AT THE HOSPITAL
Suvarna : Where is it ? I kept here only .
Puchki : Are you searching for this one, Maa ?
Suvarna gets shocked to see her diary in Puchki’s hand.
Puchki : Maa, now you started hiding truth from your daughter , won’t you ? Why you did it Maa ? Why you lied to me that Kabir is not alive ? Why Maa? Why ?
Suvarna ; Beta Kabir’s dadi insisted and
Puchki : Your hands didn’t shivered when you touched Kabir’s blood stained clothes ? Itna bada jhoot woh bhi aapki beti se ? Mujhse ?
Suvarna : I know I don’t deserve your forgiveness, but please forgive me, I am sorry.
Puchki : Aap logon ko kyaa laga ? Kabir and I will run away and do marriage without the consent of both families ? If we wants to do that then we would have done it earlier. We waited long for convincing our families. But Kabir revealed his dad’s condition and ill health and also his promise and the girl who also promised to his dad that she will marry Kabir , then we decided to sacrifice our love for the sake of our families. Just that first love is so special we both wanted to spend some together lastly before Kabir’s marriage and he was taking me to the temple only for praying for the sake of Kabir’s dad and also for getting courage to move on. The accident was unexpected and I …..
Suddenly Puchki started coughing , blood was clotting .
Suvarna : Puchki, Puchki…..Shaan,
Shaan rushed inside and hold Puchki in his lap
Shaan : Puchki
Puchki : Shaan , Before losing life I want to see Kabir and his wife. Please take me there.
Shaan : Puchki, what are you saying ?
Suvarna : She find all truth, I forgot to take my diary from here, Shaan. I was bearing all pains, guilt in heart and I have a bad habit of writing diary. I forgot to take it from the table , Now Puchki knows all truth.
Shaan : I will call the doctor .
Puchki : Please, Shaan. Listen to me. I want to see them. Please….Aah!!!
Shaan ; Puchki
He wiped her blood drops with a handkerchief,but it was still clotting. Shaan hugged her and burst out in tears. Her blood drops drenched Shaan’s shirt.
Shaan : Puchki , nothing will happen to you.
Puchki : Shaan Please bring them here. Please.
Puchki faints.
Suvarna : Puchki, beta open your eyes, Puchki
Shaan : Puchki
Suvarna : Shaan
Shaan : We can’t hide truth long, Aunty. Truth has to come out some day. I will fullfil Puchki’s wish. You may please call the doctor and ask him to check her.
Shaan walks away.
AT MUMBAI
Pooja : Yes Kabir, I saw that girl with her boy friend. They both are fraud people , Shaan never commited any mistake. That girl mixed something in his coffee and he felt asleep only. I blamed Shaan and broke his trust. I hate myself for doing this. I have informed the police about them and also has send a photo to Commissoner. Police will find and arrest them.
Kabir : Good Pooja. So, that means now you will leave me, Hey naa Pooja ? You are going to unite with Shaan ? Hey naa ?
Pooja :Kabir !!!
Meanwhile some one knocks the door. Kabir opens the door . Pooja gets stunned to see Shaan .
Pooja : Shaan, you !!
Shaan : I beg you both please come with me. Puchki’s life is in danger. She wants to see you both.
Kabir : Puchki !!
Shaan : Kabir, Puchki is alive, she is my childhood friend and I know you both loved each other very much.
Kabir : Puchki once told me about a friend called Shaan who is her besty and also told me he was out of station that time.
Shaan : That’s me only, Kabir. I am Puchki’s friend. Puchki is struggling with life and death. The harsh reality is opened now Kabir.
Pooja : What are you saying ?
Shaan : We don’t have much time. Please come with me, Puchki needs you both.
All rushes to hospital. On the way Kabir tells whole truth to them.
Kabir : Dadi did this ? How can Dadi be so much curel to us ? Already we agreed to sacrifice everything for the sake of family. Why she lied to me ?
