At the college
Shahana constantly stares at Aryan and Mishti seated together. She thinks “Why is this Aryan stuck like Fevicol to that girl, doesn’t he have any shame?” Just as she spies on them, Rhea’s friends Dinky and Shaina notice her. They come towards her and ask her “What are you doing here???”. Shahana tells them “I was just looking at Mishti’s dress, so pretty nah!!!” and then slowly goes away, Dinky and Shaina find her intentions doubtful. They go and inform Rhea about the same, Dinky starts “On your booji’s anniversary when I told you that I like Aryan, didn’t you advise me to stay away as your booji requires CLASS in her WOULD-BE DAUGHTER-IN-LAW??? Rhea asks, “So what now???” Shaina continues “Well, we found someone who would not fit into your booji’s requirement of “CLASS” eyeing your cousin brother”. Rhea asks them “Whom are you talking about???” Your enemy Prachi’s sister SHAHANA. Rhea exclaims “WHAT!!!”, Dinky tells her “Yes, it’s true, we saw her staring at him seated with Mishti, as if she was jealous seeing them together.” Rhea is shocked “Aliyah and Priyanka’s words flash through her mind!” Rhea thinks “My mother spoilt my booji’s life, I can’t allow Prachi or her sister to interfere into mine or Aryan’s life, If Shahana has feelings for Aryan then I should stop her before he reciprocates those feelings back, I have to do something.”
At Mussorie, Tanu’s House
Rakhi wakes up in a injured condition and realises what had happened with her the previous night, she becomes filled with remorse and grief and shouts out loudly “AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH”, Pragya cuts her finger while cutting vegetables, she could sense that one of her closed one is in deep pain and wonders “Who it is?”
At Abhi’s Office
Rishi comes to the office and asks the peon if Mr. Mehra is free, the peon sign him “YES”, Rishi comes towards Abhi’s cabin but collides with Sunny. Rishi says, “I’m extremely sorry, I didn’t see you coming.” Sunny tells him “It’s alright” and introduces himself as Sunil, costume designer while Rishi introduces himself and tells that he is an intern of this company. While Rishi goes inside, Sunil turns back and looks at him and thinks “So this is the man whom I have to spy on!!!”, he grins and goes.
In Abhi’s Cabin
Rishi excuses himself to enter, Abhi is irritated on seeing him; Abhi tells him “I have already told you the reason for which I’ve taken you back here, Priyanka is not working for our company anymore, but I’m warning you, if you behave with any woman the way you behaved with Priyanka then there will be no one worse than me, remember that!! Rishi replies “Yes Sir”, but before leaving, Rishi tells Abhi “Sir, I know that you will not believe me, but I have to explain my part of the story too right!!! Then, Rishi continues and tells the truth of how Priyanka MOLESTED him, Abhi is shocked at his words but his heart still does not allow him to believe Rishi. Rishi goes on “Even though I know that you would not believe me, I wanted to say this because your niece is framing both you and me in her web of lies, Sir and my Maasi is fighting for the just like Lord Ram did, Diwali is a also a festival of VICTORY OVER THE INJUST, so this Diwali I hope that you realise the TRUE RAAVAN and open your eyes towards justice. Rishi takes leave. Abhi is confused and gets thinking, if he is lying then there is no problem, but if he was telling the truth then that means Pragya was right and I was doubting on her and blaming her for supporting the wrong. Oh god!!! What is happening??? I need to talk to Pragya.
Disha comes to Abhi’s office to meet him, Sunny notices her and gets worried “Ma, why is she here??? I cannot come in front of her, because if she sees me then she will identify me which will make things difficult for my plan!!!” Just then Purab comes out of his cabin, they both see each other and are saddened. Purab remembers how he saw Disha with Hritik, while Disha is reminded of his closeness towards Aliyah in their Anniversary Party. Sunny sees their reactions standing in middle afar of them. Purab comes forward to talk to Disha but she ignores and goes to Abhi’s cabin. Sunny thinks “What is left there to talk, Mr. Purab Khanna when you have already broken her heart into pieces” Abhi who was still lost with Rishi’s words gets a glad surprise on seeing Disha. Disha informs him she is the one who is handling again the media for his international concert and fashion show held during Diwali. Abhi gets happy “Well that’s great news Disha, just hope there’s nothing disastrous which will happen this time, every time, I’m organising an event, something or the other just crops up, be it drug scandal, terrorists attack, kidnaps so on and so forth. Disha looks on and tells him “This Diwali I wish that your SITA unites with her RAM.” Abhi is appalled. Disha says “I know there had been differences between you and Pragya di always, but there is also strong love between both of you, so just use your heart Jiju and think if Pragya di is really wrong.” Disha leaves while Abhi continues to think over hers and Rishi’s words.
