Hi.. I’m dhar actually I’m new here this is my 1st piece of work… i hope u all like it. all da characters r same except Tej
In this os tej is not a negative character but a positive one ,who is ready to anything 4 his family
Its story begins from where janvi set herself ablaze she was saved by shivaay om was shattered but he needed to stay strong for his mom he was completely aghast ,…shivaay pacified om he assured him that as long as the great wall of shivaay Singh oberoi is there no one will be able to harm his family
Om was somewhat relaxed as his big bro was always there for him
Scene 1
It’s night janvi is unconscious she has severe burns on her body om was just passing from that room as soon as he went out someone entered da room om saw this he waited to check who it was
It was tej, he went to janvi and held her hand sitting beside her on the bed
Om was about to ask him why the great tej singh oberoi was doing there
AsHe entered da room he was shocked tej singh oberoi had tears in his eyes 4 the lady whom he never respected or gave her the value of his wife
Tej didn’t notice om he was too upset to notice him
Tej had tears ,his voice cracked
Tej : why janvi ,why did u do this to me u know that I can’t live without u den why did u hurt urself u know I can’t live without u
I know that I have hurt u a lot but just some more days and I would have told u every thing I know that it is difficult to cope up with a man who hurts u but u see it in my eyes that whatever I say is not coming from my heart
Om dint believe his ears he saw the arrogant Tej Singh oberoi so humbled
He was about to intervene but he stopped himself as he knew Tej will again start his arrogant wala drama
He wanted Tej to tell the truth
He waited
Tej continued
Janvi I will tell each n every thing to u plzz wake up fight wid me scream at me but plzz don’t stay like dis I can’t see u like dis u r my strength
I’m doing this for our son’s I don’t want shivaay ,omkara , ruddy or prinku to bear the heavy load of the mistake which we have done
U know om ,rudra n prinku will not suffer cause shivaay will take the responsibility on his shoulders to protect his siblings I don’t want him to take the load which I have carried 4 so manyy years janvi once I expose that evil Svetlana I will tell u evry thing but plzz don’t do this to me I can’t see u likethis janvi wake plzz wake up ..he couldn’t Handel anymore so he got up and he started to move he saw a teary eyed om standing on the door Tej walked past him om followed Tej until he reached his study Tej entered da study on entered after Tej and closed da door behind him
Om : why did u do this why did u lie 2 evy1 what’s that secret I saw da pain in ur eyes when u were confronting mom tell me answer me
Tej didn’t expect om to ask such questions ,he was preparing himself to hear some more allegations he was pleasantly surprised by oms behaviour
Tej : I don’t want to ans u now I’m not in mood 2 ans u just leave
Om was too vulnerable so he shouted that he wanted to know about evry thing unless Tej tells him he will not budge from there
He questioned Tej directly
Do u love my mom tell me truthfully I’m not in a mood or state to listen to ur lies
Tej nodded his head
Om: den why is Svetlana in ur life
Tej opened his mouth and said
I don’t want to hurt u trust me I will sort out evry thing in front of my whole family tomorrow
Om : how can I trust u Mr.oberoi can’t u see that the om who used 2 trust like a mad was killed by ur own hands
Tej : I know that I have hurt u a lot but plzz trust me 4 once
Om : no I can’t wait 4 de ans till tomorrow u have to ans me now
Tej : Kara don’t force me plzz
Om was a little shocked as his dad called him Kara wen everything was alright
Om: did u just call me Kara
Tej: understood what he had done he couldn’t back out he was compelled 2tell the truth as he saw so much of curiosity in his son’s eyes
Tej sighed and said ok I will tell u but plzz don’t tell it 2 anyone else I want to reveal it myself
Om nodded his head in approval
Tej started
I was blackmailed I dint have any other choice Svetlana came 2 know about da secret she had proofs I couldn’t do anything
Om asked which secret
Tej said plzz don’t tell shivaay his heart will break
Shivaay is illegitimate
Om was shocked
He said whattttt
Tej nodded
He said I don’t want this to be revealed by u I will reveal it in such a manner that It won’t hurt shivaay …..