Shaan : Pooja seeing you happily with Kabir I felt now you have really moved on at life. I was also present at that party as a guest Pooja . I saw you both were lost yourselves and I felt as you started living as ideal husband and wife I should not tell anything to you and I left away.
Pooja ;Shaan I too want to tell you something, I find that you are innocent. I find that girl and her boy friend who use to trap people like these and gains money. Police will arrest them soon.
Shaan : I don’t care about that any more Pooja. What I care now is about saving the life of my Puchki only.
All reaches at the hospital.
Doctor : Her condition is very much critical. It can happen any time.
Jabir and Shaan gets shocked to hear this.
They sees Puchki . Puchki was in bed , she was finding hard to breathe. Slightly she smiled with teary eyes.
Puchki : Yeh kya kabir ? Why your wife’s forehead is blank ? Put bindi and sindoor at her forehead . What’s her name ? Maa has written in diary, but I forget .
Pooja : I am Pooja .
Puchki : Pooja , You loves Kabir a lot, won’t you ?
Pooja stands silently and burst down tears.
Kabir : Puchki, I am sorry.
Puchki : Why you are saying sorry, Kabir ? Fate has reinvented our lives and see where we have reached now. Please fill your wife’s forehead in sindoor. Ek suhagan ke maang kabhi khaali nahi rehna chahiye
Kabir takes the pinch of sindoor which was kept at the table near Godess Durga’s photo and fills Pooja’s forehead
Meanwhile Kabir’s dadi also arrives there.
Dadi : Mujhe maaf kar de Beti. I was desperate to save my son’s life and also I was much bothered about reputation and status in society. An ordinary girl like you can never be my family’s daughter in law, at that thought only I did that to you both. I know it’s a big sin , I heard even after marriage also Pooja and Kabir are living like strangers under one roof and they have applied for divorce .
Puchki : What ?
Kabir : Puchki, Earlier nothing was left in between us. We started enemity, later it changed friendship and when we find we crossed barriers of friendship we again became like that only. Pooja deserves better person than me.
Puchki : Kabir, will you able to see Pooja with another person ?
Kabir : Pooja loved your friend Shaan and breaked up because…
Puchki : I know that. But what I see now in your eyes is something different.
Kabir : Puchki
Puchki : You are now like a confused and shattered soul who doesn’t knows what to do. Pooja is your wife, value that relationship. I can see clearly in your eyes that how much you have fallen for her. But you can’t see me as single also,that’s what troubling you now.
Kabir : Puchki ,may be it’s right.
Puchki : I read my Maa’s wish also. Now I think I should fullfil her wish.
Shaan ; Puchki
Puchki : No Shaan, Don’t refuse it. Fill sindoor in my forehead. Please.
Pooja : Puchki!!!
Puchki :Kabir is your husband Pooja, I have no rights to break you both again and get him to me. Trust me , Kabir will now have no hesitance to accept you whole heartedly . It’s my promise.
Shaan : I am not able to do it.
Puchki : Shaan, please Tumhein meri kasam, mere liye yeh bhi kar do, please. Please give me your sindoor’s name and give me an identity.
Shaan nodded his head with teary eyes.
Suvarna picks the sindoor from the Puja thaali which was kept beside at the table near a photo of Godess Durga. Shaan fills Puchki’s forehead with sindoor
Puchki smiles with teary eyes. She hugged him .
Puchki : Thank you Shaan , Whole life people abused me for not having an identity. I struggled a lot to establish myself and you was my true friend who stood with me at my pains. Now through this you gave me a new life and I am very much happy for it. Maa I have completed your wish. I really want to live with you, Shaan. God has bought you to me because you are so much special and I have fallen in love with you at this moment. Shaan…..Shaan…..
Shaan : Puchki
Puchki screamed : Shaan I ….I…..love…..you….Aah
Her eyeballs swelled upwards and it became motionless, a drop of blood from her nose also stopped . She was a motionless idol.
Shaan : Puchki, Puchki, Puchki!!!!!