As Disha is leaving, Purab comes and talks to her, he says “Disha I need to talk to you”, Disha denies “But I don’t want to talk anything with you” She goes outside while Purab follows her, Sunny stares at them from inside and thinks “What is he talking to Ma???” Purab asks “Stop Disha”; Disha tells him there is no use following her, Purab shouts “Disha, I need to know about our son, SUNNY!!!”, Disha’s stops her footsteps on hearing Sunny’s name. Purab continues “Disha, Sunny is my son too!!! And as his father I need to know, where is he???”
At Pragya’s House
Ranbir and Aryan come there; Aryan tells Ranbir “Dude, why did you bring me here??? I can’t tolerate that sahana!! Ranbir tells him “Just chill bro, we have come here to help Prachi not Shahana and isn’t Prachi your favourite?? Aryan sighs “Yeah” They ring the doorbell, Prachi opens the door and welcomes them, Shahana comes there, Ranbir greets her and he signs at Aryan. The latter ignores Shahana and says “Hi Prachi!!”, Shahana fumes. Ranbir tries to divert the topic, “Since it’s Diwali, the whole neighbourhood is bursting crackers, why aren’t you guys not bursting crackers???” Prachi replies since childhood we both are scared of crackers, I used to love flowerpots and sparklers but never had the courage to burst, I liked always to watch them from a distance with my Mom. And this Shahana used to be really silly, she used to cover her head under the pillow when anyone bursted BOMBS!!! Aryan says “Obviously, sheep are always silly!!!” Shahana tells him “And monkeys always irritating” They start to argue when Ranbir interrupts “Prachi, why don’t you come with me!! I will teach you to burst flowerpots and sparklers!!” He tells Aryan to stay with Shahana, Aryan tries to stop him “Bro”, but Ranbir hurriedly leaves. Just then a kid bursts atom bomb in front of them, Shahana gets scared and hugs Aryan tightly with her head squeezed on to his chest, Aryan asks her to leave him, but she denies of fear, then he is amazed with his inner sensations and hugs Shahana unknowingly. Prachi tells that she is not used to burst crackers, hence does not want to, Ranbir holds her hand and says smilingly “You could give it a try”, Prachi senses rapid heartbeats and keeps looking into his eyes. Ranbir snaps and asks her “Shall we???” Prachi nods and then both of them burst flowerpots and sparklers with Ranbir holding Prachi’s hands throughout.
To be continued
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Dear Aleyamma, I’m still reading and yes you are creating an interesting adjunct to KKB. I felt that yesterday, there was opportunity to ‘flesh out’ a few more sentences describing Nikhil’s thoughts as he committed the rape. That would have offered a moment to build his ugly character and also would have made the rape more of an event, a crisis and a shameful act. You may have been able to connect a future Kiara/Rakhi scene or action to the rape, creating more melodrama. Because your treatment of the rape was so ‘light’, it (as a reader/observer) makes the rape so easily forgotten, words that simply blow away with the wind. I do understand your reasoning (I think, …or I’m assuming!). It makes me wonder if rape is such a regular event in India that people don’t ‘worry’ as much about rape until it becomes demonic as in the case of the Delhi rape on a bus or the little 8 year old girl being gang raped. Yes, I am one of those people who is re-thinking the death penalty in the cases of pedophilia and rape. It is not just the body that is destroyed when someone is raped, it is their whole being, their dignity, their identity and their future. Personally, I cannot bear the dusripidhi on KKB. Abhigya is being used, raped if you will by people with far less talent. Especially as I see the actresses who play Rhea, Prachi as not an actress at all (Rhea) and Prachi as not able to do her role well. I see Pallavi/Vikram and Meera and the Dadi as being useless wallpaper, which should be ripped away and thrown out. I am trying to read your ff without the images of the actors in my mind and look forward to the story you are creating.