Om was in tears in tears he got up And asked u lied 2 everyone to keep shivaay safe
Tej nodded
Om said I’m sorry I judged u in a wrong way I’m not a good son u could have told it to me I would have handledit u took all da problems on u ,u love us so much that u sacrificed ur whole life
Om was overwhelmed by his dad s sacrifices
He couldn’t stop himself from giving Tej a tight hug n tears made the way from his eyes
Tej was overcome with emotions his elder son had given him a hug after so many years they yearned 4 each other
Tej hugged him back
All da misunderstanding created by Svetlana were cleared
Next morning Tej revealed Svetlanas truth and evry 1 were happy shivaay secret remained a secret between Tej and om
Om rudra n prinkuwent to Tej and hugged him
Tej Said I think my eldest doesn’t want to come to me
He looked at shivaay
Shivaay had always tried toimpress his bade papa
Today he was so happy that he ran towards Tej like a 5 yr old and gave him a hug
It was a new beginning in the n oms life y acceptedeach other
A new morning after a lonngg longgg stormy night a sunshine
I hope u liked it ……. plz do comment
Signing off with lots of love
Dhar ?
18 Comments
Wow you sketch tej character nice super
Nice story. A story i wud like to be seen on screen.
It wud be better if u start using full stops and commas as and when required. It gives a hard time for the readers if they go missing.
Hope u take the remark in a positive spirit ?
It is good one dear…
Thanx 4 ur lovely comments
Dove thanx 4 ur comment
Harshada ,I will surely pay attention on my punctuation
Nice story
A totally different story and a fresh work which impress each and every one here……really ur effort is praiseworthy and the way u portrayed tej and omkara are beyond words….hats off and i really liked this one so much…thank u so much for coming up with a wonderful work ,….Waiting for more articles from u……dear…..Hope u will come with next one soon…….keep the gud work yaar…
Nyc
Nice story. Will want to see it in the show…..
Lovely yaar….it was truly amazing….After reading dis I really wish to see sumthing lyk dis in dbo…it was really fab….
Hey Dhar !
Your work is just amazing. It will bewonderful if story will be in the show. I really want Gul to change her writers. They are so dumb. Old ghisi-piti stories
which dont have any meaning in real life. The production house must hire some new writers or if they are not able to do so, they can pick some ideas from the lovely and interesting fan fiction this Ishqbaaz corner (I dont think any one will have problem because of this). They are showing such a stupid story nowadays. Literally HATING!!
And Dhar, I have a confusion that why did
Tej called Om as ‘ Kara’ ?? Can you please clear this.
Fan Fiction(s), I must say. All are good writers. Writers like Kehkasha, Anya, Archiya, Siddhi, Awestruck, Jerry and many more (I remember only few). I read all the fan fictions. And they are just so beautiful. If Gul does also picks some of the ideas from here, then also the show will have some interesting track to show.
Please share your views on my comment. I really want to know
Actually ,evy1 called om as o or om ,I jus thought to change a bit and made him kara
I
Dis is really gud. I wish dis would happen in the show. Anyway gr8 work.
Thank u very very much it means a lot …….. I will surely come back wid other stories
Amazing dhar….it’s really a very very veryyyyyy wonderful story. Being a doe heart Omkara fan i always felt that they should do justice with tejkara track but the writers kept ruining it more and more. But your story, it was just AWESOME…. i don’t know what to say,,,it was so sooooo great that i am spellbounded. The way Om talked to his dad, their emotional convo, tej sacrificing his life for rhe unity of brothers…. eacg and every bit of it was a way much much more that amazing. I loved it to the core. And the best part was tej doing all that for Shivaay, and the last moment where tej hugged shivaay, it was the most hearttouching of all. Tysm for this great story dhar, and plz continue..you are such a wonderful writer….☺???
Well written. It was different. Wish same in the show 2.
It would be so lovely if this happens in real IB. Isn’t it???? Awesome…