Shaan screamed
Shaan :You can’t leave me Puchki, Puchki, I too love you, Wake up ,Puchki. Please Look at me. Puchki I can’t lose you , Puchki
He screamed painfully and hugged her
Suvarna : Why I got my eyesight back ? I can’t see her like these, God has taken her to his paradise.
Shaan : No, No……
Shaan hold Puchki in his arms and looked her eyes which were not alive.
Shaan : Puchki, Don’t leave me , Puchki. Why you left me so soon ? Why ?
Shaan again hugged her corpse and sobbed in tears.
Kabir bend down in knees and weeps in tears. Pooja touches his shoulder
Kabir : I am good for nothing Pooja. I wasn’t able to do anything good for Puchki and I didn’t do justice with you too, Pooja.
Pooja : Don’t say so Kabir. Whatever happened it’s all fate, we are helpless before it.
Kabir : Look at Shaan, how he his heart is broken now. Just look him Pooja
Pooja : Shaan
Shaan : Please, leave me and my Puchki. Please
All of us leaves the room. Shaan again looked into Puchki’s motionless corpse. He wiped the last drop of blood which was hanged in between her lips.
That day all of were feeling immense pain in hearts. Post the final rituals of Puchki few days later Pooja and Kabir met Shaan .
Shaan : Pooja and Kabir, When the person whom we loves is been separated it gives us very much pain. I don’t need to tell this to you. We three suffered this a lot. But Pooja if we lost the person whom we love that pain can’t be healed . We can’t bring back that person to our life as that’s the harsh reality. I don’t want you both should go through this. Just for a moment I filled sindoor at Puchki’s forehead and I lived that moment thousand a times as her life partner. I really started loving her but seems she was God’s favourite child and I might be god’s bad child. That’s why I lost my wife. But you and Kabir , I have seen in your eyes clearly that you both have feelings for each other. Puchki also wanted the same that you both live as real husband and wife. Just end the distance and merge in love. You will feel it and you both will long live. Wish you both a happy married life ahead.
Kabir : Where are you going , Shaan ?
Shaan : I don’t know Kabir. But certainly don’t think that I am leaving this place. I will come back for your wedding anniversary . For your first baby’s birthday. Mujhe bulawoge, naa ?
Kabir and Pooja hugged Shaan. Three of them gets emotional.
Pooja : We won’t stop you as you need a change Shaan. But please try to come back soon. And once again I am sorry for misunderstanding you that day.
Shaan : Trust is not just a word, Pooja. It’s really important in a realtionship . I am glad that now you trust me even if it’s late. I don’t have any complaints now, we are friends and there is no need of any formal appology Pooja. You just trust your Husband Kabir. You will understand life is how much beautiful then. Bye
Kabir and Pooja : Bye Shaan
Shaan leaves. Jabir waves their hands and gets emotional.
AFTER A WEEK
Pooja : I have packed things. Kabir , I have decided to go back .
Kabir : I am sorry Pooja.
Pooja : I know Kabir, though Shaan and Puchki wanted we should live together I really knows that you doesn’t have any sort of feeling for me other than friendship. So you don’t need to say sorry. I will leave and you can stay here
Kabir holds her hand and stops her
Pooja : Kabir
Kabir : Please don’t go from me, Pooja.
Pooja : Why Kabir ? Why I should stay at this flat ? Nothing is left between us . We will meet lawyer and finalise things
Kabir : Pooja please don’t make me to feel more guilty . Already my heart is burning as fire, I really want you should heal it with your love and care.
Pooja : What ? What you said now ?
Kabir : Trust me Pooja, I really mean it. The moment when you asked me you feels scared to fall in love again itself I understood that what your heart wants to say. But without knowing what happened to Puchki exactly I wasn’t able to take a decision. Puchki’s wish to see us together can never go in vain, Shaan’s tears , our families consent everything is lying behind our relationship. I can’t break their trust and I can’t lose you at any cost. You are my life, my soul , Please don’t leave me. Please. I don’t want to break our sacred bond of marriage with an unwanted divorce. You are my life partner and I want to live with you this life forever and ever . I love you Pooja, I really love you a lot, Pooja.