Hi Akituster,
So happy to know that you are still reading my ff, and very happy to read your comments
i) Firstly, i did a have a very long paragraph, where i had written each and every single description which would have really made the viewers visualize, how the “KIARA / RAKHI’S RAPE” actually happened;
In my first original version I had made till the unconciousness of RAKHI quiet the same but after that it is not just Nikhil undressing her and raping her, infact i had written, he drags her pulling her right hand, throws her onto the bed, loosens the strings of her pants, since he was waiting patiently for these many years for this moment he bends down first and kisses restlessly her mons pubis, then he unbuttons her shirt and her braziers to suck on her br*asts, when he was satistified with the visual beauty of Rakhi’s nude body, Nikhil quenches his starvation for a WOMAN BODY by pushing his dick hard into her vagina and does not stop to push it in all his comfortable positions until his desire lasted for 5 long hours.
ii) I think if my readers would have this version of the rape in my episode, then they would have also lived in each and every moment of RAKHI’S RAPE with me, I always thought the readers/viewers have the most difficult job because they analyse themselves with each and every character of plot, but while writing this episode I felt that it is even more diffcult for an author to just imagine first then create and put it down.
iii) Frankly speaking, i didn’t flesh out this scene because I didn’t want my readers feel the same pain which i went through while creating it, and also because since KKB is supposed to entertain rather than depress, i didn’t want to depress my readers by creating a version with so much of REALITY. Moreover, MELODRAMA is a word which has been abused a lot by televion series makers, my aim is not really melodrama, crying and all those stuff like some weak WOMAN. My Rakhi/Kiara is a STRONG woman.
iv) You are right that ‘rape’ has become a regular event now in INDIA, but it would be ABSOLUTELY FALSE to say that people never think about rape at all, infact Rape has become just another WEAPON for the MEN in our society to subjugate the WOMEN, thus the restrictions increases and the FREEDOM decreases for women because of such acts, because each and every day when we open the newspaper or switch on a news channel, there is something or the other about RAPE be it REGIONAL, NATIONAL OR INTERNATIONAL
v) My major aim behind introducing this theme was to potray RAKHI as a woman who doesn’t gets subjugated but rather GETS UP and FIGHTS, a QUALITY of PRAGYA which i used to admire; and to show the society the condition of a WOMAN when such crimes are committed against her by her OWN FAMILY, which is the worst as you could imagine about the 14 year old kid in the article. I would say DEATH PENALTY is a small punishment for such CRIMINALS : FATHERS, BROTHERS, UNCLE who commit such crimes in their family.
vi) About your opinions regarding the new generation, I do agree that casting director of KKB has not done a good job regarding the characters of “PRACHI” and “RHEA”, but after i had started this ff, i did get a lot of POSITIVE RESPONSES. Many of the KKB viewers are tired of seeing the same old Abhigya, Pusha and Puliya. Moreover they too hate the presence of Ranbir’s family members and Meera which is considered to be a garbage by many. They wanted the plot of YOUNGER GENERATION to go forward which was not really happening in the original series, so I did get a very good response for this ff, and i was extremely happy to see the best COMMENTATOR of KKB, i.e., you yourself have reviewed my ff.
vii) Only one small difficulty, I had created this ff with Ranbir-Prachi as the MAIN lead, but most of my readers love ARYAN-SHAHANA the most.
good that rishi explained everything to abhi.but I hope on Diwali the truth will win n priyanka gets exposed.poor kaira.purab asking disha about sunny touched my heart.I wish sunny hears it n understands that purab still loves him.Aryan shahana hug was cute.I wish they had focused on them also in the show.but guess in the show now they want rishi shahana as a pair.pranbir bursting crackers holding hands together was sweet
In the show there is a lot of confusion right now regarding Aryan-Shahana-Rishi, but if they keep Rishi-Shahana then I think it will be a HUGE LOSS for KKB show producers, because even tho i had started this ff for Ranbir-Prachi, there were many demands from different commentators to add on the scenes betw Aryan-Shahana atleast in the ff, most viewers love their pair the most in the present i guess.
pranbir have more fans as they are the leads.its easy to get pranbir.the show has lots of pranbir moments.there are many fanfictions n vms on pranbir.but we are not getting Aryan shahana. the show started Aryan shahana in the beginning n made people like them.suddenly they are focusing on rishi shahana.so naturally we all will long for rishi shahana.only in ffs we can get them.so getting aryan shahana as a pair in your ff gives us happiness
Well, I don’t know exactly the number of counts of Pranbir fans but after i started this ff, i got comments from Aarjay 143(Registered), Milly (Registered), RaajaKumaar (Registered), Lisa a Leisa.s.Morris and Shelly2307(Registered) which makes 6 of them, describing how much they missed seeing Aryan-Shahana on-screen and they love my ff because they get to read a lot of places where the couple are together. and I don’t think anyone is really longing for Rishi-Shahana because atleast in the earlier episodes it was shown that ARYAN-SHAHANA like each other while Rishi-Shahana is just a misconception between Rishi and Priyanka, there is no reality of a relationship between the two.
