah today I am bowing ? my head in front of u. U are superb my sweetheart.
And both laughed loudly.
Unknown the fact that their conversation listened by Kamla who is the old servant of the house . She is Sanskar’s aya( who takes care the babies)But for Sanskar she is her mother . He loves her more than from his real parents.
At night Sanskar’s room in hotel
Sanskar: maa , (sanskar called maa to kamla ) u here. Everything is fine.
Kamla: yes beta everything is fine but( hesitate to start the conversation)
Sanskar: (looked at her and start the talk)
Maa anything has happened. U can tell me freely. I am ur son. When I called u maa then I mean it. So I don’t think a maa should be hesitated when he will talk to his son. So now tell me what happened for which u come here at this night.
Kamla: Sanskar baba when I was going to sir ‘s bedroom for gave their tea I listened( paused sometime then told) I heard they were talking about woh woh….
Sanskar: What u listened maa? U tell me
Kamla: Woh I listened they were talking to killed swara beti
Sanskar: What? ( a big noise came from their behind . When they turned they saw Swara has stood near the kitchen door and tea cups have shattered on floor)
Sanskar: Shona! ( run towards Swara and cupped her face with his hands)are u ok. ( swara just staring her with a blank face and her eyes are covered with tears. She can’t believe that his own Mother-in-law and father-in-law are thinking to kill her. Sanskar just hugged her because he is having the same feeling what will he do if something happened with swara. He is not bear the thought only . What will he do if it really comes in true. No he wont it happen true with his in bad dream also. He can’t bear this pain . He would be saved her.
Sanskar: Maa u go now. Its really late. We will talk about this later.( he indicates kamla to leave from here though his eyes. )
Kamla leaves from there . Sanskar lifts swara on his arms and took her on bed. He lied her bed very gently and he also slept other side of bed took her in his embrace tightly like no one can be snatched his life . He patted her head gently. After sometime she slept but for Sanskar its faraway from his eyes.
Next day morning at 4pm Sanskar made a plan and he was discussed it with kamla.
Sanskar: Maa u understood what would u do now?
Kamla: Ha beta. I know what will I do now?
Sanskar: Ok. And plz take care of urself.
Kamla: Don’t worry beta nothing will be happened with me. Now I am keeping the phone and starting my work.
Sanskar: By maa. ( end the call and when turned saw swara has stood in front of him crossed her two hands near her chest) in a concern voice swara why r u come here? If u have needed anything then u have called me na. Come ( tried to take her near bed.
Swara: ( in angry look and stern voice) Sanskar can I know, what are u and kamla maa trying to do? And u have my swear u will tell me only truth.
Sanskar:( in a serious voice) to expose them in front of police and will give a peace and normal life to Laksh.
Swara:( in a calm voice) it is needed.
Sanskar: Yes, it is important to be got punishment for ur bad works. I think now this has their time for punishment .( he tried his best to show he is alright but swara has known as how much he deeply hurt by this .swara immediately hugged him and gave him strength which he mostly needed at this time)
At 6am Maheswari mansion kamla was talking in phone( falsely talking with sanskar loudly)
Kamla: Ha sanskar baba , today u r going Bangalore for two days .And Swara beti will stay alone in ur house . Ok beta I will take care her . U don’t worry about her. U go without any tension I will manage her. U can be believed ur maa. Ok beta I have many work today so now I am keeping the phone.
This conversation listened by two people and thought a big opportunity has come by own self to fulfilled their dreams. But don’t know that a big strome has waited for them.
Sanskar and Swara came to Laksh’s room where Laksh has slept till now. Sanskar told everything to Ragini and promised her he would be corrected everything in her life. And needed her permission for his further plan . Ragini agreed with Sanskar because for her Laksh’s health is more important than others. And She cannot see him like this. And mostly they are the murderer of his father so they should be punished. After this they transferred Laksh in swasan ‘s house.
At night Laksh has slept under medicine ? effect. As per the plan the room fitted with voice recorder which attached with the hall. And Sanskar sat a chair ? who present in a corner of a dark place.Ragini and Swara were watching Laksh’s activity behind the curtain. At this time two person entered in the room hold with a gun. When they saw a person has sat at the chair ? they looked each other and smirks and went to near the person. After some minutes a loud noise heard in speaker where the lady and person was shouting. Swara and Ragini are surprised and looked each other in a confusion. They both ran towards the hall but in middle swara collided with something and she fall down on floor. Ragini came towards her and forwarded her hand for help. But when she saw towards Swara , she was looking something very surprisely. When she turned her face she also surprised to saw the man who has slept in unconscious on floor in front of them.
Swaragini:( told unison) sanskar.
Swara: ( kept his head on her lap and patted his face) sanskar plz open ur eyes. What happened with you? Plz talk to me Sanskar and cried loudly to hugged him.
Then sanskar opened his eyes slightly and saw her princess cried to hugged him.
Sanskar: Swara(patted from the hug immediately and saw Sanskar) I am fine now . Don’t cry now. U know na I can’t see u like this. So now stop it.(wiped her tears and again hugged her very tightly)
Ragini:But what happened with u Sanskar and that sound what were these?
Swara:( released from hug and cupped his face with her palm) how were u come here Sanskar?
Sanskar( thought something) I don’t know. I was waiting for my parents that time someone attacked me from behind. I tried to see him but I can’t. Then my visions were blurred in front of me. After that I don’t remember anything. (asked about Laksh) where is he?
Ragini: He is in room .
At that time again some sounds come from hall. Trio ran towards the hall. When they entered the hall they surprised to saw the scene in front of their eyes ?. Raj and AP stabbed by a knife ? and fallen on floor like lifeless with pulled of bloods. and the floor covered with their blood.