Pooja : Kabir, everything takes time and perhaps fate bought us together for a reason and after much time you opened your heart to me . I got a relief that I got a space at your heart rather than living as a strange soul with you. That was killing me , kabir literally. As you said Puchki’s wish can’t be go in failure, Shaan taught us the value of relationship and I truely trust you Kabir. For the sake of families we bond in this tie of marriage, but now I realize what exactly it is. I always want you name’s sindoor at my forehead and I also can’t lose you Kabir. I too love you deeply from heart.
They both hug each other passionately
AFTER A WEEK , AT THE OFFICE
Boss : You both are working together, But Pooja told me that you are looking job in another company . What was that ?
Kabir : Sir that was just for fun.
Boss : What ?
Pooja : Yeah , That was just a prank to test whether Boss really likes Kabir or not , Hey naa ?
Boss : Really, Kabir I was literally feeling bad why you leaving in middle. There is no question of disliking you and you both keep loving each other and also do your work together
Kabir : Sure sir.
Boss : Carry on guys
Pooja : Ji
AT A MUSIC STUDIO , AFTER AN YEAR
Shaan was thinking about Puchki and was feeling sad
He started walking, as he couldn’t stay there long. On the way suddenly a girl collided with her. Shaan holds her and gets surprised to see her .
Shaan : Puchki
Girl ; I am sorry, as I am a blind girl I won’t able to see . And I hit you.
Shaan : Puchki, you came back.
Girl : Excuse me, I am not Puchki. I am Rithu .
Mean while another girl comes and take her
That girl : Sorry sir.
Shaan : Excuse me I want to talk with you.
That girl : Rithu stay here.
Shaan shows a pic of Puchki to her in his phone.
Shaan : She looks exactly like my wife Puchki who passed away Last year at Mumbai.
That girl : Sir I won’t blame you for this. Actually Rithu didi underwent a plastic surgery as a fire blast happened in her office and her face was burned severely in it. By birth itself she was visually impaired girl and she couldn’t see anything. When she was taken to hospital an old woman named Suvarna was also there who said to give her daughter’s face to Rithu.
Rithu : Deepa what are you doing there ?
Deepa ; Didi , I am coming.
NEXT DAY
Shaan arrives with Suvarna to Rithu’s home.
Deepa tells that Puchki’s face was only given to Rithu She also gets to know about Puchki’s death.. Rithu sits near Shaan
Rithu : Don’t cry Shaan. Your Puchki hasn’t went anywhere. Think me as Puchki and hold my hand.
Shaan holds her hand. Both of them smiles.
Suvarana feels happy to see them together.
AFTER A MONTH
Jabir celebrates their first wedding anniversary. They get wishes and blessings from all.
Indumathi : What I told has became true naa ? You both are made for each other.
Kabir : Indu darling, I won’t stop flirting with you.
Indumathi laughs. Meanwhile Shaan arrives with Rithu there.
Jabir gets happy to see both .
Pooja : Happy that you understood Shaan and you are with him , Rithu
Rithu : Shaan has become the light of my life , I feels everything as beautiful now
Kabir : I hope this light should stay forever
Shaan : What do you mean ?
Pooja : You should make Rithu as your heart’s light Shaan.
Kabir : Yes Shaan. God has give you Puchki back , don’t lose her .
Shaan looked Rithu. Rithu takes her stick and starts walking. In hurry she was about to fell down but Shaan holds her and saves her.
Both of them smiles and they shook their heads together
Indumathi : That’s a new beginning, Let them fall in love. Love gives tests but it never fails.
AN : I HOPE YOU ALL LIKED THIS LAST PART , IT’S NOT AN END JUST A BEGINNING ONLY . THANKS TO ALL MY READERS WHO SUPPORTED ME . KEEP SHOWING SUPPORT ALWAYS.