I did start this ff for PRanbir but because of requests and comments from my readers i’ve given a little more scenes to Aryan-Shahana in the later episodes, so I still believe many viewers like Aryan-Shahana over Pranbir
I don’t know why a few people feel that the actress who plays prachi doesn’t fit the role.most of the people are loving her as prachi.mughda is a very famous actress .she has been loved by many people since many years.mughda has a huge fan following
Even if Mughda has huge fan following, her age is shown off well on-screen and acting doesn’t match well with the character, i feel she isgiving too many unwanted expressions, and that is why I guess many don’t like nor support Ranbir-Prachi
who said that many dont like prachi n pranbir?majority love ranbir prachi n most of the people love mughda.there are lots of fanfictions ,fan pages n vms for ranbir prachi.only a very few people do not like prachi ranbir as they are decreasing abhigya’s space in the show.abhigya are the leads so people expect them to get more screen space.compared to abhigya pranbir have less fans otherwise they have lots of fans now.also all the people I know say that mughda n sanaya are the actresses who do look younger than their age.most of the people including me n my friends were shocked to know mughda’s real age as they never thought that she is aged.seeing her on kkb they thought that she is really young
I’m one of those people. I find that she is just too old to be playing a 20 year old person. Her demeanour and her deportment are not of a 20 year olds experience. She is very ‘practised’. Even though she is Pragya’s daughter and we would expect a more ‘grounded’ or understanding type of daughter, there still should be the naivete or innocence that a 20 year old would carry. Thus acting appears contrived, pushed rather than naturally flowing. The actress who has the real problem with acting is the one who plays ‘Rhea’ or mini-aliyah. She sure is working hard to change her appearance. And she is doing a little less of the bouncing around and I guess that is good but….
Jasmine,
I would like to continue where Akituster finished even if you say Mugdha doesn’t look as old as she is, you cannot deny the fact that she does LOOK OLDER than her co-actor ‘Krishna Kaul’ which is why i fee the 6 commentators i mentioned above and some named as RV, Karan Patel and Naz don’t really like Pranbir pair
While the actors playing Aryan-Shahana aka Zeeshan-Aparna look very apt for each other, more like a made for each other couple.
And moreover, like Akituster said Mugdha’s acting is not at all appropriate for her role and i don’t think the kkb fans want more of Pranbir instead of Abhigya but maybe the KKB plot has to be changed a bit, even though there are so many Pranbir scenes all of those are just arguments between the two
I don’t have any problem personally with Pranbir cause I started this ff only for them, but then after going through all the comments i had received and thecomments at present in the kkb episodic analysis, i felt Aryan-shahana is more preferred over Pranbir
Always a tough call to have to choose between your ‘heart’ work and the work that needs to meet the boundaries of time (20 or 40 minutes), commercial breaks and a distinct audience. That sounds so daunting to me! Especially when the tone and attitude of the production is dictated elsewhere. Best wishes. And thanks for the reply!
Hey Akituster, I’m sorry but i didn’t get what you are trying to say!!!
So sorry, I could have been more clear. the choice to write the ‘fuller’ rape scene or to fit the writing more to the needs of fans and to write exactly in a manner that could be turned into an actual real live episode. So the heart choice is for yourself, to allow your creativity to roam far and wild and see what happens because you jumped fully into the emotion of the experience. For the fans, or for production needs there are limits to meet and a definite formula to follow. One way of writing is for yourself (heart), the second is for others… writing to fulfill a goal/deadline. And the tone/attitude for a production is often set by someone other than the writer… producer etc. I hope that makes sense.
A million thanks Akituster, you read my mind, writing for yourself(heart)/ and writing for a goal was exactly the dilemmic position which i faced while writing this episode, you are a real MIND READER, love you!!!
And thanks again for replying to Jasmine rahul, you have made it have way to through what i wanted to say to her.
I cannot stop that you re an awesome COMMENTATOR, Akituster
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