Sanskar:(in almost cried voice) mom dad
Swara immediately hugged him for his support. At this time Laksh came to the hall. Everyone surprised to saw him because for them per was the killer who killed his parents. But he came now . Then who is the killer. Laksh surprised to saw the dead bodies and the flashes were again came in front of eyes. He closed his eyes and screamed loudly. Ragini tried to control him but all went into vein. After a great struggled with his mind he sat on the floor in a thud and tears were flowing from his eyes continuously. Then a light entered in the room where they saw a man not a man, a soul stood on the light and he was smiling to see them.
Laksh : ( in surprised voice) papa!( the soul is D.P)
Everyone surprised to listen the word from Laksh.
Soul: Laksh , my son I am sorry for all things. What happened with u.I know for me only u couldn’t leave a normal life. But see now I have solved all the problems and killed these persons who destroyed our lives. Now u forget everything and live a happy life . ( to sanskar) I don’t know how would be thanked u. After known everything u tried to punish to ur own parents. But how they will be punished by police? They were my culprits. So only I have the rights to punished them. Now I gave them their punishment. Now I am freed. My all blessings to all of u. You live a happy life with ur partners. Now I am leaving. God bless u my children. And the soul erased from their eye sight.
Ragini ran towards Laksh sat down beside him and hugged him.
Sanskar went near to the window and saw the sky. When Swara came and hugged him from behind
Sanskar: Swara, in my childhood dadi said that after death, the people are become a star. So among all of these(forward his hand towards the sky) which stars are belonging to my parents.
Swara saw him sadly and stood beside him. At that time two falling stars ? crossed the sky.
Swara forwarded her hand towards the sky to showed him these two falling stars.
Both were staring the sky with the full of stars with a little smile.
Sanskar: I love u Swara
Swara: I know. And I love u too.
The screen freeze at this place.
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WRITER:-SEEMA
35 Comments
Its nice seema dear but y u gave same story again by changing its title.This is the story of The unfold mystery OS.i think gave it by mistake.sry if i hurt u by asking.
Thanks dear and this is not a mistake. I wantedly do that bcz after post I thought readers can’t connect with my story bcz I have used outside names. So then I had changed it and about name tu won’t accept the same story twice
easily predictable story line with a pinch of tarzan the wonder car…and god too many grammatical mistakes
Jia dr for ur kind information when I was writing this story and till now I won’t think about Tarzan. And I am also feeling that it is not related Tarzan at any case. And what u told u have found many grammatical mistake on it. So I am not a english teacher if u r then u started ur career as a english teacher. If u have guts then post an article in english then tell me. And about this story it was the winner os of weekly competition which held on fb. Criticisms are welcome but not this types. So kindly further don’t comment on my stories.
Hey Seema, just a small question.!”is this a proper way to talk with ur reader?”
She just shared her pov n said you have done some grammatical mistakes but it doesn’t mean u have to take this topic to carrier level..!!;
She is a reader, READER .. U don’t need to challenge a reader to write something..
Her way of talking may be sounded rude.. but the way u replied,it’s not good.!!
Hope u got my point…
Awesome
Thanks dr
nice
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Really awesome..
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Awesome dear…… Superb scenes…… Dangerous past…..
Thanks dr
WOW…..THIS OS WAS SOOOO GD…IT IS A BEAUTIFUL PIECE DEAR…PLS CONTINUE WRITING MORE!!!IT IS SOOOO GD DR
Thanks dr. and ur appreciation its a big thing for me. Obviously I won’t stop myself for any outsider. I will write and come back very soon.
amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Nice….
Thanks dear
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Nice story..loved it..!! Thnk u.. π
I don’t know what has happened between writer and reader they shared their views. But why u were poking ur nose between their conversation. They are enough matured and having the sense how to solve their problem. So it should necessary to take part between them or interfer their matter.
Hey,Bubbly dear.. I’m feeling good that you poked ur nose between my convo..Exactly they are having the sence to solve their matters..infect here also we are having the sence to solve this matter..don’t repeat what i have done..”DON’T POKE UR NOSE BETWEEN US”..it’s not needed here..
But i really appreciate that u shared ur pov..
N about maturity..lol.. let’s not tal about that..it will be a great insult upon ur maturity… have a good day dear… Bubbly is a cute name..
Thanks dr. I know I have behaved rudely but u don’t think sometimes it needs also. She would also tell it in gentle way but she commented like oh god! so many mistakes. How u feel when anyone comment on u using oh god! That much mistake u have done. I can’t tolerate anyone who will use god to critcise to others. She is a reader so she can criticise me for my writing style or anything else but she has no rights to comment me like this.
Yes,Seema dear..sometime we need to act rude..it’s soo needed n i can understandI.As i said she could have reacted in a gentle way,but aah didn’t.. But you know everyone is not same..some people are there who comments in this way , n we writers have to accept them.. Hope you understand..
Gd mrng..have a good day Seema.. do post more OS..
Wow loved it
Thank u dr
Awesome dear. And don’t listen anybody. Just think u r the best and keep work with ur work .That’s it
sorry bubbly, we need to listen others too to made us be a better person…
SeEma y did u post it again..
any ways it was amazing loved it??
Awesome…
seema, i love it.. but hmm.. there is injustice here.. well did Laksh got punishment too ? he killed others ppl na….
Ya u r right dr but u don’t think when he was killing he was in depression. And according to law a mentally challenged or depression patient doesn’t get any punishment.
yeah.. they should threatened on mental asylum for sometime….not only for few day π
I think for this only I will give part 2? . How is my idea?