8 Comments
Puchki knowing the truth n when she bleeds wishing to see jabir was emotional.dadi apologizing to puchki was surprising. good that pooja informed the police about the fraud couple.shaan meeting jabir was emotional. When pooja informed him about knowing his innocence n arresting the fraud couple shaan saying that he is not bothered about it now n all matters is puchki was nice.puchki making kabir apply sindoor on pooja’s maang n telling about his love for pooja was emotional. Puchki making shaan put sindoor on her maang n confessing her love to him was emotional. Never thought that in this moment she will fall for him.puchki’s death was shocking n painful.shaan telling that during the sindoor moment he lived thousands times as puchki’s husband n started loving her was emotional. Nice advise to jabir.kabir confessing love to pooja was emotional. I an surprised that shaan met a blind girl rithu who got puchki’s face through plastic surgery due to survarna. Rithu telling shaan to consider her as puchki n hold her hand was cute.they attending jabir anniversary function was nice.when rithu was about to fall down shaan holding her hand n they smiling was sweet.loved this story very much.superb pics.but I am sad that shaan puchki didn’t unite in the show as well as here.in the music video too they didnt unite.
Have you seen their music video?if so,please write a one shot on that music video to give it a happy ending.
Can you plz say the changes you made in this story?I mean the differences from the real movie.
Thanks a lot for liking the story. Okay regarding changes, in original Kabir ( jagapati Babu ) falls in love with Puchki ( Poonam) but didn’t marries her as both families didn’t accept it. There is a scene where Kabir goes to Puchki’s home and tells her to come with him as they can marry at register office. Seeing this Puchki’s dad tries to stop him but he was arrogant and he continued shouting and Puchki didn’t says a word to him. I actually didn’t liked it of course she loves him, but he has no right to shout against her dad and she stops Kabir only that time when her dad tries to commit suicide.Then she asks him to go from her life. I changed that part here. Another thing is about Pooja ( Devayani) loves Shaan( Prithvi) who was staying as tenant at the upper side of her home , they loves but Prithvi asks her to leave him as he has no money enough to ask her hand before her parents. She thought about waiting for him, but in between her family fixes her alliance with Kabir. Then they gets married for their families and here also the same thing is repeated. After one year Shaan becomes successful in career after and even Puchki also moves on at her life and gets engaged to some one, there was no friends saga of Puchki and Shaan in original and here I added it. Pooja and Kabir grows up feelings for each other, but first Pooja only took the step to express indirect way and Kabir says I can’t promise , I repeated that scene here in a different way. Climax – Kabir meets Puchki and finds she has changed a lot and she ignores saying that what she did was just a mistake of her age, loving Kabir was not a matured decision. Even Shaan and Pooja meet but that time Pooja didn’t hugged or expressed any sign of love towards Shaan and he understands now she is in love with her husband only and asks her to go back. Finally both Pooja and Kabir unites which is also same here. But there was not a proper confession scene and I added it. Hope now it’s clear . And Nazar Mila song is just beautiful, that’s why I took Rithu from that one. Will try an OS for them after finishing Sacred Relationship and Turns of Fate.
Wow …. it was awesome . But Pucki’s death was emotional . 😢. Loved the way how you traced the last part .
Thanks a lot
Thanks for agreeing to write an os on nazar mila.i felt sad seeing its climax.
This episode was sooo emotional!!! Puchki asking jabir to unite was so emotional, she confesses her love for shaan and asks him to marry her, it was shocking. shocked to know that puchki died and shaan’s grief was so painful. jabir love confession was nice. shaan’s dialogues were awesome! rithu shaan were cute. happy to know he has finally found love! Happy to see in the end they were all friends and shaan telling he will return for their anniversary and when their kids will be born was cute and funny.
Loved the whole story very much!! It was wonderful!
Thanks a lot, I am waiting for your article The confession, please post it soon
Done! I posted it today…actually i was not pleased with how the chapter was all these days so i tried to rewrite it again and again until i was satisfied…i hope you like it..